Reviews for Photoshop
Cotom chapter 6 . 9/20/2011
Wow! this actually was very good! 10 all the way! it actually went above my expectation so thats great! i honestly dont know if the epilogue would be overkill or not so just do what you think! :) loved it and cant wait to hear from you again!
Elle Aitch chapter 6 . 9/20/2011
So I'll answer your questions first, but fair warning: my answers are going to be long. I'm not the sort to leave a short, simple "I loved it!" review, so I hope that you don't mind.

One: This story was really excellent. On a scale of 1 to 10, I would put it at about an 8.5 or a 9. The chapters were a decent length (not so short that they could barely be considered chapters, yet not so long that I needed to set aside an hour to get through each . . . and that's an hour as a very, very fast reader), and I like your writing style. There's a very good balance between the dialogue and details. Although the plot was a fairly standard revelation fic, it was written very well and the pacing of the story felt appropriate for the ending. Grammatically, there were no really obvious mistakes, and the one or two minor things I saw here or there weren't repeated so I just assumed that you knew the rules and that it was a typo or auto-correct error. You also managed to capture the characters very well. Just about everyone can manage to write at least a decent Danny or Sam or Tucker-it's significantly harder to write a very IC Dash or Kwan, on the other hand, and you succeeded admirably.

Two: Yes, the story met my expectations. If there were loose ends, I didn't catch them reading through it casually. Like I said, when I began reading it the story struck me as a pretty standard revelation fic, and you fulfilled the goals of that type of story. However . . .

Three: Endings, as I once read and have experienced multiple times in my own writing, are the toughest thing in the world to write, and your story proves that. Although the story itself is really well-written and you do achieve what you needed to with the current ending, I actually would like you to write an epilogue. The ending point for the story is okay, but not great. It felt a bit abrupt and awkward, like you kept typing and at some point decided that maybe this ought to be where it should end. I might be wrong about that, but that's the impression your ending left me with. If you never add anything else, then I suppose that's okay, but if you did have an idea just to wrap it up a little more neatly, then it would be worth doing.

Comparatively, this chapter was also only okay at times. The part with his powers and where he's demonstrating them for Dash and Kwan were parts that I mostly skimmed-they weren't bad, but they weren't great. I honestly don't know if there is a good way to do that kind of scene, regardless of how necessary it tends to be in this type of fic. The rest of it was pretty strong, though, and you didn't draw that bit out for too long, so I didn't mind it too much.

I think that's it for your specific questions, right? Anyway, I really loved your story and I look forward to reading loved the story. Normally I tend to only read fics on my Kindle and I can't write reviews on that, so your story was at least good enough that I wanted to get off my ass, go to my computer and write something up for you. Kudos. I'm definitely going to add you to my alerts and I hope that your next one is just as good.
WHAT NOOOOOOOO chapter 6 . 9/20/2011
Don't leave us hanging man! We gotta know how the others react! AND... Danny mentioned Valerie! You just gotta expect that Dash and Kwan are going to want to know what Valerie has to do with this!

THE SUSPENSE! THE DRAMA! THE HORROR(of not knowing)!

Epilogue! WRITE THE EPILOGUE!
vasilidor chapter 6 . 9/20/2011
this is a very good example of how something really small can totally screw up someones day. and of two idiots being cleverly stupid.
GemFairy chapter 6 . 9/20/2011
I'd rate this 10! And it was awesome! An epilogue would be awesome I'd like to see what happens! :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D :D
Lolxxx chapter 6 . 9/20/2011
Wait! This is the end?

Nooooo
Phantomgal66 chapter 6 . 9/20/2011
I really like this story, I started reading it on a whim but is really good. On a scale I would say 79%-85% which in my openion is worth reading it would have been higher but what can I say I like a little DxS in my stories so sue me. Pluse it's a tad corny but the show was corny sometimes to. Anyways I find your storie creative and with reading. It stays in character theirs no OCs and it could have happened had Dash and Kwan decided so. Keep up the good work and put you tanlents to future writting

Your fan who is more of romantic comedy person but is fine with good comedy,

Phantomgal
JuneLuxray2 chapter 6 . 9/19/2011
It was absolutely amazing- though, one thing I'd like to point out due to your Author's Note at the end, not that it's really important- Danny DID have Ghostly Wail by this point if it's after The Ultimate Enemy, since he got that power during the episode.

1. Oh my, well...I haven't seen one as good as this in awhile, so I'm not sure I can quite put it on a number scale...just assume it's a high number.

