| Reviews for Stop The Future |
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   Phnxfyr1 chapter 3 . 7/19/2011 Can't wait for more |
| Cryptic Saiyan chapter 3 . 7/18/2011 I like that you didn't just jump into any romance, but implied that it could happen, originally i was a major naru-hina shipper, but now it has been reduced to "as long as he is straight i could give a shit less", naru-hina is still my favorite pairing though. As for affinities i was thinking that hinata would have a lightning affinity (i just had an idea where she burns through someones nervous system from 30 feet away) while shino would have earth. Glad with what you did for the teams, and the fact that SOME people take initiative with their teams. I can imagine Kakashi's reaction. What are your thoughts on wave? very nice dude, but still what do you think of renaming it "Never Again"? |
| Selias chapter 2 . 7/18/2011 Dude, there's no way in hell a teacher would get away with screaming that he's a demon in his face. I mean, I can see them getting away with subtly sabotaging him, maybe people could overprice things when selling to him, and people could whisper bad things about him and tell their children to stay away from him. But there's no way they'd get away with yelling about him being a demon. Other than that, good story so far! |
| L'Ahem chapter 2 . 7/17/2011 My one suggestion would be to edit this more carefully. From what I can tell, most of the mistakes are mere typos, such as writing "wanted" instead of "waited." You left letters out and whole words occasionally, too. I'll give you the same advice that was given to a friend of mine: write the chapter, leave it alone for 24 hours, and then read through and edit what you need to. That would seriously cut out 60% or more of the mistakes in your chapters, assuming they're typos and not due to ignorance of the English language. Anyway, I love time travel stories and always look forward to reading and discovering more, but if there are so many mistakes that I can't understand what has been written...well, there's not much point in reading something like that. But I want to read this one because it sounds interesting so far. Please just make it easier to read. |
| Cryptic Saiyan chapter 2 . 7/17/2011 very nice man, and i thought of a good title "Never Again" it implies time travel and naruto's desire to stop all of the bad stuff |