Great story! I really liked experiencing Dresden's world from another wizards perspective, especially an oriental one. We get so many references to Eastern wizards in Butcher's novels but haven't gotten much interaction with them in detail. Looking forward to more stories from you.. :)

I really do not understand the point of this story. The only thing that makes the Dresden Files novels at all interesting is that they are about Harry Dresden. This story doesn't even have that much.

This is great. Reads like a rough draft of something Butcher might write.

Fey can't lie. She said she feels helpless to do anything but she's easily manipulating him. It seemed contradictory.

awesome

cool i like the little clay thing guy and the turning things on instead of breaking them was neat looks like a cool fic

This is beyond amazing. It reads EXACTLY like a real Dresden Files novel - except for the main character not being Harry Dresden, of course - and with some minor editing (a few spelling, punctuation, and syntax errors) could easily fit into the existing canon as a legitimate Dresdenverse book.

A few of the highlights:

Masterful way of setting the book into the established timeline - obviously Changes hasn't happened yet, but the seamless title-drop for Small Favor at the end places the story somewhere around Turn Coat. Well done.

Left-handed magic. Wonderful concept, totally fitting with the Eastern influence on the magic, once again seamlessly integrated into the world. Not part of existing Dresden canon, but should be.

Devil's Advocates. Love the idea, fabulously integrated into the world (are we picking up on a theme here?). Not a part of existing Dresden canon, but again, should be.

The deliberate similarities are great too, giving us a sense of familiarity while still being unique enough to stand on their own. George Harry, of course, but with a twist. A lot of twists. Emma Murphy, with a twist. Jeeves Bob, with a twist.

It's also a perfect first novel as a setup for a continuing series, with the main conflict satisfactorily resolved but several lingering questions to pull you back. Where is George's father and what is he up to? What is Jeeves actually? Will he and Emma or won't they?

Easily one of the best fanfictions ever written. Phenomenally done. Jim Butcher himself ought to read it.

Hmm. I like the writing, but it feels a little slow. Maybe you could have cut the police station scenes down a little? As of now, I'm not really up for continuing an OC story that seems to be going along the same lines as the Dresden story. Orphan, detective (plotline), gripes about money. Has the same voice as Dresden.
I would have also liked to see less displays of Jeeves' talent and more of Gorge's. It not really compelling when the main character gets stuff done for him.
I still like the writing, and maybe I give fanfiction less of a chance to pick up than real books. I may come back later and try to read again if I feel like I need to know how this ends.

Cool story. I admit that I started skipping some parts after George signed the Contract, but the last three chapters were very interesting. I especially enjoyed the Tibetan concepts of magic.

I read this story a while ago, but hadn't left any comments.

Still, I just wanted to say that this was an *amazing* story, and really should be more widely known and reviewed!

Is there any chance you're working on writing anything else, by any chance?

Amazing just amazing!

i fucking loved this man. Cheers

I really enjoyed this. While it felt like Dresden files, it did not feel like a cheap rip off of Harry himself. I especially your use of the magic system such as potions.

Marvelous story.

I was almost totally sold with the alterations you made to Butcher's strain of magic in this, except for a couple of times where "you'd think Harry would have mentioned some of these things" before I remembered that this is both a spin off and a different variety of magic. For instance, George using Tibetan as his casting language when he presumably is fluent or conversant in it, though I came to a conclusion that perhaps it's tied up in the recent theocracy business. The left-handed thing is also kind of jarring when it comes up, but it adds rather than subtracts.

Speaking of the Tibet choice, your background on the invasion of Tibet was interesting... personally I'm anti-feudalism, but there are certain things wrong about the effects of the invasion - like the cultural imperialism involved. But I won't get too into the politics. George's background in particular was nice and coherent, though there's a big loose end in plot there. The Circle was clever, and I rather liked the climactic dream sequence. The second-last dream in particular was just spot-on.

Good to see an Asian Dresden Files tale not involving the Jade Court business, by the way.

I also wonder (this is all mostly to myself) how much of an alt-timeline this is, what with the broadsword in Ch21 - at least the events of Dead Beat (re: Luccio's magic) had to have been different, assuming this is set before Changes, with corresponding butterflies.

Combined with the family plot line, I also wonder if the rune plot line is a lead-in for a potential sequel... or just a case of not all plots being resolved like in real life.

This was awesome. No other words for it. I am so glad you took the time to write and post it here, because it truly does read like a book in the Dresden series. It can be tough to make a hero just as intriguing as Dresden, but you pulled it off. George definitely has some interesting qualities to him, and I get the feeling that we only discovered a few of them. Is there a another sequel in the works? :) And Jeeves, well. That little guy is just so endearing. Who wouldn't want a Jeeves?

Fantastic story. Again, thanks so much for sharing it. Totally enjoyed it.
-Kuro