Reviews for Sickness
Hitori15 chapter 28 . 7/8/2012
the story line is really good! Just be mindful of sentence phrasing and spelling though! I suggest that you reread the whole entire chapter 24 hours after you;re done, so you'll be able to see mistakes you make more clearly. Good luck!
Linnas chapter 27 . 5/26/2012
You updated! Great! I've been waiting for a new chapter. I can't wait to see how this story will end
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 25 . 4/25/2012
Nice follow up chapter. This makes for a nice resolution to the last one. The scene with Havoc and Kathy is semi-sweet. Aww, it's also sweet to see how worried Roy is for Riza. It seems as though things aren't all back to normal yet. Good work with this chapter.
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 24 . 4/25/2012
Amazing chapter. There is lots of good action combined with drama and a secret finally revealed. Your character Kcarl is truly insane by the end. Good work with leading up to that climatic moment with him.

It's interesting how you have the truth revealed to Riza here. It's also good to see that she was able to push away any hatred or regret since it happened so long ago. It made for a good read. Now I'm curious as to how she will feel towards Roy for keeping it a secret for so long.

The side story of Laura is also interesting.

Good work with this chapter.
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 23 . 4/25/2012
Very nice chapter. You did a great job with showing Laura's past and deepening her relationship with Kcarl. It really adds to her character. The part at the end where she decides not to follow his plans anymore is a defining moment for her. Nice work with writing Laura.

The scene where Havoc is trying to save Breda is nicely done. Good work with showing the danger there as they wonder if they will be able to get any help. Good work with bringing in the bit about alkahestry.

Very nice chapter.
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 22 . 4/25/2012
Quite an interesting chapter. It has a nice pace. The scene with Al and Laura is well done.

Watch your tenses. Several times you switched between past and present.

In all, great chapter.
Purrvana chapter 25 . 4/22/2012
Oh no!
Purrvana chapter 24 . 4/22/2012
Is it almost over I'm sad
Purrvana chapter 23 . 4/21/2012
Great chapter
Theif King Akefia Bakura chapter 22 . 4/18/2012
please update soon i love it!
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 21 . 4/17/2012
Great chapter. It's nice how both Roy and Kcarl are able to keep up with one another, which makes it much more interesting to read. Good work with writing all the drama. Excellent work with this story, I look forward to the next chapter.
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 20 . 4/17/2012
Now she's taking Kain too. What a low blow to threaten the people he cares about. This is a most interesting plot. Good work with this story.
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 19 . 4/17/2012
Oh no, Falman! A nice, unexpected twist. Good work with this chapter.
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 18 . 4/17/2012
What a sad chapter. It's great how you're not making Kcarl a generic villian, but keeping him human by giving him feelings and weaknesses. His interactions with the girl in this chapter is quite a contrast from how he treated Roy in the last, and really helps to define his character. Good work with this chapter.
Gothic-Romantic99 chapter 17 . 4/17/2012
This is such an intense chapter. Things just keep getting deeper with each one. Nice work with writing Kcarl's mindgames. Good work with this chapter.
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