|Reviews for First Contact|
| Amme92 chapter 16 . 3/7
i have really enjoyed this story. am i the only one who gets the feeling thar our lovely asari has the hots for Kate? would love to se that play out. but im not expecting an update but i can continue to hope i guess
| Trace Reading chapter 12 . 1/18
This story hasn't been updated in several years but lemme tell you something: humans do have hair over most of their bodies. Mostly it's very fine, though, and you don't usually notice it.
| Sandwich Vision chapter 16 . 1/15
That was fantastic, I would love to see more of this (or really anything where first contact was the theme)!
| overtoast chapter 1 . 1/11
Shoulda been "fuck off space niggers, we're full"
| cprime.3000 chapter 1 . 12/10/2016
I first read this story in 2014, i constantly check to see if it's updated. After 2 years i am still checking, sincerely hope you update it one day.
| Rakaan chapter 16 . 11/15/2016
I hope you return to this someday. I greatly enjoyed reading it.
| Camolot the Creator chapter 12 . 11/2/2016
Humanity, despite our collective reluctance and suspicion, are a long way towards creating AI that are perfectly capable of communication, and many human systems are driven by "dumb" AI- more or less, AI that are less pro-active than re-active, based on call-and-response. Basically, they have pre-programmed responses to external stimuli, as well as internal changes. Such AI are most common within videogames, as well as AI like Cleverbot and chat-bots being developed both professionally and casually.
I doubt that the Council would be very happy to discover humanity's apparent obsession with both the positives AND negatives of AI in general, and will be markedly less happy to discover that we've gone and started creating the basis for our own. Perhaps a plot thread addressing this?
| Guest chapter 16 . 8/8/2016
Rip this fic tho it had extreme potential
| RunFromResponsibility chapter 16 . 8/6/2016
I know it's been years, but I just want to say that I really like this story. It's always fascinating to see humanity from an outside perspective.
I hope one day you'll find the inspiration to continue this story.
Thank you for posting!
| Guest chapter 16 . 7/12/2016
"(a strange name, especially with the nonsensical stalling phrase at the end—surely she misheard it)"
Yeah, if she's absorbed the language well enough to communicate, she *will* recognize that as the reduced form of the third-person plural personal pronoun. She might unconsciously upstep it into a more formalized register (as "Texas Hold Them") if not informed that the reduced form is obligatory, but...
| Guest chapter 15 . 7/12/2016
"those whom fully accept"
those *who* fully accept. Yes, 'whom' is unambiguously wrong here.
| Guest chapter 13 . 7/12/2016
"You wouldn't believe it, but several common and important words..."
Eh. The only difference between that and a common and important word having several different utility-meanings is orthographic reform. Anyone acquainted with diachronic linguistics (and someone will be) will know exactly how that sort of thing comes to happen.
"Just look at Mandarin or Japanese..."
True for Mandarin, and for most other varieties of Chinese. NOT true for Japanese; many kanji have multisyllabic pronunciations, and there's a commonly used syllabary, anyway.
"A few moments of shock later, and she was laughing harder..."
You're hammering in the HFY a little too hard there. Let me try that:
And of course, Keigo, the mostly-shameless person of the trio, was the one to answer. "Rule 34 is pretty simple. It states: 'There is porn of it. No exceptions.'"
"Ah," Wavela responded eloquently. She tilted her head in an almost precisely human gesture of momentary consideration, and after a moment, concluded: "Yes."
| Guest chapter 11 . 7/12/2016
"Needing/Wanting" music video:
So this is funny.
The thing is, now that it's 2016—only four years later!—and 'self-driving' cars exist, this video just isn't that impressive: it shouldn't be too difficult to preprogram the car's movements and just set it going. I mean, *I* know they didn't do that, but I doubt Tevos will think it's anything but a preprogrammed course. Hell, your average Terran of 2034 is probably going to assume the same! (Fixable by adding 'manually piloted' to Wavela's note, of course.)
Separately from that, though, were musical Rube Goldbergs really new, even in 2012? The phrase "sheer novelty" seems overkill. At the very least, Minecraft note-blocks were released in January 2011, and while adapting the music-generating-minecart-ride genre to RL was a feat of engineering (and, in this case, piloting), it did exist. And before you object: no, I've never even played Minecraft. If it's an independent invention on OK GO's part, then... well, that just means it's likely a Citadel race would have done it too.
I also doubt Tevos would recognize the pianos as instruments at all. (The guitars, maybe.)
Also, it's "Needing/Getting".
| Guest chapter 9 . 7/12/2016
"Early adoption of rocketry (spurned forward [...]"
Should be 'spurred', not 'spurned'.
"Here Men From The Planet Earth [...]"
This shouldn't be in title case; the plaque itself was all-caps, but in quotation, should be reduced to ordinary sentence-casing. (Unless, perhaps, you're writing a Homestuck fic and portraying Kanaya Maryam.)
| FelixtheSax chapter 16 . 7/8/2016
This has been an awesome read. I love all of the "what if's" that go into this kind of thing. Hope you continue it.