Reviews for Hide and Seek in the Demon City
XxxCheshireCat chapter 1 . 6/9/2012
I liked the story, awesome! I was waiting for someone to finally do a Kakurenbo story! The only issue is the grammer, be really careful. Overall, I really liked it.
stripesthetiger11 chapter 1 . 4/6/2012
There is A LOT of misspelling in this story. But it is fantastic. I love the short, even if it is only 30 minutes long or something like that. Keep up the good work.
Ginkyofu13 chapter 1 . 1/19/2012
Wow... I got to say, this is the first one that was badass... I can't believe you did a good job on it!
Trajectory of Simplicity chapter 1 . 10/23/2011
This could have been a really great story...except that the grammar was sooooo atrocious.

Be really careful with that! If you can't spell or create sentences that make sense, it distracts the reader from the actual story. It forces the reader to stop themselves from the action in order to make sense of what was just said.

I hate to sound so mean, but it was an actual workout trying to read this story. There were so many great elements! The suspense was there, the plot elements were there. Yes, this was pretty much a remake of the movie except with different names/characters, but you had the right idea going on, in terms of actual writing.

PAY ATTENTION TO GRAMMAR AND SENTENCE STRUCTURE. It literally hurt my eyes trying to read this story. If you would just take the time to spell check your stories, edit or, you know, USE MICROSOFT WORD, then this story would be really great.

Alas, because of the grammar problems AND ONLY BECAUSE OF THE GRAMMAR PROBLEMS, I could never take this story seriously.