|Reviews for Fair Vote|
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/19
| Dls chapter 1 . 7/19
cool i like the little clay thing guy and the turning things on instead of breaking them was neat looks like a cool fic
| Guest chapter 1 . 6/18
This is beyond amazing. It reads EXACTLY like a real Dresden Files novel - except for the main character not being Harry Dresden, of course - and with some minor editing (a few spelling, punctuation, and syntax errors) could easily fit into the existing canon as a legitimate Dresdenverse book.
A few of the highlights:
Masterful way of setting the book into the established timeline - obviously Changes hasn't happened yet, but the seamless title-drop for Small Favor at the end places the story somewhere around Turn Coat. Well done.
Left-handed magic. Wonderful concept, totally fitting with the Eastern influence on the magic, once again seamlessly integrated into the world. Not part of existing Dresden canon, but should be.
Devil's Advocates. Love the idea, fabulously integrated into the world (are we picking up on a theme here?). Not a part of existing Dresden canon, but again, should be.
The deliberate similarities are great too, giving us a sense of familiarity while still being unique enough to stand on their own. George Harry, of course, but with a twist. A lot of twists. Emma Murphy, with a twist. Jeeves Bob, with a twist.
It's also a perfect first novel as a setup for a continuing series, with the main conflict satisfactorily resolved but several lingering questions to pull you back. Where is George's father and what is he up to? What is Jeeves actually? Will he and Emma or won't they?
Easily one of the best fanfictions ever written. Phenomenally done. Jim Butcher himself ought to read it.
| Yllems chapter 2 . 1/10
Hmm. I like the writing, but it feels a little slow. Maybe you could have cut the police station scenes down a little? As of now, I'm not really up for continuing an OC story that seems to be going along the same lines as the Dresden story. Orphan, detective (plotline), gripes about money. Has the same voice as Dresden.
I would have also liked to see less displays of Jeeves' talent and more of Gorge's. It not really compelling when the main character gets stuff done for him.
I still like the writing, and maybe I give fanfiction less of a chance to pick up than real books. I may come back later and try to read again if I feel like I need to know how this ends.
| TroyWeb chapter 22 . 12/16/2014
Cool story. I admit that I started skipping some parts after George signed the Contract, but the last three chapters were very interesting. I especially enjoyed the Tibetan concepts of magic.
| Garlak chapter 1 . 3/27/2014
I read this story a while ago, but hadn't left any comments.
Still, I just wanted to say that this was an *amazing* story, and really should be more widely known and reviewed!
Is there any chance you're working on writing anything else, by any chance?
| Guest chapter 22 . 1/9/2014
Amazing just amazing!
| Sameal-the-lost chapter 22 . 11/21/2013
i fucking loved this man. Cheers
| BajaB chapter 22 . 10/9/2013
I really enjoyed this. While it felt like Dresden files, it did not feel like a cheap rip off of Harry himself. I especially your use of the magic system such as potions.
| battybiologist chapter 22 . 7/30/2013
I was almost totally sold with the alterations you made to Butcher's strain of magic in this, except for a couple of times where "you'd think Harry would have mentioned some of these things" before I remembered that this is both a spin off and a different variety of magic. For instance, George using Tibetan as his casting language when he presumably is fluent or conversant in it, though I came to a conclusion that perhaps it's tied up in the recent theocracy business. The left-handed thing is also kind of jarring when it comes up, but it adds rather than subtracts.
Speaking of the Tibet choice, your background on the invasion of Tibet was interesting... personally I'm anti-feudalism, but there are certain things wrong about the effects of the invasion - like the cultural imperialism involved. But I won't get too into the politics. George's background in particular was nice and coherent, though there's a big loose end in plot there. The Circle was clever, and I rather liked the climactic dream sequence. The second-last dream in particular was just spot-on.
Good to see an Asian Dresden Files tale not involving the Jade Court business, by the way.
I also wonder (this is all mostly to myself) how much of an alt-timeline this is, what with the broadsword in Ch21 - at least the events of Dead Beat (re: Luccio's magic) had to have been different, assuming this is set before Changes, with corresponding butterflies.
Combined with the family plot line, I also wonder if the rune plot line is a lead-in for a potential sequel... or just a case of not all plots being resolved like in real life.
| KuroKage1717 chapter 1 . 4/22/2013
This was awesome. No other words for it. I am so glad you took the time to write and post it here, because it truly does read like a book in the Dresden series. It can be tough to make a hero just as intriguing as Dresden, but you pulled it off. George definitely has some interesting qualities to him, and I get the feeling that we only discovered a few of them. Is there a another sequel in the works? :) And Jeeves, well. That little guy is just so endearing. Who wouldn't want a Jeeves?
Fantastic story. Again, thanks so much for sharing it. Totally enjoyed it.
| storybookknight chapter 22 . 4/1/2013
This is pretty brilliant stuff. The best DF fox on the site, and probably one of the better stories I've read here overall. I'd be interested to read any of your other work!
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 3/2/2013
This is an amazing piece of work man. The amount of detail in it.. You could certainly have gone pro. Loved how you kept to the spirit of the Dresden Files while not even basing the story in Chicago or writing about Dresden himself as a protagonist. Any possibility of a sequel?
| theevilouterspacechicken chapter 22 . 12/21/2012
Holy Crap. This fic is Amazing. I would not be surprised if you were actually Jim Butcher. Everything is just so... authentic. This definitely needs more publicity, you should post this on some forums. Oh and a sequel would be awesome and much appreciated. Hope to see more of your work soon!
| kostigan chapter 1 . 10/4/2012
I can see you're a pro writer man, because this was truly great. Too bad Dresden Files community here isn't bigger and this story has so few reviews. I can only hope that that won't demotivate you too much and you'll write a sequel.