Reviews for Serenia
Melissa'sJasper01 chapter 17 . 7/7/2012
Im Confuseddddddddddddd!
Melissa'sJasper01 chapter 16 . 7/7/2012
Kay, Now I'm Going To Go... -_- This I Mean GRRRRR
Melissa'sJasper01 chapter 15 . 7/7/2012
Umm, Really They All Die? Well... That's Very Intersting...I Think And I'm Being Honest That You Have Talent Your A Good Writer But...But... But...BUt...
Melissa'sJasper01 chapter 14 . 7/7/2012
Yepp, I Officially Don't knoww Where Your Goingg With This, And It's Just... I Hate Bella Now, Really I Mean... Really I Do
Melissa'sJasper01 chapter 13 . 7/7/2012
Ok, I Likedd it At First, Now, Well Now I...I... Well I'm Starting To Just...
Tacos chapter 16 . 4/6/2012
So confused?
annie chapter 14 . 2/29/2012
teambellaedward chapter 12 . 2/8/2012
teambellaedward chapter 1 . 11/24/2011
Stellalein chapter 11 . 11/24/2011

It has been improved, really! There is a better flow now.

I still noticed that you use a lot of I in the beginning, but now it isnt as often and it didnt borther me as much as in the beginning. Still I think you should do more describing on Bellas feelings, it is not bad, but short so you cant really get into it as a reader.

I know it is very hard to discribe feelings and I also struggle with that and I bet many would agree.

If there any grammmar mistakes or spelling, bear with me Im not a native speaker

Stellalein chapter 10 . 11/14/2011
I really ask myself why her Mother is soo super cold and try everything to stop Bella from speaking with other people.

I cant dicide can I really call it love...But Bella seemed at the beginning really obsessed about her mom.

Edward is cute though, he had not stop trying to talk to her and the idea with the letter. I like. I really hope that they come together. your styl of writing is good, though I would discribe more. ALso I noticed that you often use I at the beginning. But all in all its is a good story. I like it )
8leletouie8 chapter 8 . 10/17/2011
cant wait to read what happens oh update
SoundsLikeAPersonalProblem chapter 8 . 10/16/2011
Love it this story is so unique update soon
Guest chapter 6 . 9/3/2011
I like it longer chapters would be nice keep going
DesertRose92 chapter 5 . 9/3/2011
Nice chapter! I am still very curious about what Renee does or what she is. Could you do something in her POV? THanks! And congrats on your new baby brother!
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