|Reviews for The Game Begins|
| Meredith chapter 1 . 4/16/2013
I just finished this story and was so disappointed there wasn't more. It sounds like the start of an excellent story. I hope you write more. Please and thank you.
| speederina chapter 1 . 8/7/2011
I would love if you wrote more! The premise sounds great, and your writing is very good. The constraint of those certain words made it awkward in some spots, but obviously you wouldn't have that problem if you wrote more chapters.
| AiramS chapter 1 . 8/7/2011
Yes, you should defiantly write a entire Hollow Hill-story. I love them, and your writing is impressivly good.
| ShearViscosity chapter 1 . 8/6/2011
Nice use of all the words.
I would be interesting to see it expanded. Being technophobic wouldn't be that big of a deal in the goblin kingdom, but being agoraphobic certainly would. Especially with the large groups of goblins all trying to get a glimpse of their new queen.
It would be interesting to see Marak dealing with her, especially since he seems to have a predator type personality.
Overall good job with the story, and hopefully you'll write some more.
| BalletGirl98 chapter 1 . 8/6/2011
You should expand this after the challenge! New stories are rare in this fandom.