Reviews for The Animal
TristonKitsune chapter 3 . 1/3/2015
This is totally a favorite
SkyChan13X chapter 9 . 1/18/2013
silentwinged chapter 2 . 9/30/2012
Lol... I love this story and am totally caught up in the suspense, but I just wanted to mention that I had a breakdown laughing fit when I read "chappy"... I've read too much Bleach... #fail xD
Sasuke is awesome and MINE chapter 9 . 1/28/2012
This was awesome! My friend and I loved it. 3 XD
pentagram detected chapter 1 . 11/9/2011
This is wonderful.

Love it!
bjaluvr chapter 9 . 10/6/2011
Very well written! :D Yay for uke L!
Kiss the Ice Cream chapter 9 . 10/5/2011
Holy. Shit. How are you able to write smut this hot? Do you take sexy pills when you wake up in the morning (feelin like P. Diddy)?

And uh... How are your fictionpress stories going?
Cuzosu chapter 9 . 10/5/2011
Could perhaps use some editing; I noticed a good bit of run-on sentences.

This was...not necessarily the best ending I've read, but it wasn't the worst either. Actually, in my opinion, a better ending would have been to have L be able to use his animal as a tool or to accept it as part of himself that would come out occasionally, maybe only with Light. I don't know. I guess I'm a sucker for awesome endings...? This one was good, though. Just not great.

*cough* Anyways, thank you for writing and posting, and for caring enough about what readers think to consider our words and respond to us. I hope you continue to do so, and that it serves you well.

May the words just flow,

taikutsushi chapter 9 . 10/5/2011
/Nosebleed/...Hot love scene is ending !
Cris UchihaxSasuNaru Freak chapter 9 . 10/5/2011
OMG perfect

i almost drool in this lemon

Poor Beyond i like him, but L belongs to Light

i love this story and the ending was perfect
pandas'n'kisses chapter 3 . 10/5/2011
dude im so not a fan of a seme L but this was freakin awesome
NightOfAThousandDreams chapter 9 . 10/4/2011

So um...I was very very VERY confused with this ending :/ The writing itself was okay, but it's kinda like expecting a delicious turkey sandwich, but only eating two pieces of bread :( What I mean to say is that you practically squashed the beginning and the end together without any room for a rise, climax, and fall of a story. This story has so much potential...I suggest you rewrite it, and add in the necessary components.

Or maybe you just want to write a smut fic? PWP is fine, if you do it right. Either way...I was expecting a lot more from this, and I don't want to be taken as mean, but I was disappointed, to say the least.

Take the time to write an outline...I only started using outlines last year and my god have they made a difference! I actually finish stories now...which is what I can't say for the majority of my gallery.

The point is, though, that you need to organize your thoughts, outline them, decide what you want to happen in the beginning, middle, and end, and think things through before you write it. Even if you start a fic as a drabble, its never too late to organize your mind.

Please don't take this as a flame, I am only trying to help you become a better writer.

taikutsushi chapter 8 . 9/25/2011
Oh my poor Light ...:(
Safiiri chapter 8 . 9/24/2011
Go L go! *cheers*

Damn I feel bad for Light...weird ;)
Princess1heart1Hubby chapter 8 . 9/24/2011
Love this but poor Light!
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