2. Yes, yes it did.

3. Nah, an epilogue would be cool!
toonfangrl chapter 6 . 9/19/2011
1.I'd probably give it an 80 or something. It was good, but Dash and Kwan acting weird was enough to drive ME crazy.

2.I'm not sure on how to answer this one. It wasn't that bad, but I still wonder why they should be part of Team Phantom.

3. Yes, you should write an epilogue. I want to see the reactions Sam, Tucker, and Jazz have when they find out about Dash and Kwan knowing, and being on the team. Or how well the new recruits are in ghost hunting.

I did enjoy reading this very much! Thank you for the awesome fic!
x8y7w6 chapter 6 . 9/19/2011
I'm really tired, but I've been meaning to drop a review for a while...plus, I really don't feel like writing a college essay :P.

1) Hm...Well, compared to the ENTIRE archive, I would give it a 7 out of 10. Don't get me wrong-it's DEFINITELY well-written-there's just a couple of things here and there that bugged me (Don't take it personally; I'm a perfectionist).

2) Um, I guess so. You see, I don't believe in "expectations" for writers. To be honest, I don't think anyone on Fanfiction holds the privilege to set standards and lay down the rules. Yes, critique and opinions are acceptable, if it's to help improve the author's writing, but you can't play "God" and go around thinking that every story must be written a certain way.

However...generally, yeah, I would say this story met my expectations.

3) YES. ADD AN EPILOGUE! Pretty pretty please? With glowing-green, ectoplasmic, ghost cookies on top?

You're a good writer :). Your spelling, grammar, and punctuation is excellent (with very minor/barely noticeable mishaps here and there), the plot was interesting to read (I LOVE reading stories when someone discovers Danny's alter-ego...), not to mention different from the usual ones. I also love how you made Dash and Kwan more than just one-dimensional characters. You gave them sensitivity-you exposed to us a differenet side of them and uncovered that, maybe, not all bullies are as bad as they seem.

I'm probably being way too over-analytical, especially for a simple Nickelodeon cartoon show; I apologize xD.

The only critical thing I would say to you is that some of the characters were occasionally OOC. Like...I don't know, I can't really explain it. I feel like there were just certain scenarios that were a bit awkward and somewhat unrealistic.

That is only my personal opinion, though. My interpretation may or may not be accurate. As long as YOU'RE confident and happy with what you wrote, that's all that matters.

Thanks for giving me something quite entertaining and enjoyable to read. There's way too many amateur, poorly-written stories in the archive, and it's a blessing to come across a story such as this. Good job on the story, congratulations for finishing it, and I hope you continue improving and practicing your writing skills :).

-Amanda
Pheek chapter 6 . 9/19/2011
Quite frankly, I love this story. Here are my answers:

1. 89, just because Dash And Kwan were OOC. I mean, it was nessasary, for this story, and their being smarter than usual was nessasary. And at the end, Danny was OOC.

2. It was awesome. Danny (like I wrote in 1) was very OOC at the end- he really isn't that revealing of a character. But all in all, it was awesome! I really enjoyed from the plot to the humor, it was awesome- I love this part:

'Danny gave him one last look. It wasn't a mean one like before. It was more like one of those Just-making-sure-the-moron-sitting-next-to-me-actually-understands-what-I'm-talking-about looks.'

I could not stop laughing!

3. If you wrote a sequel or epilogue, I would definatly read it. You will just have to he careful if you do.

All in all a great, well-written fic- awesome job- please make an epilogue or sequel!
book phan44 chapter 6 . 9/19/2011
HAHAHAHA! poor danny
Fugitive of Gray chapter 6 . 9/19/2011
Oi. I'll do the questions because this is the last chapter, and it I think that it should stay the last chapter, you've ended on a pretty good note here. As for the quality, I would say that you get points for the long chapters, the grammar/spelling consistency, the evidence of reading over, the continuity in flow and the fact that you finished the thing. I don't think I could put a number on it though, those things drive me crazy. I'm pretty satisfied by the fact that I actually got a lovely ending which tied up most of the outstanding plot points, the fact that Danny spills his guts bothers me through no fault of your own (the plot bunny currently gnawing on my ear is completely dedicated to Danny dodging questions such as these) But that's just me. Bang up job here ;D.

~FoG
dpluver chapter 2 . 9/19/2011
Still loving this. Of course the boys are a little OOC, but that's better because in the show they're too dense to be real anyway xD You portray them as more realistic jocks and they're still on the dumb side so it's working _
dpluver chapter 1 . 9/19/2011
Oh, how I love this. What a creative way to make the jocks figure out Danny's secret :D
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