Reviews for Love Survives
The Nameless One chapter 3 . 3/20/2013
It's not so much that rape bothers me. It can be a good dramatic tool, and you know what they say about writers. They're all sadists that love to torture the hell out of their characters, even ones they seem to love. Look at Smeyer and her unholy creations. But I feel like people usually torment their characters to be gritty and realistic. Life is full of suffering and misery, and if people never suffered, they would never overcome anything and grow. But the characters in your stories don't seem to grow much; if they do, it's on shallow, unnoticeable levels. The suffering seems arbitrary and out of place because the realism is broken near constantly, whether by plot elements or the fact that your characters don't behave like real people. So it's confusing to see it included. Charlie was a real character in the original, flawed and interesting especially in the view of a kid's movie. Here, you're just taking kids movies and making them more adult (and at the same time more childish) than even the originals were. Where is the creativity in taking someone else's story, copy-pasting the screenplay, doing search and replace to change all the names, and "hey, let's throw in rape for good measure!"? Why do you try to introduce gritty realism into stories that aren't remotely realistic? It really seems like mindless porn more than anything else, so why don't you just stick PWP into the summary section? Otherwise, it would be good to tie the elements together. The anthropomorphic dogs could get away with more than humans could, and here humans are the focus of the story if I read correctly. It takes place in some version of our world. So some form of realism should enter into it is what I'm getting at.

But this is going from the assumption that you wish to grow as a writer, which judging from other instances on this website, I don't much get the impression that you do. It's fine to write for fun or to get praise, but even if it is "just a fan fiction" it is a work you submit for others to view and like or dislike, and you must be willing to accept criticism or dislikes. You can choose to ignore them, delete them even, but you must accept that it can and will happen. Some of us are smart alecks and the rest sincerely want to see you and others improve.

The Nameless One
Oktavia Stormborn chapter 1 . 7/29/2012
Um.

/head explodes
Sally EriemowsHeart chapter 3 . 2/11/2012
You guyz are just jealous! She's suuper talented and Axel and Roxas are so cute together! 3 Get a life becuz no one want s to here you whining! God, I'm so sick of you flamrs! Go somewhere else if you don like it!

I wanted to join ff, but I'm scared of stupid people like these geting worked up over my stories. I wish I could write like you, you're really awesome w I want to see more!
GurrenLagger459 chapter 3 . 2/11/2012
...I think my mind just died. I remember when All Dogs Go To Heaven was heartwarming and sweet and epic. I suppose no one thinks about the fact that Anne Marie's voice actress was brutally abused and killed by her father when she was so young. It gave the story a bittersweet feel. If I bother to continue reading this, I'm going to be stuck on the memory you just shat on for the sake POINTLESS FANSERVICE
bluejay782 chapter 3 . 1/29/2012
Corny! I want to laugh and cry at the same time
SnowQueen83 chapter 3 . 1/2/2012
I like your stories for the most part, but your writing style is a bit goofy at times. The language choices are sometimes very corny or sappy. Kind of face-palm worthy at times, just from a reader's perspective. I guess mostly what I mean is there's nothing subtle about it. You're just kind of feeding your audience, not making them guess or figure things out on their own. There's no depth to the characters so far, and to be fair it's the beginning of the story, so you have plenty of time. But just reading the rest of your stories, it's like they exist as setups for lemon, and that's kind of it. If that's what you're trying to do, then it's great, the language is just corny, but if you are trying for something more, it's hard to tell right now. Not trying to be mean, just giving an honest opinion and some hopefully helpful criticism.

Also...how old is Roxas? If this is a lemon setup for later on...I don't know, you paint him like he's maybe 6-8 ish, and to be brutally honest, that's sick. Unless he'd going to grow up later or you just like using the "little boy" phrase a lot when he's really something like 14 or 15, that's still iffy, but it's not extreme pedo. That's the biggest issue I have with this I think. I know you mentioned Axel has had sex with an underage kid before, so I guess he won't care, but still O.o
Neferkitty chapter 3 . 9/26/2011
Not disappointed at all ; this chapter is as great as the others ! Maybe even better because of the presence of Roxas !

He's always so CUTE in your stories that I wanna hold him and never let go !

BTW Xigbar is definitely an asshole. And you are made of awesomeness ! THX THX THX !
Ldrmas chapter 3 . 9/26/2011
Holy frape zig not happy
NakanoHana chapter 2 . 9/10/2011
Are you going to update again soon? I'm interested to see where you take this
Ldrmas chapter 2 . 8/12/2011
Sweet! I love Marley angle, he's soo cute! Can't wait for roxas to appear!
Neferkitty chapter 2 . 8/12/2011
OMG OMG OMG I WANT the next chapter so bad '_' Not only I'm a fan of All dogs go to Heaven since my childhood but... with AkuRoku inside it's just... pure bliss :DD Thx for being that wonderful !
this-account-'s-very-dead chapter 2 . 8/12/2011
i'm really enjoying this so far. it really good and i cant wait to read more ]
Kaoru-chibimaster chapter 1 . 8/11/2011
OH MY GOD I LOVE YOU! All Dogs go to Heaven was one of my most favorite movies when I was a kid! I absolutely love how you made the characters of KH fit so well into it too. Axel makes a perfect Charlie and Demyx makes a perfect Itchy. I was worried about who would be Carface but when I saw it was Xigbar, that made it that much better! I'm guessing from the description that Roxas is Anne Marie which means you'll probably have to change Charlie's and Anne Marie's relationship around a lot but since it's an AkuRoku, that's not really taking from the plot. Now I'm anxious to see who will play Annabell and King Gator since they were some of my favorite characters XD I hope you continue with this story and update soon because you just made my day! Now I have to go find my old All Dogs go to Heaven VHS tape and watch it for the millionth time!
Ldrmas chapter 1 . 8/11/2011
I really didn't feel good today so I am super happy to see a new story from u Hun! I miss y'all so much but I love the story and soo can't wait for more. I can tell this is going to be real good.
NakanoHana chapter 1 . 8/11/2011
This idea looks sooo cute! Please update soon :)