Reviews for The Dawn of a New Day
sora1shiro chapter 1 . 12/22/2017
I'm sorry. I only got to the second chapter, but I have to put this one down.

I've seen others comment on this, but you really do need to check your spelling and grammar. Run-on sentences, overused words, and/or repeating the same thing in a sentence or paragraph are a few of the problems I can list off the top of my head.

What really got to me though, was how confused I was with some of the names. "Harry" went to "Hadrian," then to "Ianshortening Sirius' name to "Siri"... I thought it just really interrupted the flow.

And while your descriptions are really helpful with envisioning the story, I find your style very cut-and-dry, maybe something that could benefit from the use of literary devices like similes and metaphors.

I don't mean to tear your story apart, and by no means do I want you to stop writing. I just hope this criticism can help you as a writer overall, or if you decide to look over your work to proofread/rewrite it when you think it's done.
Hope chapter 21 . 7/19/2017
I like your story hope you update
dmalfoy1973 chapter 21 . 7/6/2017
good story please continue
SevmyLuv chapter 10 . 6/23/2017
Sorry but the fic is utter crap. Nice story but the storylines and the way you describe your story is shit. You need a seriously good Beta. That's all. Sorry again.
Delove18 chapter 15 . 2/13/2017
I love the concept of your story. The only issue I have with it is that it is riddled with a lot of grammatical and spelling errors. Which makes it very hard to read. I'll advise that you get someone to proof read your work. But apart from that, good job.
kirsty21 chapter 21 . 11/15/2016
animeloveranimegunner chapter 21 . 10/24/2016
Plz update soon
fanfic madhorse chapter 21 . 5/28/2016
omg it should be a boy and you shoud update tomorrow
babesbraves chapter 21 . 5/10/2016
Just found your story and I loved it! It's 4am here and I just finished reading the book so far I hope you update soon as it's a amazing read.
Lil.Pantera chapter 1 . 4/15/2016
Who is Ian?
Shinigami Clara chapter 4 . 12/28/2015
... You might want to change that sentence "just deal with the harpy first" lol Harry the harpy saying that about Bella, intending it to be an insult is a little... Yah XD
V1X3N93 chapter 3 . 11/11/2015
What did Luna say? Sorry I don't speak French and love the story so far
sjrodgers23 chapter 21 . 10/28/2015
please come back and update this story it was just getting good thank you
Princess Jupiter Dash chapter 2 . 7/23/2015
Hey I really like this story but I'm a little confused on who this Ian guy is. I was hoping you could tell me? I mean are Harry, Draco, Neville, and Luna using fake names cuz from the way you wrote it I couldn't tell
Guest chapter 21 . 2/16/2015
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