|Reviews for Tortured Soul|
| DarkVoid116 chapter 9 . 2/15/2013
All right, well going to see Hercule is definitely beneficial for sure. He really does have a lot of power over the World Government and could influence a lot of things, so excellent there! :D
I kinda forgot Videl was still under the impression that her father was the caliber of a fighter that Gohan, Vegeta, Yamcha, and the rest of their gang is. She's so sheltered and naive and delusional XD
I liked the way Videl was soo confused after Vegeta not only heard her taunt but was in her face at lightning quick speed.
Gohan's adamant denial of her plan and refusal to get his hands dirty pissed me off a little bit. He's like toooo much of a goody two shoes lol XD
The plot advanced nicely here and after several chapters cooped up in Capsule Corp., Videl can finally see the outside world, even if it /is/ with a collar attached to her neck restricting her movements lol.
The chapter seemed to drag out a bit, with so much yet so little happening, it seems. It should be really interesting to see Hercule's reaction when he sees Videl though. He should be emotional and I even bet she will be emotional too.
Great chapter Maxi, Shadow, & Gue!
| DarkVoid116 chapter 8 . 2/15/2013
This chapter changed a lot.
I'm not sure which one of you decided to go with the shorter scenes, the hours, everything like that but it really painted a fantastic picture. I really loved this chapter a lot.
Gohan really is the stupidest smart person of all time, no doubt about it. Did he really, honestly think he could go around and destroy all of the factories and plants using his uranium for weaponry and just get off scot free? He almost freaking perished because of the 66 virus and yet here he is just setting himself up for disaster and disappointment of epic proportion. He put Chichi in danger, he put his workers in danger, etc, etc.
I'm super glad Bulma laid into him and ridiculed him for his idiocy lol.
Ignoring how stupid it was of Gohan to do all of that, those scenes were briliantly done, especially when he leaves South Capitol at 2 or whatever and blends in with the glow of the street lamps. I could really picture that entire scene and it was brilliantly crafted.
Impho Pho is also a really awesome villain name. I can just imagine him being sinister, vicious, calculating and evil bundled up into one.
Now onto Videl. I'm mixed on whether or not I like HOW much she became humbled and changed through this information. I undertsand she had an epiphany and her character underwent a major, drastic transformation, but it kind of seems a bit too sudden and abrupt. I did sympathize a tiny bit with Videl towards the end of the chapter when Gohan essentially rebuffed her apologies and attempts to right her wrongs, but, at the same time, I get where Gohan is coming from not wanting to release a very, very dangerous prisoner not sure if her intentions are actually genuine or just a ploy to negotiate her release from imprisonment.
I hope he eventually comes around though and decides to let her go under a strict set of guidelines and conditions, it could do wonders for the plot, and I do expect it to happen relatively soon :D
Great chapter gue & Kisa :D
| DarkVoid116 chapter 7 . 2/13/2013
This chapter seemed like a really big introspect into Videl's life honestly.
I liked the friendly, sob-story stricken interrogation of Videl that Gohan performed. I'm glad he didn't really get too much information but rather attempted to play off of Videl's previous life's sense of justice.
The really important point of this chapter, obviously, is that Videl learns of the corruption of her boss and the fact that her boss isn't as fantastic and innocent as her previously seemed to be. She knew he wasn't squeaky clean but here she learns at least somewhat the depths of his dirtiness.
I'm glad Bulma had a key role in picking apart Agent Del Tan and rescuing the remains of Videl Satan. Bulma is a favorite of mine and she really is the most normal DBZ character despite her status as a world famous scientist.
I wonder how Videl will react to Gohan now that she's discovered all of this. Will Hercule finally make his emergence as a semi-important character after six chapters without a mention?
I also really hope the boss of Videl's organization finally discovers that Videl didn't kill the Delivery Boy. I have to figure that's going to happen soon.
Great chapter Shadow..
| DarkVoid116 chapter 6 . 2/13/2013
This chapter was amazing.
It brought so much to light and opened up a few cans of worms along the way.
First off, Gohan knows the name of the assassin who tried to kill him. He knows she's Hercule Satan's daughter Videl and knows she's supposed to be dead and likely believes what she is doing is for the greater good. All of this is quite awesome for the plot of this story.
It'll be interesting to see how Vegeta reacts to this new information and whether or not he becomes more lenient in future interactions with Videl. I suspect he won't and might even become even more of a hardass.
I still wonder when Videl's boss will discover she didn't fulfill her mission and kill the Delivery Boy; I'm guessing next chapter hopefully.
The final paragraph really puts Videl's character in a better light, seeing as she seems the ends justifying the means basically and uses that to rationalize her murderous behavior.
I'm very interested to see how Videl reacts once Gohan knows her name..
Nice chapter Sailor, Gue, & Shadow
| DarkVoid116 chapter 5 . 2/12/2013
Well, given that she knew about Saiyans and called Gohan a Saiyan abomination, this doesn't exactly surprise me lol.
We'll see how things play out and what ideas Bulma has in store in order to get Videl to talk. It should be quite interesting once they finish their interrogation or whatnot of Videl.
We haven't heard from Videl's boss in a while; are they going to discover that she did not kill the Delivery Boy soon? ._. I hope so...
I was a bit confused by the Goten & Trunks scene. Trunks was disgusted by that? I'm just not sure what place that scene has in the rest of this chapter and story especially given it introduced Trunks' actual character. We'll see though.
