Reviews for His and Our Love
Agena K chapter 5 . 2/22/2013
Wow! Sigh... The Trial? I hope it's like that or better
Ally chapter 2 . 1/12/2013
(: FINALLY. Just FINALLY. The way you write is beautiful by the way, and I love all of these chapters. They're just so genuine and true.
Annie chapter 1 . 10/7/2012
Your writing could really use some work it makes sense though most people who believer in god are pretty stupid otherwise they wouldn't. Christians are the most annoying though
Guest chapter 1 . 9/20/2012
This is so sweet!
Carol Molliniere chapter 2 . 6/23/2012
368235 chapter 3 . 6/7/2012
finally, THIS is a beautiful description of love, romance, passion, all the things God made for us to feel for Him, I LOVE that you've done this, good for you. ignore anyone who won't understand the Bride metaphor, it's not their time to grasp it. i'm latin american, so in our culture our prayers to Christ and Blessed Mother are like intimate love songs, and even here in the u.s. where I live I can't tell me how many clergymen, priests, Bishops have urged us to "fall in love" with Christ. it's using Christianity as a pulpit on which to judge and condemn others that breaks the sacred bond between God and we his beloved people. really beautiful job, I'd always thought of writing something about Christ and His Bride, the Church, but you beat me to it and I give you all the credit if I ever try a similar thing. you are very blessed, thanks for writing this xox
Jyoti chapter 1 . 12/25/2011
Wow this is great I love it :)
Child of the True King chapter 2 . 11/12/2011
Uh, can I have something cleared up about that last chapter? 'Cause I'm confused... you said God kissed the girl/woman?

Im sorry, but how does that work?
Whisperwill chapter 1 . 8/10/2011
Whisperwill like. :) This was a very poignant, touching story. I especially love the capitalization of "You," which lends the proper respect to the Name.

The following are some aspects that needed correction, as I saw it. I hope you don't mind critiques.

1. "...Who had forever before had been One." You used "had" twice, but you only need to use it once.

2. "...who had cause You to cry." I think the word should be "caused" instead of "cause."

3. "As You send You Creation to eternal judgment." It should be "Your Creation" and not "You Creation." Also, this is a fragment rather than a sentence, but I don't think it should necessarily be made into a complete sentence. Being a fragment gives it more forcefulness, I think. And by the way, why did you capitalize "Creation"?

I have other questions, too. If you believe in Jesus, then why do you say that Jesus will "send some of my brothers and sisters away from you forever"? Are not all Christians brothers and sisters, and don't all true Christians who believe in Jesus Christ go to heaven?

And again, I love this story. My favorite part is the third paragraph, where you change point of view: the Son cries, but then the Father cries for the Son. Because they are One. And the story's ending was beautiful! Very well written.
tangune chapter 1 . 7/31/2011
i love bible storys
GirlWaterShaman chapter 1 . 7/31/2011
Though now I'm depressed-loved ones ending up in hell does that-this was well written.