Reviews for Eat the damn Cupcake
Guest chapter 2 . 2/17/2013
Please finish the story. I love it. I wanna know what happens.
MusicUnwritten chapter 2 . 1/28/2013
I really like this so far! Just one suggestion: try to figure out where apostrophes should and shouldn't be. I'm not trying to be nitpicky, but it does distract for the story. For example, plural of 'leg' is 'legs', not 'leg's'. And where you wrote 'laugh's' and 'skip's', it should be 'laughs' and 'skips'. Adding 's to a word means it's possessive, unless in 'it's', where it's a conjunction of 'it is' and the possessive form of 'it' is 'its' with no apostrophe. Fix that and it would be near flawless! Can't wait to read more :3
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/12/2012
me" Harper closed her mouth when alex tried to put it in "harper eat the damn cupcake" alex said getting a little angry and harper shuck her head for no "Eat the damn cupcake now finkle" alex got more angery if harper said no again she would burst and what finkle did "Finkle you WILL eat this even if i have do this" alex took a big bite out of and realeased the glue spell and put to her finger and thumb under harpers chin and made her look up as she kissed her hard on the mouth pushing the peice of cupcake into harper mouth with her tounge. harper swollowed it in shock she also felt her face heat up of embrassment but the 1# thing she noticed was that Alex was still kissing her beacause she missed her so much that she didn't want to let her go again. harper smiled a bit shyly but kissed her hard back deeping the kiss into a passionate tounge kiss, wrapping her hands into alex hair pulling her in closer.

Well thats it people awesome fanfiction use my idea if you want it just make a nice shout out for me
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/12/2012
If anyone liked it say somthing cuz i need a favor with a fanfiction of my own its a sakuhina fanfiction witchvampire if anyone is interested
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/12/2012
me" Harper closed her mouth when alex tried to put it in "harper eat the damn cupcake" alex said getting a little angry and harper shuck her head for no "Eat the damn cupcake now finkle" alex got more angery if harper said no again she would burst and what finkle did "Finkle you WILL eat this even if i have do this" alex took a big bite out of and realeased the glue spell and put to her finger and thumb under harpers chin and made her look up as she kissed her hard on the mouth pushing the peice of cupcake into harper mouth with her tounge. harper swollowed it in shock she also felt her face heat up of embrassment but the 1# thing she noticed was that Alex was still kissing her beacause she missed her so much that she didn't want to let her go again. harper smiled a bit shyly but kissed her hard back deeping the kiss into a passionate tounge kiss, wrapping her hands into alex hair pulling her in closer.

Well thats it people awesome fanfiction use my idea if you want it just make a nice shout out for me
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/12/2012
me" Harper closed her mouth when alex tried to put it in "harper eat the damn cupcake" alex said getting a little angry and harper shuck her head for no "Eat the damn cupcake now finkle" alex got more angery if harper said no again she would burst and what finkle did "Finkle you WILL eat this even if i have do this" alex took a big bite out of and realeased the glue spell and put to her finger and thumb under harpers chin and made her look up as she kissed her hard on the mouth pushing the peice of cupcake into harper mouth with her tounge. harper swollowed it in shock she also felt her face heat up of embrassment but the 1# thing she noticed was that Alex was still kissing her beacause she missed her so much that she didn't want to let her go again. harper smiled a bit shyly but kissed her hard back deeping the kiss into a passionate tounge kiss, wrapping her hands into alex hair pulling her in closer.

Well thats it people awesome fanfiction use my idea if you want it just make a nice shout out for me
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/12/2012
me" Harper closed her mouth when alex tried to put it in "harper eat the damn cupcake" alex said getting a little angry and harper shuck her head for no "Eat the damn cupcake now finkle" alex got more angery if harper said no again she would burst and what finkle did "Finkle you WILL eat this even if i have do this" alex took a big bite out of and realeased the glue spell and put to her finger and thumb under harpers chin and made her look up as she kissed her hard on the mouth pushing the peice of cupcake into harper mouth with her tounge. harper swollowed it in shock she also felt her face heat up of embrassment but the 1# thing she noticed was that Alex was still kissing her beacause she missed her so much that she didn't want to let her go again. harper smiled a bit shyly but kissed her hard back deeping the kiss into a passionate tounge kiss, wrapping her hands into alex hair pulling her in closer.

