Reviews for A New Ending
Ralph Brew chapter 1 . 2/27
I think this story is good but needs a lot more development and it will need follow up chapters too. Its a little scary having an exhausted child have to relay mental projections about intent to commit suicide. So this needs resolution and work.
Ralph Brew chapter 1 . 9/5/2014
Well that was depressing. Michael is considerate and would not tell all that stuff to Petra directly. Also remember that when Petra is projecting a thought halfway round the world, that everyone has to close their minds? This did not figure in your story. Also they would have maintained some contact with Michael for a period of time after leaving Labrador, so some back story about that during their journey would have been good before they landed.
Wetstar chapter 1 . 5/27/2013
Aww, poor Rachel and Michael :(
Guest chapter 1 . 10/28/2012