|Reviews for Those First Moments|
| Michael Walker chapter 1 . 12/24/2012
You really have a nice story. But you should alter the intro thing that grabs someone's attention. I got here by luck. I feel this story could be very popular, if you didn't give such a unusual line like a baby's thoughts. Your title is also unfitting. What am I supposed to understand from a title such as 'Those First Moments?' It seems to vague, which added with the intro bit, gives one a bleak understanding of what they will be looking at.
You have an awesome idea for the coming back. But your intro lacks that effort.
| Welded chapter 1 . 12/16/2011
I love you for writing this. I knew I wasn't the only one who thought that reviving into a new physical body would be painful! Plus, you wrote it out better than I ever could.
| indigo-kun chapter 1 . 9/22/2011
So beautifuly done! I love your style, cant wait to read more :3
| Raven Hawkeyes chapter 1 . 9/7/2011
Well well well, I pretty like how you have described the resurrection.
Yes it's short but I believe that's perfect that way.