Nice chapter guys.
| DarkVoid116 chapter 4 . 2/12/2013
I was glad to see Bulma and Vegeta entering the picture but just with Hercule and Yamcha disappearing, I hope this doesn't signal a greatly reduced role for Chi Chi and Goten from here on out.
I think this story has been getting more interesting, far more detailed, and overall a heck of a lot better as it continues.
The plot thickens with Videl's boss and his - at least - four associates helping him to do stuff. I can't wait to see where that plotline ends up :D
Obviously I knew Gohan was going to survive the 66 Virus scare, and I'm happy he was able to piece together what happened and told Bulma about Videl trying to kill him.
Videl made a stupid move revealing that she knew his name was Gohan since now Gohan's going to get all the information he can out of Videl.
Nice chapter SD & Shadow..
| DarkVoid116 chapter 3 . 2/12/2013
Given that there are *checks* seven more chapters I'm going to assume Gohan isn't really dead XD
This chapter was pretty intriguing. I'd like to know more about this 66 virus for sure.
I know Trunks is arrogant and everything but I think it seems a bit *too* out of character for him to make fun of Goten like that and additionally Gohan and Goku. We'll see how that works into the remainder of the story, if at all.
I found Videl's words about Chi Chi and Gohan, calling him disgusting, etc so extremely ironic given what we as the audience know and can infer; that Videl/Del Tan is being played hard by her bosses and she's realistically not helping anyone.
I wonder what her boss will say when he or she learns that the Delivery Boy is *clearly* /not/ dead and very much alive, still shuttng down tons of factories and uranium abusing companies, etc. I have to imagine they won't receive that news kindly and will look to terminate Gohan since he'll be after Videl now.
We haven't seen any more of Hercule though which has slightly disappointed me since I wanted to find out what his deal was. That in conjunction with no Yamcha has made me a bit sad.
I really hope the tidbit of information with Erasa from this chapter isn't just thrown to the wayside and forgotten later on. The minor characters from Videl's past who could soothe the pain on her soul shall be important, IMO.
Excellent chapter Jin, gue, & Mikey :D
| DarkVoid116 chapter 2 . 2/12/2013
This brought about a lot of interesting things for sure.
I'm slightly depressed that Videl didn't make the connection with the Golden Warriors from the Cell Games footage or whatnot who can change their hair and eye color. Bleh, it's not a big deal although if she's /that/ narrow-minded and arrogant about certain topics she could become unbearable later on in the story as she finds out more about Gohan and the Cell Games..
I will admit Videl bugging Yamcha is a rather ingenious thing to do but that I think either he or Gohan would have thought to check Yamcha's clothing for a bug. It almost seems forced to advance the plot and not waste time. Regardless, the plot advances
I also like how it's not as if you're making Videl heartless but rather there is a ton of emotional pressure on her and she is torn in ways. She believes, it seems, that she's protecting innocent lives and that DB/Gohan is taking lives so, to her, everything is done to save lives.
I also assume the fire that is constantly referenced here is the one Saiyaman saves her from in canon? That would make sense since the timeline matches up- six years ago would be around that time I think- and Gohan didn't attend High School the way he did in canon.
I'm really quite interested to discover what this airborne virus Videl has acquired is...Now that she has a name on Gohan I am quite afraid what she's going to do.
Guess I'll have to read in order to find out lol
Great chapter gue!
| DarkVoid116 chapter 1 . 2/12/2013
So I realized I have already reviewed this chapter once a long time ago and therefore need to submit this as a guest XD
This was a really excellent start gue. It leaves a crapton of question marks I'm sure will eventually be answered lol.
I really like the new, unique take on Videl. She maintains some aspects of her personality while simultaneously being a totally different person. Right from the getgo it's apparent she still believes in her values and morals and doesn't want to hurt the innocent. She's a special agent and her boss clearly appears to be taking advantage of her righteous sense of justice, manipulating her.
From the Gohan scenes, I get the sense whoever employs Videl is using Gohan's uranium for less-than-standard purposes and Gohan is getting close to shutting them down or something.
I really liked the descriptiveness in the story and also the way you had some fellow agents describe Videl, watching the sway of her hips and all XD
I was also pleased with the explanation for how Videl is able to subdue Yamcha. We all know on pure strength alone that Yamcha is far, far, far, far superior and you even made that clear in the chapter, so using some sort of drug which induces paralysis in order to defeat Yamcha is cool.
I'm excited to continue reading this story and have questions.
Will Gohan save Yamcha? It's obviously the first plot direction.
Are there going to be relevant plot points with Chi Chi and Goten and the social aspect of everything?
How detached is Videl? She seemed to really resent basic communication with her father..
| Miharux3 chapter 10 . 1/2/2013
oh no... thats the best part in the ff till now and you just stop there? o.ö
i want to read mooooore x_x
| bluestar chapter 1 . 12/27/2012
Just 2 let u know, my last review came from ch.10 not 1. I just came back and reviewed, after seeing u haven't updated yet, in the wrong chapter. I'm still waiting. DON'T DISAPPOINT ME, PLEASE! thank u.
| bluestar chapter 1 . 12/27/2012
Please, DON'T LEAVE ME HANGIN'! Gohan just kissed her and that is where u stop? Please update! U don't want 2 disappoint u're fans, do u? I'll be waiting.
| chaos267 chapter 10 . 11/29/2012
Really good job guys. Its different but defently an interesting read. I can't wait to see what happens next
| Gabriel-TDO chapter 10 . 11/26/2012
this is probably one of my favorite fics so i hope that it will be continued.
| Guest chapter 10 . 9/6/2012
Update! Or die!