Reviews for Disconnect
Guest chapter 1 . 11/18/2012
i came for sexy time but received none
SapphireKitti chapter 1 . 10/26/2012
Absolutely beautiful. Your writing tugs at the heart strings, and that's an amazing skill. The imagery was one of the best I've read in a while, too. You capture emotions and the scene so well that we can see everything else. A-freakin'-mazing.

Keep writing!
Lau chapter 1 . 8/25/2012
I liked what you did with the prompt. I like the sense of lost and annoyance of being stuck in a body of something you despise.
Also, it's quite interesting the contrast between this story and Mandatory Reassigment. For some reason I assume they are set in the same continuity. In both stories Wheatley is so determined (not Chell determined, but determined nonetheless). He just seems so resolute, to keep being what he think he is in both, to cling to his identity no matter what. And also, the underlying anger is so well done in both stories. And of course, I think it was so sad, that the human!Wheatley from Mandatory Reassigment mourned the loss of the sun, and the trees, while here, where he had recovered them, he no longer wants them and finds them awful and pointless. It would be interesting, to read something that could connect both stories together, something where he could balance both of his identities, I don't know...
Also, poor Chell. You can tell she keeps trying her best to make everything better, but even with all her effort, she still cannot make things better. Must be frustating to be in that position.
Well, I think you're a great writer for angst and sad endings. Well thought sad endings. But I still enjoy them. :) Thanks again for this story!
SuAO chapter 1 . 7/14/2012
This is absolutely beautiful!
Rav3nHat chapter 1 . 7/9/2012
I... you made me want to cry. How did you do that, I haven't cried in years. Nor have I ever thought about it like this. You sir, made me want to curl up in a ball... and sob. I hate you.
Incendiarist chapter 1 . 2/8/2012

This was... very good. Extremely good.

I am not generally a fan of Chelley, but this was so, so, so SPOT-ON, I s'pose is the term, and I could really honestly SEE them as Chell and Wheatley, and not some girl named Chell [REDACTED] and some moron who swears a lot, like a Ron Weasley expy and my gods why haven't I thought of that before?


Well, anyway, thank you for writing this; very much.

Ravenwings chapter 1 . 2/5/2012
I know you wrote this story a little while back, but I just stumbled across it and I'm very glad I did. I loved it. This side of Wheatly, this dysfunctional relationship, you nailed it. Thank you for the insight, the beautiful prose, and the boldness to write something different and new.
Emmalyn chapter 1 . 10/27/2011
This was an excellent little fic. Very well-written, and bittersweet-at least we humans now can say "so long" when a relationship turns sour, and go off to seek other companionship. But this empty world offers them nothing, no alternatives but to compromise as best they can, and you portrayed this beautifully.

Still, I can't help but wish that there were some kind of...not conclusion, exactly, because not every story needs that, but-denouement, maybe?-at the end of this fic. Something to show that there will eventually be emotional growth between or amongst the two protagonists (or not, as the case may be). As it is, this story's ending implies a sad sort of stagnation. But if that's what you were going for, it was done quite nicely.

Please don't take the criticism personally; I come across as a picky editor sometimes when I really just like to talk a lot! ;D Truly, I did enjoy it. Thanks for writing and posting this lovely, introspective piece, and I hope to see more from you in the future! :) (And do feel free to message me if this was confusing, haha~)
Niqi chapter 1 . 9/8/2011
This is sad and absolutely beautiful and I love the insights into humanity Wheatley has to offer. Well done.
Halls of Science chapter 1 . 8/15/2011
This is brilliant. Really. Love the way you write. I really like how their relationship isn't all rainbows and sunshine, like most stories I read here. The whole idea of him hating being human - it's great. (Though I really do love me some angst.)

There's only one thing... this is only a one-shot! I think you could explore this more. I also think it ended sort of awkwardly.

Maybe that's just me, though. Like I said, this was brilliant nontheless.
zabchan chapter 1 . 8/14/2011
I cried. For wheatley and his confusion, but mostly for chell and wheatley's rejection of her species. You really helped me feel like I was Chell, frustrated and hopeful and betrayed. I felt almost sadder than when he betrayed me (as the player) in portal2. So, kudos for your mastery of tugging my heartstrings. I need to go read some fluffy porn to cheer myself up .

Although the subject matter made me feel down, I do want to praise your mastery of language. The piece flowed well and the transitions between points of view were surprisingly well done.
Jaeyu chapter 1 . 8/14/2011
sigh...I mean, this story just made me sad...

And your original prompt was- "Wheatley hates being human. Then Chell comes along and nothing changes". Aww! Yes, I am a Chelley fangirl, but this is just...sad. How Wheatley hates being human, how he might nenver be happy in this body, how Chell can't do a thing about it.

Really good writing, yet so depressing and sad.
MarquetteFan33 chapter 1 . 8/13/2011
I really like this. I really hadn't thought of things that way, but his reactions seem completely plausible. The ending was quite cute, as well.
7-dark-dreams chapter 1 . 8/13/2011
This was adorable. One-shot right? No more? ~ sigh ~ oh well. Thanks for the entertainment!