Reviews for Foster's trip to 'Further'
Redhood chapter 1 . 9/10/2014
Please contiue this story !
Guest chapter 1 . 6/7/2014
Omg You guys sooooooo need to make more of these! This is amazing, I loved it! Please continue with this pairing. :)
89990000 chapter 1 . 9/7/2013
I don't really like it...Disgusting.
mystery man chapter 1 . 9/12/2012
you should write more its good
MORE MORE MOOOOORRREEE chapter 1 . 5/7/2012
i LOVE it! please make more (i prefer m-rated ones if you know what i mean ;)
Walking After Twilight chapter 1 . 9/13/2011
I'm sorry, but this is just plain WRONG! I'm a teacher and it kills me to see people out there who get a kick out of putting kids in that kind of position. I realize its just a story, but stuff like that really happens and is very tramatic and scarring for a child. Believe me I've seen the cases and felt the heartache of seeing what this kind of stuff does to a child.
MeAsAPillow chapter 1 . 8/19/2011
This is fucking sick. This is almost as bad as child pornography. You're a disgusting worthless piece of shit and I hope you burn in hell, you fucking nasty pedophile.
ChuckyDoll chapter 1 . 7/28/2011
I'm sorry, but how did you picture them together? They're like eight or nine. Blegh.

Now that I got that out of my system, I thought the dialogue used in the Further was well written (I think the curse words just added to the demon's anger). Great, now I'm imagining how Renai would react to her sons' "closeness". I noticed in the movie, Foster and Cali were barely seen near the end of the film. They were only seen in the beginning. Maybe you could do a story of Cali when she grows up. She learns of her brother's past and of the demon that tried to haunt him. DUH DUH DUH (sorry, I just needed to do that dramatic music!)
ScaryElwes chapter 1 . 7/25/2011
Yay, you wrote one too!

Wow, this was very different. Foster is such a minor character, and this gave him a great chance at the spotlight. Also, the idea of Dalton's brother saving him is so much cuter than that of Josh, aha. This may sound pretty twisted, but I think it's clever how you incorporated rape into the relationship between Dalton and the Lipstick Demon. It isn't exactly explained just how much Dalton is harmed in the film, but I think this gives it an even creepier edge. My only criticism is to put more detail into your writing. Don't rush it so much, describe the emotions and the settings more. Atmosphere is what Insidious is all about after all. Good work.