|Reviews for The Dawn of a New Day|
| sora1shiro chapter 1 . 12/22/2017
I'm sorry. I only got to the second chapter, but I have to put this one down.
I've seen others comment on this, but you really do need to check your spelling and grammar. Run-on sentences, overused words, and/or repeating the same thing in a sentence or paragraph are a few of the problems I can list off the top of my head.
What really got to me though, was how confused I was with some of the names. "Harry" went to "Hadrian," then to "Ianshortening Sirius' name to "Siri"... I thought it just really interrupted the flow.
And while your descriptions are really helpful with envisioning the story, I find your style very cut-and-dry, maybe something that could benefit from the use of literary devices like similes and metaphors.
I don't mean to tear your story apart, and by no means do I want you to stop writing. I just hope this criticism can help you as a writer overall, or if you decide to look over your work to proofread/rewrite it when you think it's done.
| Hope chapter 21 . 7/19/2017
I like your story hope you update
| dmalfoy1973 chapter 21 . 7/6/2017
good story please continue
| SevmyLuv chapter 10 . 6/23/2017
Sorry but the fic is utter crap. Nice story but the storylines and the way you describe your story is shit. You need a seriously good Beta. That's all. Sorry again.
| Delove18 chapter 15 . 2/13/2017
I love the concept of your story. The only issue I have with it is that it is riddled with a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. Which makes it very hard to read. I'll advise that you get someone to proof read your work. But apart from that, good job.
| kirsty21 chapter 21 . 11/15/2016
| animeloveranimegunner chapter 21 . 10/24/2016
Plz update soon
| fanfic madhorse chapter 21 . 5/28/2016
omg it should be a boy and you shoud update tomorrow
| babesbraves chapter 21 . 5/10/2016
Just found your story and I loved it! It's 4am here and I just finished reading the book so far I hope you update soon as it's a amazing read.
| Lil.Pantera chapter 1 . 4/15/2016
Who is Ian?
| Shinigami Clara chapter 4 . 12/28/2015
... You might want to change that sentence "just deal with the harpy first" lol Harry the harpy saying that about Bella, intending it to be an insult is a little... Yah XD
| V1X3N93 chapter 3 . 11/11/2015
What did Luna say? Sorry I don't speak French and love the story so far
| sjrodgers23 chapter 21 . 10/28/2015
please come back and update this story it was just getting good thank you
| Princess Jupiter Dash chapter 2 . 7/23/2015
Hey I really like this story but I'm a little confused on who this Ian guy is. I was hoping you could tell me? I mean are Harry, Draco, Neville, and Luna using fake names cuz from the way you wrote it I couldn't tell
| Guest chapter 21 . 2/16/2015