Reviews for Vandread Another Leader The Second Stage
Guest chapter 13 . 11/24/2012
Enjoyable, and faithful enough to the regular script that reading was simple. The integration of Nix using substituted lines from other characters and mostly identical social and battle dynamics was on the whole smooth and a pleasure to observe. I encountered a small set of spelling errors and changes regarding the more exotic names and nouns, and an unfortunately regular appearance of syntactical mishaps, but found myself able to overlook them with the active voice and lively tone of your narrative. Well done; you simply need a Beta reader, and you'll be well on your way.
Vader23A chapter 13 . 8/8/2011
I enjoyed the story though you should double between what each character is saying.

Good story.
Vader23A chapter 1 . 7/24/2011
Great start. However, you should double space between character dialogue instead of having them bunched together, that way the readers can know which character is saying what.

Update soon.