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![]() ![]() Hey Kaz I saw ur coments on Loonaticslover13's fic and thought i'd check out ur stories and i have to say im really impressed :-) I thought that adding ur own character (Kaz) was a great idea because it added something very dynamic to the fic Keep up the good work :-) Hasta Luego :-P Mitch 566 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Write please this is really good |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice Ending! KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my dog! This is just to much! Can't...take it! *faints* |
![]() ![]() ![]() pretty good chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() good chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() I was about to jump off my chair in the end, but when I finished reading it I was like; aww, oh well! It makes things more suspenseful! |
![]() ![]() ![]() great two chapters hope you update soon |
![]() ![]() I really like the story. One suggestion though, use"" instead of '' '', it's kinda hard to tell where the diolauge. -Loonitics Lover13! P.S. '') |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG! All I did while reading the chapter was... ...HAHA...HAHA...HAHAHA! This story is hilarious! |
![]() ![]() Hilari! LOLZ Loonitics! Keep up the good work and please write more chapters. what can i say, im hooked. -Loonitics Lover13 P.S. YAY! '') |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a good start - I'm looking forward to more, it's nice to see more Ace-Lexi stories around :) However, if I could offer some advice, you might want to change your writing style slightly from: 'Ace- guys, this is no time to fight, and you both take your elbows of my back Lexi- boys –rolling her eyes' Apparently, FanFiction actually banned this type of writing, so I would suggest writing in a different style, turning the prior example into: "guys, this is no time to fight, and you both take your elbows of my back" Ace spoke with authority Lexi rolled her eyes, "boys."' Plus this can leave you room to add more description too: for example, 'Lexi rolled her eyes, "boys." She crossed her arms and gave a small smirk.' Hope this helps, I can't wait for the next update :) |