|Reviews for It's All On You|
| Debbie in S. Florida chapter 22 . 11/30/2011
So, here I am, reading this chapter instead of going to bed like I should have! It's after midnight and I'm gonna be so tired tomorrow, but it's worth it. I'm telling you, girl, you are getting better and better with every chapter. This was really, really great. I was on the edge of my seat the entire chapter. First of all, I find it fascinating that she can fuck Max with absolutely no emotion and then still get so excited with Tyler. I mean, I know the reasons, but it's still interested to read. It must be killing her, the thought of having to keep doing this and to keep it from Tyler. How awful.
I was so afraid she was going to get raped by that guy. I'm sure Max will have some sort of punishment in mind, though, once he hears from the guy that she didn't cooperate. I'm afraid of what he'll come up with next, as it seems to be escalating with each job. And we KNOW she'll be doing another one. I was also half expecting her to get caught by the cops. Just what she needs.
I also found it quite interesting that she was turned on by Tyler's dominating attitude, while at the same time being a little pissed because she doesn't want anyone telling her what to do. What a problem to have, huh? Tyler is fucking hot whether he's being sweet and romantic or dirty talking her or ordering her around. Damn, that was just plain ol' hot as hell!
Anyway, can't wait to read more.
| francesmama chapter 22 . 11/29/2011
hot hot hot! I love it.
| Francisca Real chapter 22 . 11/29/2011
I literally jumped on my chair when i saw your notification in my mail! I was working on a school project, and it was like ' Ohhh fuck the project! I have a Tyllory chapter to read, bitches, you have to wait!'. then you know the rest, i run up here, and I read this like i was eating nutella, and you always want more... well, that's the feeling i got when i read this! Always moree!
I'm in a dilema, like i love to read when they are happy and everything going the best, but maybe just like you, i love a little bit of drama! This shit between Mall and Max is pissing me off so much.. wtf does he want more? I hope Tyler won't get mad at her if he figures out abt Max and Neil..jeeeezzz i cant even think abt it! Sappy heart is a sappy heart, and will never change 33
sorry this was kind of a testament, i didnt realize it when i was writing it LOL dont get bored, i hope p
| NJSilla chapter 22 . 11/29/2011
OMG what a chapter my dear! Omg omg omg! I'm literally like in a trance right now, so many trance, with all the things that happened, such a roller coaster ride of emotions! You know I knew that Nick dude was going to try and get a casual fuck in the way, and when she got to the club and Max was fucking Clara is because I knew that he exclected her to fuck Nick, he wasn't excpecting her to get back so fast, and I confirmed it when she saw his surprised face omg, but I'm worried as to why he did that you know like shit, it has me really worried, and the lies oh the lies she keeps telling Tyler, it breaks my fucking heart! Then omg that pussy comment, that was totally just amazing god I was like caught by surprised and I was whoa you can't say things like that Tyler baby without some warning first, my panties I mean my heart cannot take it ;) Wow thank you for an amazing chapter love! Love you, NJSilla xoxo!
| LittlemissTwilight chapter 22 . 11/29/2011
OMG can this fanfic got any better? I hope so it is very amazing and awsome. I cant find words. to write those things you need talent, and you have that talent. Love it so much! please dont let us wait so long. With Love...
| vivita126 chapter 22 . 11/29/2011
Holy intense ch. Omg! Loved it! :')
| NabStew chapter 22 . 11/28/2011
O M G :O
I think that chat room we have the other day inspired you? hahaha
love this chap, love dominant Tyler!
aww Clary, stop thanking me! :') love you too!33333
of course you know I can't wait for next chapter!
| Charlie Belle chapter 22 . 11/28/2011
Ok, here we go. I am shaking with anticipation, and love that you gave a shout out to my story. That means the world to me, You are too kind, and I love you
Mallory isn't alone on wants someone to come along to kill Max. Not going to lie, found the beginning both perfect, yet disturbing. Your right. I don't want to think about her having sex with anyone but Tyler.
I love how she was able to act "tough" around this dude. I like that. Very Mallory of her. But I am more worried about Neil. He seems like a dick head that would cause some major trouble. I don't like that.
I KNEW HER TAKING THE DRINK WAS A WRONG AND VERY BAD IDEA. why do i feel like she never makes the wrong decision. I get that her whole thing, that's she fucked up, but she has to think! she makes stupid decision after the other. its starting to get annoying. but on the other hand, it reasonable. its what she has to do. but she should have kept her fucking coat on. UGH! Stupid slut!
Sorry. I take that back. She's not a stupid slut. Just a stupid girl sometimes. And ninja Tyler has returned. ahahahaha, not at a good part-thing though. At a bad time. Damn!
OH MY FUCKING GOD. I AM IN FUCKING LEMON SHOCK RIGHT ABOUT NOW. I-I...I-I...Um...what was I doing again. Where am I?
HOLY MOTHER FUCKING NDVAM! THAT WAS THE BEST FUCKING LEMON I'VE EVER READ. It beats any of your past ones, MOTU, TWBB, all of them seem girlie compared to this hot ass mother fucker. Holy shit, my pussy. OMFG!
I CAN'T BREATH RIGHT NOW
ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL ME?
I. AM. DEAD...
I CAN'T EVEN WRITE A FULL SENTENCE.
*ROLLING ON THE FLOOR SCREAMING BLOODY MURDER*
Ok, I am calmed down now. I told you I would give you a monster review. So here it is. I love you. I love you. I want to have passionate, angry sex with Tyler. I want him to tell me I have a pretty pink pussy, and to just dominate my ass. I want it. You gave it me. I love you. You are the best. Keep this shit up, and my ovaries might explode. I want that. So don't eve stop what you are doing. You need to keep this up? Are you a porn star or some shit? How do you come up with this.
I'm going to go and cry in a corner now. Cause... Promise lemon will seem like a pussy to the master piece
I love you
ps. tweet me when you read this! Cause, I know its a hot mess
| LittlemissTwilight chapter 21 . 11/27/2011
but now I'm really curious and will probably check youre site every two minutes if there is a new chapter. I can't help I'm addicted. Love you 3 please upload soon
| Zoe chapter 21 . 11/27/2011
This is the first piece of fan fiction I have ever read and I think its brilliant. Genuinely get excited when I see that a new chapter has been put up. Cant wait to see what happens.
| vivita126 chapter 21 . 11/27/2011
New reader! Yay, finally read ur fic and its fantastic and I love it and I need a new chapter, pronto! Much love,
| Guest chapter 21 . 11/26/2011
YOU LEFT US ON A CLIFFHANGER ! Please post another one soon ! I can to take the suspention of waiting :) I hope things work out with Mallroy and Tyler XOXO
| Francisca Real chapter 21 . 11/26/2011
Ohh God! When u say "i'll give you another chapter tonight", u have no idea, i pass everyday coming to your page! I'm soo sick LOL
Jeeez, i'm getting so worried abt what Mall is doing now...i'm afraid that something could happen between Tyler and her, and i dont want to! When they start fighting with each other, i swear it makes me cry :')
Love this fic so fuckin' much!
Big Kiss 3
| Ennasus96 chapter 21 . 11/26/2011
All I can say about this chapter is: It's my favorite so far. Gard, I loved it, so amazing amazing amazing! You better update soooon, I want to know what happens, ASAP!
| robsessed1123 chapter 21 . 11/25/2011
she cant keep doin this. fuck itz killen me.