Reviews for The Fourth Champion |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Is there a second part to this story? Anything else coming? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ch1 review Well, I can see why Sirius took Harry and bailed from the country. Rather, I wonder why Potters didn't do the same thing as soon as they got positive pregnancy test, but whatever. Why did Dumbles created the myth of the boy-who-lived? Why paint a target onto Harry's back? There were no witnesses or survivors besides a toddler. He could've claimed he dueled Voldy right before he could kill the last Potter. He could've claimed Lily set up some magic/muggle IED with deadman switch tied to her life that ripped through Voldy as soon as he killed her. Why endanger a toddler like that instead? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing. |
![]() ![]() Can you do a new fanfic set after this ? |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This was an interesting story. I did enjoy the note early on that said the love interest would be introduced in the chapter, and then you went on to make drop every named girl at Hogwarts, haha. Hope the story is/will be continued (will have to look at your stories). Well done overall, and thanks for sharing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() way to slow for me but the writing is decent so i imagine others would enjoy this story |
![]() ![]() ![]() (Ch9 continued review) Plus, ch9 had a promising A/N about something scandalous happening that might be a turn off for readers. I expected, what, smut? Minor character death? Off screen sexual abuse? Dream vision with Voldi torturing someone? Nope. We got heart-to-heart talk with drunken Snape and a prank on Slytherin. I'm not even sure which one of those was supposed to be "scandalous". |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm dropping this. It's not a bad story, but it's not a good story either. It's fine, but just fine and that's it. Not interesting, engaging, original, shocking or salacious. Or any other epithet. In fact, I don't understand the purpose, the selling point of this story at all. Isn't it basically a canon rehash but with changing Harry's upbringing from Dursleys to Sirius Black? Plus bumping up his introduction to Hoggywarts to Year 4? Other stories have romance, or angst, or time travel, or slice-of-life from unusual POV or humour/bashing, or broader use of magicks, or OC like female!Harry and WBWL. This one is just a vanilla slice-of-life with canon-like POV and storyline. Pass. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Pure blood Daphne has given pair of jeans to half-blood Tracey? Shouldn't it be the other way around? |
![]() ![]() ![]() 1) If the child was taken away, why he was still known as Boy who lived to the public? Why not simulate his death? He already got new identity anyway. Why not "Boy who died exploding into He who must not be named face killing him in the process"? 2) About new identity Vs old. How does Goblet get Harry if the child is known to everyone by the name, and for much longer than he was alive? Can you confirm that Goblet indeed picked him out? 3) James Black, really? Bachelor Sirius Black flees the country after his closest friends die and then he re-emerges with his new "son"? This is extremely sloppy, if they allegedly tried to keep Harry under wraps, why so insultingly low effort then? Underwhelming start, but let's see how it goes from here. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oops Mark goes to school with James Black, and opens a letter with "Harry"? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a really cool story. I hope someday we get to see where you would take it from here. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Such a good story. I think I liked it more this time than the first time I read it. Too bad your muse never gave you an idea for the sequel. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So many stories written this long ago were made by children, it's great to read a story with adult 'things' from an adult. Love, great friends and sacrifice are adult things. Well... Off to the next adventure! |