Reviews for Breathe
falling into heaven chapter 16 . 12/2/2011
nooooooooo! so. damn. close...

Okay, seriously like the way you write smuttish scenes. Usually its all nauseating descriptions and fluffiness and ooc, but that was so typical will and keira and you actually made me chuckle :)

Poor keira, and poor Will! guy cannot catch a break... And I want him to know about keira, just so she knows that he loves her anyway :)

I'm such a sap :/

Cant wait for another update, as usual! - Anna
Tinkerpanda chapter 16 . 11/30/2011
Have to admit, I feel a little bad for Will here - he's kind of in the dark about the situation but you can feel his pain and frustration. I liked Keira's torn-ness. On one hand she does love him - and he her. On the other, rules, regulations and her shame of her percieved weakness for being a victim of abuse.

Anyway, lovely update. Hope for more soon.
AuntMingy chapter 16 . 11/30/2011
Wow, one extreme to the other, can't wait for the next chapter! Kind of feel sorry for everyone in this...
HappyDaysAreHereAgain chapter 15 . 11/25/2011
Oh :) this story is really great :) hard riding good flashpoint fics out there- I adore this one :) keep writing, pls update soon...
Guest chapter 15 . 11/23/2011
Good Chapter! And in the beginning when i read Killjoy i immediately thought MCR!
falling into heaven chapter 15 . 11/21/2011
okay, yayy! one, a new update *happydance* and two, a hook-up! Will's gettin' some lurveee... okay, I'll grow up now ;) but very nicely done, not ott or ooc, just perfect for the slightly delicate place will and kiera find themselves in.

seriously, I cannot wait for more :)
Mitaya chapter 15 . 11/20/2011
omg Ed needs a tracking device so they can avoid him. (scary bald man omg must contain giggles) and those short shorts. Keira knew exactly what she was doing when she came down those stairs :D
Tinkerpanda chapter 15 . 11/15/2011
I just realized your fic is categorized under Mike S. & Jules C. - ... I get the Spike part but not the Jules.

I liked this chapter. I thought it was sweet and allowed for some lovely progression of the characters. Got to see a bit more of Keira's tender family-oriented personality. I liked how disturbed Will was by her shorts. And his kind of conflicted feelings. He wants her, he cares about her, but he doesn't fully understand her. I thought the part about their highschool lives and her sleeping around, him having to buy her condoms and hear about it all second hand was pretty bittersweet because you can sort of feel his rejection. Stings.

Anyway, update pronto, thanks!
AuntMingy chapter 15 . 11/14/2011
Once I cleaned the coffee off my computer screen at Brian's comment about Ed, I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. Well done, kind of hoping she gets with Will, but I did like her with Spike too...
falling into heaven chapter 14 . 11/4/2011
oh noooo! I mean, I do adore spike, he's such a sweetheart, but I just wanted kiera to go see Will. Nothing necessarily... NC-17, but just a guesture. That said, I'll be intrigued if you end up revealing that Will and Kiera spent the weekend together to the team and their reations. Love protective Will, wink-wink nudge-nudge!

Can't wait for more, as ever :)

anna
ilovemedia18 chapter 14 . 11/3/2011
I'll beg, please, please, please, please, PLEASE! Make it a Spike story. There aren't enough Spike OC's on here and I love Sergio Di Zio so make it a Spiek story, i'd love you so much! Cheers though!
Harper Granger-Weasley chapter 14 . 11/2/2011
I always love your chapters. Poor Keira, so much going on in her life!

Haha... I don't know why, but I really don't like Will. It's weird, I know, because he's a nice, normal, helpful guy... but maybe that's what turns me off? Spike has issues with family and the death of someone close (even though Lou isn't dead in this one). Plus, Spike is my absolute favorite character, and he deserves someone like Keira...

Anyways, this is your story, you're having a lot of fun with it and I'm having a lot of fun reading about it :D

Keep updating!
Mitaya chapter 14 . 11/2/2011
Is it bad that this chapter is so much about Keira/Will, but I'm over here giggling at the Spike bits? Your challenge may become to convince your audience that Will is the better match for her, not just Keira :)

I love the line about Mario Kart sexual favors. And I love the conflict that Keira is in, trying to figure out how to have her cake and eat it too.

Thinking about those short shorts you put Keira in... why can I see Brian crying in the middle of the night (or something) that gets Keira AND Will out of bed...
AuntMingy chapter 14 . 11/2/2011
Very smooth story, playing out well! Can't wait for the next chapter!

And wondering if Spike is falling for Keira...
Mitaya chapter 13 . 10/28/2011
"it's odd, isn't it? Seeing Keira being… nice to someone?" oh man you have built her prickliness up well :) I love your Spike and Lou, they're so perfect and fun. Am looking forward to hearing about the sleep-over, although... black-belt Keira who can take Will down 10 out of 10, and who doesn't want help from anyone, asking for help? Will doesn't know it, but she's thawing significantly :)
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