|Reviews for Papa|
| foxgirl98 chapter 1 . 11/29/2011
I made me cry for how sad it was
| Queen of Stuff chapter 1 . 8/13/2011
So sweet and sad!
| hot chocolate mess chapter 1 . 8/9/2011
That was very sad. Poor girl! :(
| AsterLea chapter 1 . 8/9/2011
Wow, this is really dark! I actually like how you don't give her a name- in a way, it retains her innocence and detaches her from the evil reputation her family has. I love the fact that she thought he was sick and brought him soup- very sweet! I also enjoyed that she calls her father "Papa"- it's what I call my grandpa )
Here are my suggestions: who is her aunt? I assume it's Narcissa, but you never know- it could be Rodolphus' sister. Allowing the reader to know will make her actions seem clearer. Also, by the way the story ends, it feels like there should be another chapter. If you want to keep it a oneshot, you should have her aunt make a more definitive statement such as "A very bad person has hurt your father." This will help give closure to the piece without it being too "round."
Great job, and thank you for taking my challenge!