Reviews for The God Particle
Blackgryphon91 chapter 37 . 9/20/2012
Yes yes YES! Love the chapter and love the ending. I had a feeling and hoped that those two just might happen but you dealed it out perfectly! Great job and keep it up! Can't wait for more.
Leante chapter 37 . 9/20/2012
Well, that was... sudden.
PootisHolliday chapter 37 . 9/19/2012
Umm... Fermilab is a real place.
Just so you know :P Anyways, chappie's good. c:
Omnicron25 chapter 37 . 9/19/2012
This was an excellent chapter! I must say, I never thought of Celestia as the cleaning type, but I tend to do the same thing, the cleaning anyway, when I don't wish to think about something. I wonder what she thought about what she did see of the history of the United States other than the fact it was "fascinating" and the patriarchal issue. I know it is probably best up to speculation about what she thought, but the thought still intrigues me. Her reaction to (Which sport is that by the way? Kick boxing?) was quite apt as well as hilarious, and the horror movie even more so. Celestia's initial reaction to it I found absolutely hilarious.

Eric's reaction in turn is interesting as well. I find his character coming through very well. The note on patriarchy vs. matriarchy was very well implemented and I must say the discussion over James's future was well written on both fields. His fumbling around Celestia is almost comical. It's a good breather around some of the more serious moments. Good work on that.

On to Twilight and James... I am glad he finally said it. They have been beating around the bush around it too long. I'm glad Spike seems to be doing okay; I feel sorry for the little guy.

Alright, enough rambling, on to the gripes. First, there is a minor misspell during the gender dominance conversation: "makes are expected to defer to females" I believe you planned on putting 'males' instead of 'makes'. Second... okay well there isn't a second as far as I can see.

Well written! Have the best of luck, and I look forward to the next chapter!
MorbidWerewolf chapter 37 . 9/19/2012
Yay! Twilight and James are now my OTP. Seriously though, that was a sweet ending to the chapter. Also when Celestia looked at the TV horrified, I seriously though for a moment she stumbled upon pornography. Wouldn't that have been traumatizing? Haha

Looking forward to the next chapter and what becomes of James and Twilight and the others.

The Morbid Werewolf
mooneyboys chapter 37 . 9/18/2012
Talk about bombshell after bombshell in this chapter. Keep up the good work though! Can't wait for next chapter
ezequieltriple7 chapter 37 . 9/18/2012
nice little treat there at the end keep it coming
Beastial Moon chapter 37 . 9/18/2012
Awwww, that was such a sweet chapter!
Setokaiva chapter 4 . 9/13/2012
Whoa. I'm really starting to love your writing style... very, very engrossing. Looking forward to reading the rest of this enthralling fanfic.
The Mad shoe1 chapter 36 . 9/13/2012
New chapter! Yay!
Omnicron25 chapter 36 . 9/13/2012
WOW! This is, by far, the most tense chapter I've read. I think I literally held my breath through almost the entire thing. This is also by far probably the darkest chapter you've produced so far too. I knew it would get dark fast, but wow this really kicked into overdrive. Maybe I'm overreacting, but you make one heck of an impact! I really enjoyed how you explained how the different Elements would be participating so far as well as how you grappled with Spike's position in all of this. The strain on Twilight is more than understandable, and, considering the situation, I REALLY would not have blamed her if she did snap.

It is unfortunate that you never got through Season Two before starting this, because it is stated in episode eleven that it was the unicorns' job to raise and lower the moon and sun before Celestia and Luna came along. Of course, I would not have been surprised if that information, thus the ability, was lost over the millennium that Celestia and Luna have ruled Equestria either. On that note though, I would of thought that Celestia would have made and effort to preserve that information somehow if something like this did indeed happen like she feared.

I cannot but think that the spirit of Night Mare Moon would thoroughly enjoy this. I really hope Luna is not blamed for this all happening. I would suppose Discord could enjoy watching this too, but from what I seen he is not one to enjoy violence or mass death, just chaos and trickery.

On grammatical errors though, there is at least one missing quotation at (Twilight, Spike, close your eyes,"). Other than that, nothing else caught my eye. Anyways, good to see you back with a new chapter! I can't wait for the next one.
ezequieltriple7 chapter 35 . 9/7/2012
MMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOORRREEE!
ME chapter 35 . 8/28/2012
Glad to see the next chapter. Was waiting on FIMFiction for a while. Can't wait to read more. :D
MrCharlieChalupa chapter 14 . 8/24/2012
Hello EquZephyr my name is Nick. You have inspired me to right a book on here and I was wondering if I could read this on YouTube. Plz leave a note in a later chapter if I can.
Omnicron25 chapter 35 . 8/20/2012
Well, I am surprised on a few things and expected others. Twilight initially refusing rule despite Celestia's request: unexpected. Them having a dragon attacking them: oh $#!T... well that was not expected. Princess Celestia running into Eric: sort of expected, but not in that manner she did. Eric being awesome and helping Celestia out: 20% cooler.

No really, I think Eric is now my favorite OC character so far, with Capt. Swordstorm in close second. I really like how you develop his character, and I hope you really fetch him out because he really seems like a really good side character. I liked him in the beginning, but now [FAVORITE STAMP].

How Her Majesty responds to Earth is both believable and quite rewarding to read as well. You did, arguably, the best job I've read so far with a pony being sent to Earth. While on the subject of Her Highness, I liked Eric's explanation of how she rose the sun early in a star-centre solar system. The mistake for human technology for magic was quite a gig as well. Eric's apartment scene is something else though.

Other than a few punctuation errors, I can't see anything wrong with it so far. If I stare at if for a few hours I might find something.

I could say a hay barrel more, but I think I will sum this review up with. Amazing job EquZephyr! ENCORE! ENCORE!
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