Reviews for torn asunder
Morghen chapter 1 . 8/4/2011
The part of the poem was perfect! It fit the story so well.

Wow, this was really good. I felt bad for Narcissa - I can't even imagine how terrible it would be to have to marry someone you didn't want to. Her feelings toward the situation were well written and I could truly feel her pain.

Her relationship with Marlene was so good. I could see her becoming friends and then having it slowly turn into more, despite the fact that both of them knew they couldn't actually be together. I liked how Marlene was kind of a prankster, too. Hehe, poor Sirius and James!


Narcissa's characterization was amazing, btw. I liked how she didn't seem stuck-up or cruel like a lot of people write her. Especially where you added that she liked sports and didn't like pink. It made her seem less of a girly-girl and more of a strong character, I guess. If that makes any sense, haha.


lowi chapter 1 . 7/25/2011
Oh, wow, what a great pairing! :O

Liked it a lot, they were perfect together! And I liked your characterisation of cissy too!