|Reviews for Without Instructions|
| Elle chapter 27 . 3/8
Any updates soon? :)
| Faybian chapter 27 . 2/13
great story, really enjoying it. Hope you update soon :-)
| Guest chapter 27 . 12/6/2013
OMG- AMAZING MSCL fanfiction! I am absolutely loving this, you write the characters SO well... I can pretty much hear them in my head saying everything you wrote. Please keep going! I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter!
| Guest chapter 27 . 11/7/2013
I love the way you write, it actually seems like you were writer for the series, the characters seem so accurate! Can't wait for the next chapter :)
| Deleka chapter 27 . 10/2/2013
I loved what you have written do far. I hope you complete it.
| Anna chapter 27 . 5/30/2013
I really really like how this is going! Please write more!
| Jody Barsch chapter 23 . 3/19/2013
So, question: How id he get up there? :) Super cute scene at the end.
"Is this how people spend every night? How do they ever get any sleep?" That was the best!
"I guess," she admitted grudgingly. "I cannot believe you care what Patti thinks." "Well I don't want your mom to hate me, or whatever." He found his shirt in the dark and pulled it back on. - Really nice, honest, casual, and real.
"In the morning, he was gone. Angela wasn't surprised ... When she rolled over onto the pillow he'd slept on, it smelled like him." - This was so nicely paced, really nicely done.
| pansyass chapter 26 . 3/19/2013
"the preliminary draft of yearbook is due in three weeks and i don't even have a template yet." So perfectly Sharon, and I really like how you're writing Shane too.
good girl conversation at the beginning, with everyone in character.
Very happy to see this so soon after your last chapter, hope to see more soon.
| Guest chapter 26 . 3/18/2013
Great chapter! I'm loving the Sharon/Shane storyline here. More please!
| moriahhh chapter 26 . 3/17/2013
Great update:) Happy writing!
| Jody Barsch chapter 21 . 3/17/2013
This was an iverall great chapter! really liked the hole scene of J and A's goodbye (conversation was really natural). Another great moment is Patty's "Rayanne got involved? With Kyle?" So funny, and it makes sense her mind might go there. And Angela's response was great; very rel.
"It's your body," Angela said. "Yeah, right. It sure doesn't seem like it right now."
"Naturally, Sharon had never imagined any of this. She had always had conventional ideas about having a family – she would meet someone that she couldn't live without, just like her parents, and they would get married and start a family then. She imagined likely meeting this person in college and settling down when both of them had careers. It was all so neat and organized in her head, and she was used to things going her way, but when Angela drifted away and her dad had his heart attack, the clear images of the life she had envisioned were starting to blur around the edges. She was absolutely grateful to have Angela's friendship back and she was overjoyed that her father had recovered, but things would never be the same – like her father's heart, there would always be a scar, a reminder of what was lost." Especially like the line hat she was used to things going her way.
"Did you think I was illiterate or something?" Super funny! This is I not my vision of Shane, but I love it. This whol lat exchange is great, and I like it's him he's with when it happens. (Nice job also of showing us what is happening before outright saying it, and keeping everyone's emotions in check with reality - things aren't overblown)
| Jody Barsch chapter 19 . 3/17/2013
"I just can't believe it ... That she would… you know… put out, or whatever."
"Why? Because she's my friend?" Angela demanded.
"I don't know… I guess a little bit," Jordan said reluctantly, although he could sense that he was saying the wrong thing. "I mean, she just doesn't seem like the type."
"And who is the type?" she asked sharply. "Girls like Cynthia Hargrove and Rayanne?"
"You know what, forget it," he said. "You're obviously taking this the wrong way." - good exchange, and nice that it didn't turn into a full blown thing afterwards (in general, there's too much angry-Angela in ff's, IMHO).
"You won't say anything?" she followed him to the door. "Angela, guys don't care about stuff like that. I'll see you later." - great
"Jordan Catalano was never uncertain with girls, at least not in her mind." -really loved that. That qualifier at the end is so, so telling.
In regards with the pregnancy, I think you're writing it really well; I like that they're all taking it seriously yet there's a hint if humor as well.
| Jody Barsch chapter 18 . 3/17/2013
""It's just that Rayanne… pretty much does whatever she wants. And sometimes she doesn't care who gets hurt," Angela said, not sure anymore who she was talking about.
"You've forgiven her, right?" Sharon said, as if reading her mind." - that was a nice little moment, and seemed really necessary (it doesn't seem likely to me that the makeup would be complete and instantaneous)
""Aren't you my friend?" he whispered in her ear.
"I don't know, am I?" she tried to sound teasing, as if the question didn't matter, but she could feel her face flushing." - cute, I could see Jordan doing that. I'm a big fan of Jordan getting his point across with as little words as necessary. Though I think tha line he says about whether Sharon's ever cut class woul have been said to her rather than about her.
I've never subscribed to the idea that all these kids would ever settle into one happy settled group of friends, but I did like the way Shane hit on Sharon, calling her "Gorgeous" and walking her away from he others. That worked really nicely.
| Jody Barsch chapter 17 . 3/17/2013
Especially liked the writing of Jordan in this chapter. And this line was SO like the show: ""Uh… my mom dropped a wine glass once by accident. It smashed all over the floor."" So Angela, so cute, and a nice way for you to address their differences without making it big serious 'thing'.
| Jody Barsch chapter 15 . 3/12/2013
Slowly making my way through :) Really liked the opening insight in the Tino-Rayanne dynamic, great take on it! Also loved the moment when Sharon says it's not that Angela's angry but hurt.
(Think Rickie was the actual stage manager, not the character, but this works. Nice to see the girls make up.)