|Reviews for Endless Summer|
| Guest chapter 6 . 2/7/2019
Best fucking story ever
| GabbyGabGabs chapter 6 . 1/11/2019
Okay, I’m like years late, but THIS was f&%king GREAT. Oh my god, I loooooooved this, BEAUTIFUL writing too, thank you so much for this.
| Maria chapter 4 . 5/18/2018
I officially don’t like Gary’s dad he’s so shady
Also I just remembered YOU PAIRED JIMMY AND GORD UP RHEJEB THIS FIC HAS TWO OF MY FAVE OTPS
Man when will Gary and Pete just...get married
Like... I want Petey to just CONFESS just say everything explain something to Gary yknw smh
| Maria chapter 3 . 5/18/2018
I like how you kept it realistic, yknw I was expecting Petey’s parents to be warm to Gary but I was very pleasantly surprised when they were both hot very happy with him.
Another thing, wow Gary is just so thirsty
I was laughing the whole time when they were making out in the living room bcs I just imagine the dog being like “?werent they like making out a minute ago?now they fight?”
God they’re so Angsty and so perfect I love his ship
| Maria chapter 2 . 5/17/2018
The writing is superb but there seems to be a problem. I don’t really know why you do it but you switch between point of views, it’s creative, yes, but third person is usually better. Also, writing in more than one povs usually ends up in confusion and I can see moments where two different povs are colliding.
They take the effect of the story away. I mean damn my feels get hurt.
But Petey I don’t underSTAND U you want Gary but you don’t want Gary?
I think he wants it to be consensual and slow and romantic and not about control but Gary is forceful and rough and sloppy and it’s ALWAYS about control and ejdjdjdj oh my god my feels hurts
| Maria chapter 1 . 5/17/2018
I don’t know why I’m sobbing. The...it’s...so Angsty. The Smut was SO goodbut gary WHY ARE YOU LIKE THIS
AND OMG THE ENDING WAS SO UNEXPECTED GOD IM SO EXCITED FOR THIS I HOPE ITS COMPLETE PLEASE
| Kimnd chapter 1 . 1/9/2016
Okay. I'll be the first to admit that this story isn't really for me. Never been a fan of porn-without-plot type dealies. So you probably won't be surprised that I think this relationship is not well set up. Starting the story after a sexual relationship has already formed doesn't make much sense to me, since it skips a lot of character development that the reader doesn't get to see. A missed opportunity, but an understandable one.
Now, let's talk about what's good in this story. I liked the introduction quite a lot. It establishes Pete's character as unassuming and generally a nice person in a way that I've never seen. Kudos for originality!
Gary's intro is also an excellent way to show the reader just what kind of person he is. The talk about fire and burning is a great image, and one that ties in nicely to Gary as a person- uncontrollable, all-consuming, and dangerous if not handled properly.
The most compelling part of this first chapter for me was the bit about Gary's mind being focused only on Pete. I've that in other stories involving this pair, but it's always been one of my favorites. As a person with ADHD, the focus that comes from truly getting into something is a very powerful feeling, and it's something that makes sense for Gary as a character and thematically as a villain. ...However, I think there were better ways for this to be expressed in your writing. Gary thinking about setting people and things on fire was a great introduction to him, but after that his train of thought is mostly pretty tame. Showing how his mind flits around constantly would've given the scene where he's focused on Pete a lot more weight.
Speaking of that bit, let's talk about the sex scene. One of my predominant thoughts about this section was that I really hope there are plans to improve the sex ed at Bullworth because these two clearly have no idea how safe sex works. And they were doing all this in a dirty bathroom stall. *shudders* The other dominant (ahaha) thought I had was that neither of them knows what consent is. Which is understandable- 2006 was long before they revised the definition of legal consent. Plus, it's Gary fucking Smith, a terrible human being. I doubt he'd care that he's raping Pete much anyhow.
All in all, this has a lot of good ideas, but I couldn't enjoy it because of the execution. The whole situation feels forced (ahahahahahaha), distracting me with the timeline of events before the start of the game. I kept wondering how Gary and Pete had managed to hook up in the, if I'm being generous, four weeks before Jimmy showed up. Then I had to remind myself that not everybody thinks that Pete and Gary had met for the first time that same school year. After that I had to wonder why, at only one point in the whole story, is Pete referred to as "Petey". And then I just kept asking myself a lot of questions that were clearly not what the story was about. But that happens to me a lot, so it probably didn't bother most people.
I know I just spent a lot of time ragging on your story, but it has a lot of potential! You've probably gotten a lot better since starting this, so most of this is probably irrelevant anyhow. Thank you for reading, have a nice day, etc!
| LoVeLyAbNoRmAl chapter 6 . 12/12/2015
I have no words to express how amazing this story was, it blew me away. Your very talented.
| MPoutine chapter 6 . 11/23/2015
Well that was one of the best pieces of fiction I've ever read.
| MPoutine chapter 5 . 11/23/2015
What an ending...
| MPoutine chapter 4 . 9/6/2015
(Laughing like a maniac) Wow, have to say I enjoyed this more than I thought I should, since it has so many emotions it's driving me to feel.
| MPoutine chapter 2 . 9/4/2015
Hell yeah I'm a fangirl.
| MPoutine chapter 1 . 9/4/2015
He thinks he is free from the G? Petey I thought you were smart!
| Rekiah chapter 6 . 5/24/2015
That was a really good story! I rarely find good stories on fanfiction
| spandex.exe chapter 6 . 6/6/2014
You've definitely achieved your goal.