Reviews for The God Particle
Whitefang333 chapter 12 . 12/8/2011
Hello,

A very interesting chapter. The thing I enjoy the msot in your story are characters. The human, sarcastic (now less so) scientist and similarly minded purple equine give a lot of possibilities to dwell into moral, social, historical issues. Here we come to the next step for James. He accepted the position in Canterlot, away from his friends. It surprised me at first how easily he gave his concent to the idea; however, it all made sense. He knew Twilight and the gang only for 3 months and as it was explained Ponyville is not the good place for theorical physicist and alas, 3 months is not long enough for any sort of stronger friendship to develop.

Twilight aproaches her problems methodicaly, trying to justify herself at the beginning and justify her mentor's decision at the end. She used the mental probe for the greater good (In her opinion ) and that perhaps it wzs better as she was getting too attached (? a bit cold approach IMO). Also, James as he stated a few times is not Equestrian citizen and can respect his rules, but has his freedom of choice.

Now, I find it surprising that the only human in the world is not in the spotlight of flashes and always on the front page. I am curious how warmly his new colleagues will welcome him and on what exactly will he work on? Something is very fishy about so sudden decision between the ruling sisters and just what part James will play in this. Take care.
NightCore chapter 12 . 12/8/2011
I smell plot. A sad chapter :( seeing James' and Twilight's departure from each other was well, sad. I wonder why Celestia is having him move out so suddenly, she also seemed to not really give him a choice in the matter so that raised a few alarms. I can't wait to see where it goes from here.

Have a good one.
tytyvm chapter 12 . 12/5/2011
OH meh goodness why R your story so GOOD!

I love it

More please~

PS: NOOOOO, but he was finnaly getting happy!
epicdonut2344 chapter 12 . 12/4/2011
Very good story
False Narrative chapter 5 . 12/4/2011
Time for the fifth chapter, EquZephyr. As usual, this was another good chapter.

Very nice descriptions of Princess Celestia's castle. An eye for detail is always nice.

The interactions between Twilight and James make this story quite entertaining. And the references to the things of James' world added some awkwardness that just resulted in some quite humor.

Nice work overall.

- ExposedWiresExposedVeins
reguile chapter 12 . 12/4/2011
im starting to see something here...

your doing it well though. i can deal with it
dr.evil99 chapter 12 . 12/4/2011
I have to say... I lurked around this story for a while before reviewing, simply because most "humans in equestria" stories end up devolving into thinly veiled Sues running around with the ponies (that's when they're bothered to be veiled at all.) But this one seemed different from the start, so I gave it a chance, and I'm very glad I did.

The whole perspective of this story is quite different from what is typical of this type, and the character interaction is solid. Everyone speaks with just the right voice, no one's personality is too exaggerated (even when James is being extra-obstinate in the early chaps, I would say that's a defense mechanism on his part. I think he had a lot of trouble letting go and accepting he had to learn a new set of rules for his new world.) I am very interested to see where this goes... you've hinted at a larger plot brewing, and I'd speculate that Celestia's actions in this chapter somehow dovetail into that. Have to admit feeling sorry for James, too... It was nice watching him bond with the Mane 6, and having those friendships moved out of the picture somewhat is going to be hard for him, I think. Despite all his disagreements with Twilight, it was clear he respected and cared for her greatly, and Applejack and Dash were a great support for him when he needed it (as this chapter made very clear.)

Very good work, this fic seems to improve with every chapter, and I'm looking forward to more.
megamanxzeroaxel chapter 12 . 12/4/2011
A every good chapter nicely done
bearie chapter 2 . 12/4/2011
lol i shoot my dog with my ipod and he has the same reaction.
spyrolink chapter 12 . 12/4/2011
Why did the chapter have to end on a sad note? Now I have to read something happy to balance it out.

By the way, I liked the idea of making James stay in Canterlot, though not saying good-bye was a little sad. Can't wait to read what his first day would be
Gh0st's buddy chapter 12 . 12/4/2011
Great chapter, next chapter should be interesting to see how James will cope with lving in Canterlot.
False Narrative chapter 4 . 12/4/2011
My apologies; I meant to get back to this story sooner. But I'm here now. Time for the fourth installment.

I quite liked the inclusion of magic-barring handcuffs (or would they be called "hoofcuffs"?). Either way, it was cool. I also enjoy seeing James' reaction to everything around him. But who in the right mind would think they're not dreaming when they're talking to a pony? (I would absolutely love that, but I digress.)

Twilight's speaking patterns are in-character and just made it a delight to read. I look forward to what the remaining ponies of the mane six will have to say when they interact with James.

Besides a few comma issues, this was another well-written chapter. I look forward to what goes on between James and Princess Celestia. Until then.

- ExposedWiresExposedVeins
NightCore chapter 11 . 11/28/2011
I have to say that I liked Fluttshy's introduction :D Most introductions are of her being her usual timid self to newcomers, but I liked how she gave him "the stare" right off the bat XD.

What's this? Looks like there might be a way to have James return home after all, but will he want to? oooo can't wait for that

Have a good one.
Novanto chapter 11 . 11/24/2011
Awesome work!
False Narrative chapter 3 . 11/22/2011
We arrive at the end of the third chapter of this story.

I already mentioned the issues with the dialogue and the comma placement in my previous review, so I won't repeat that.

In terms of characterization, I think you've done a great job; Fluttershy being quite the animal lover, and Twilight being the curious "egghead" as you put it, as well as her acting all civil when meeting James. Liked Rainbow Dash here, but who doesn't?

One thing I am curioius about is James' reaction to Rainbow Dash searching for him by air. I think if the vegetation was high enough, he could just lay down in it, unless he was in a wide open area.

I am quite interested in the way Twilight made James' muscles seize. Quite a useful spell. I liked how hse went about making him stop, so I commend you on that.

And we reach the end. Not much I can really say save for "so far, so good". Much, much better than the typical human-goes-to-Equestria fic. Well done.

- ExposedWiresExposedVeins
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