Reviews for Just My Luck
Dramione Bartowski-Hallwell chapter 1 . 4/21
ha lol i love luna! :D
Princess Mariana chapter 1 . 7/5/2012
This is interesting. I think that you should continue it.
lovewar66 chapter 1 . 3/27/2012
Oh that is so cute.

~ love
xpunkfariex chapter 1 . 3/2/2012
It's cute I like it. Please keep writing
Weeping Angel Of Fear chapter 1 . 8/19/2011
Brilliant story!

:D
Blairx6661 chapter 1 . 8/10/2011
I reallr really enjoyed this, I do hope to see an update soon :)

xxx
somethingborrowed3 chapter 1 . 8/7/2011
A good story, but a couple of problems. The first one is simple, its supposed to be 'T.V.', not 'T.V', there is a period at the end of every letter.

The second one is pacing. Especially near the mid-end, where Dudley and Luna are about to kiss. I can't see Dudley leaning in to kiss Luna while pondering Luna's ignorance of muggle devices. (Although it might make sense if Luna interrupted Dudley's train of thought, not difficult given both her eccentricity and his ... stupidity.) Simply put, I thought that kiss came way, way too fast to be realistic.

I would suggest, however, that they avoid the topic of televisions and phones entirely, and let the conversation flow organically. The horse would make a great topic of conversation (you could have Luna gently teach Dudley how to properly approach to horse, for example), before leaning in for the kiss.

You don't have to listen to my suggestions, obviously, or you can simply ignore them. But I hope you read this and it gave you some thoughts on how to improve this otherwise good piece of writing.
FlashFiction chapter 1 . 7/25/2011
That's really cute :) A sweet, rather unlikely, romance!
Jemennuie chapter 1 . 7/24/2011
This is nice, and I like the pairing.
Avanell chapter 1 . 7/24/2011
Very cute! Complete? ;)
Praevarus chapter 1 . 7/23/2011
I go check your profile to see if you have any new slash up and whuuuut? Haha, but I actually really liked this. Gotta love Luna, and Dudley, well...I suppose that would teach him a lesson about freaks, eh? :)
LillianaKent chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
This story is sweet; I wish it was a multi-chap one! :)
sopheretjuliaaol.com chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
awww so cute. I always though Dudley got nicer as the series went on and Luna is adorable.
hppjdragpncode chapter 1 . 7/21/2011
Loved it! I like how Dudley had grown up. It was excellently writen. Dudley and Luna make a great couple. Excellent!