Well thats it people awesome fanfiction use my idea if you want it just make a nice shout out for me
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/12/2012
in the brain alex guessed right but she hoped she wasnt alex put her head up and looked down at harper "harper.. you've starving yourself haven't you..." alex asked in dissapointment that she hadn't realised sooner. but harper said nothing but put her face in alex chest in shame. Alex moved a bit lifting her friend in a bridal hold making harper blush a bit and had deepend quickly when alex walked over to kitchen with her, hearing mummble somthing all she heard was 'cupcake' and 'stupid harper' then she felt a thud she noticed that she been put down on the kitchen side. "alex-" harper tried to somthing but alex cut her of "just sit there finkle i cant bileve you'd somthing this stupid" alex said while sereching for somthing in the fridge and pulled a plate with six cupcakes on it "harper your going to eat this right now even if i have to force you to" she said grabbing one and walking to the squrming harper "i put magic glue on there so theres no point trying" "No alex dont i need this please dont do this to
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/12/2012
in the brain alex guessed right but she hoped she wasnt alex put her head up and looked down at harper "harper.. you've starving yourself haven't you..." alex asked in dissapointment that she hadn't realised sooner. but harper said nothing but put her face in alex chest in shame. Alex moved a bit lifting her friend in a bridal hold making harper blush a bit and had deepend quickly when alex walked over to kitchen with her, hearing mummble somthing all she heard was 'cupcake' and 'stupid harper' then she felt a thud she noticed that she been put down on the kitchen side. "alex-" harper tried to somthing but alex cut her of "just sit there finkle i cant bileve you'd somthing this stupid" alex said while sereching for somthing in the fridge and pulled a plate with six cupcakes on it "harper your going to eat this right now even if i have to force you to" she said grabbing one and walking to the squrming harper "i put magic glue on there so theres no point trying" "No alex dont i need this please dont do this to
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/12/2012
straighten up but used the door for balance which made alex get a bit angry that she pulled harper from the door holding her tight so running way wasn't an opportunity. harper squrmed at the touch of alex. "alex n-" before she could end it she fell into alexs arms and alexs arms getting tighter. alex put her head on harper shoulder and covering it in all of her hair, hidden an misserible alex behind the black curtin of hair only mangering a slight whisper "harper what has happened to you.." she said to her friend that she hadn't hanged or seen with waiting for an answer "nothings happened to me" harper sighed into alexs bone crushing comft that could break her like a stick but she didn't care beacause she needed a huge like that to bring back the feeling in her muscles. she felt her friends grip getting tighter. that she knew it was a lie and she told her that to "your lying harper... just look at yourself you can barely stand on ur own. it looks like that you.." then somthing stabed alex inside her brain
Siren Pocky Eating Chick chapter 2 . 4/11/2012
Great Fan fiction my favourite pair can i guess what scene is gonna with cupcake? well here it is

After days went past harper started to weak and sick cuz she hasn't had any to eat and alex was slowly noticing it so before harper went to the gym she would ask "harper are you ok you've been looking like crap lately" alex asked notified the seeable even max would see it

harper looked at alex and slowly back to door. "there's nothing wrong alex your just being paranoid..." harper said not looking at her friend and leaning on the front door so she wouldnt fall from her idiotic idea of starving herself with her eyes half open with black flesh around them like bags from pushing herself too hard. But nobody in the right mind would bileve that so alex wanted to test her.

"stand up straight harper" alex crossed her arms with a unsatisfied look on her face. "What..?" harper asked like the condishion she was in affected her brain functions until a second later it clicked in "oh..fine" harper forced her body to str
Guest chapter 2 . 10/26/2011
should have had stevie getting screwed by justin . other thn tht nice
walkthatwalk chapter 2 . 8/24/2011
I don't know if I liked this chapter as much as I liked the first one, but it was still pretty good.
walkthatwalk chapter 1 . 8/24/2011
I like it. I wanna see more please :)
amazinglife18 chapter 2 . 8/24/2011
i like this story hope for more:)
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