|Reviews for The Afterlife|
| Catmint chapter 4 . 7/3/2013
This is a really well-written fic and I really like what you've done with Saleem. Gives a whole new perspective on him and I particularly love how you brought Kate into it - it could have been really cheesy and cringe-inducing but you've pulled it off really well.
| ziva stella chapter 4 . 4/1/2013
love it please write more!
| Crazy Ninja chapter 4 . 1/6/2013
i think this was a GREAT story!
i never thought of if from this view
| Violette96 chapter 4 . 7/18/2012
This is truly unique. Beautiful, too. Bravo! :')
| Lunar Nightshade chapter 4 . 7/13/2012
I love the idea behind this story. It's something totally unique, and there will never be anything else like it. You have done an amazing job with this, and I would love it if you wrote more for it.
| Zivatjl12 chapter 4 . 3/30/2012
Yes, please write more-Ziva's telling of what happen during her time at the camp. Thanks.
| Zivatjl12 chapter 1 . 3/30/2012
WOW! I never thought of a story from Saleem's POV. Thanks.
| ringsofakhaten chapter 4 . 1/27/2012
Good story! In a very weird kind of way, I like this Saleem. Don't get me wrong, I do like to read the Somalia-torture thing storylines, but this is different and a style/concept that I really like, so I enjoyed reading this Saleem. Agreed, he is very out of character (well, we only got to see the evil him), but I enjoyed it. It was a good story. I also enjoyed the amount of Tiva you threw in there. Cute and sweet.
However, the only thing I would suggest you keep an eye out for when you write more/other stories, is to stick to one tense and person. Your fic was written in first person, but there were some few times that you switched to third person, and the very small second person here and there. It wasn't too common throughout, and I assume that it must have been an honest mistake, but I'd still watch out for that. And I did notice that you switched, more often than not, from present to past tense. Your grammar and spelling are good, but I just happened to notice those little details there. Sorry, I'm a bit of a grammar Nazi myself.(;
Good story, nonetheless. You pulled it off well, and I enjoyed reading.
| WritingFromTheSoul chapter 1 . 1/21/2012
I don't care if Saleem seems out of character, this is a truly wonderful piece of literature. I was browsing through your library again and this one caught my eye, because I don't usually see supernatural fanfic with NCIS. This one hit me pretty deep, though.
| ninjaintraining01 chapter 4 . 7/21/2011
Luv this story! I'm so glad u adopted my idea of 'good saleem' :) u totally adapted to it nicely :) people would TOTALLY enjoy reading this and ANY publisher would tell you THAT :)
| pirate-princess1 chapter 4 . 7/21/2011
I love it! I think that Salem going into Tony's dream was perfect! GREAT JOB! :)
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
Hard subject matter for anyone to be entertained with. Since the point of reading is enjoyment and entertainment I think you will find very few people who would read this sort of thing.
Any publisher would tell you the same.
Sujest you put your talents into writing more plot and pace and conflict.
| Ncisfan with Tivafever chapter 4 . 7/21/2011
That was a lovely fic :D I'm glad it had a happy ending.
Was interesting to read Saleem from a different perspective - a great idea!
I think it was a good place to leave it but if you did continue, there are many possibilities for it. Great job! :)
P.S Liked the shoutout! :)
| ZivaFan2481 chapter 4 . 7/21/2011
Great ending. I look forward to your other stories.
| earanemith chapter 4 . 7/21/2011
awww, sweet ending.
Well you can quess my answer to your question. YES please c: