Reviews for The haunted houses
liliDreamer89 chapter 2 . 5/18/2014
good so far. so cant wait for the next chapter. very well written 2.
StakeTheHeart chapter 2 . 8/29/2011
the suspense is killing me! can you please make another chapter? I want to know how this all turns out. You have a good idea you just need to continue.
realbullet chapter 2 . 8/21/2011
I enjoyed the first chapter very much. The language was almost poetic. I didn't enjoy the second chapter as much. Language such as

"The cool breeze whistled softly, blowing lightly through his hair. The sky was a deep, clear blue and the moonlight reflected on people's windows."

is good. You might want to read through and eliminate some of the more cliche phrases (ex. "a tall dark and handsome boy stood out behind Owen"). If you are going to introduce a new character, spend some time to introduce him to the reader.

My $0.02 - convert the entire thing to an Edgar Allan Poe style poem. The first chapter is almost there. The sing-songy style doesn't work well with prose, but it would be a great start to a poem.
DavidZahir chapter 1 . 8/11/2011
I'm intrigued enough to want to read further.