|Reviews for It's All On You|
| Debbie in S. Florida chapter 7 . 9/26/2011
Damn, I wanted so badly to stay up and finish this chapter last night, but I was just too damned tired! As soon as the kids headed off for school today, I knew I had to finish the rest of this story! I'll have you know, girl, that I rarely begin new stories these days, especially WIP's, but I'm glad I did in this case. I'm really enjoying it!
So, once again, poor Tyler! He seems like such a nice guy and I hope Mallory's gonna realize how lucky she is that he wants her. I have no illusions. The fact that she's a prostitute is going to make things really difficult for them, but if they're willing to try, they can overcome it. The question, of course, is whether she's ready to quit, cuz I doubt he'll accept her continuining the same line of work! I don't see him demanding she quit, but I can't really imagine a guy-a nice guy, at least-wanting his girl to be with other guys like that. Hopefully, she'll want to quit. Maybe she can get a job cooking, as she seems to like it. By the way, the whole time you wrote about him cooking, I was picturing that scene in the movie where he cooks pasta in his kitchen, though I think the movie Tyler wasn't quite the accomplished cook that this Tyler is!
So, another potential problem will be when Tyler learns her real age. Will he think she's too young for him? And does he even know yet that she strips, too? Oh, I guess he probably does, since he knows she works at the club. Guess we'll find out, as I assume he'll learn the truth eventually if he doesn't know yet. She's been more truthful with him than she probably ever has with anyone else, but she's still got some things she needs to confess to him, and I'm interested to see how he responds. It's one thing to like a girl, be attracted to her, which he obviously is, and to even feel a connection, but he needs to know all of the truth before he decides for sure if he wants to be with her.
Okay, enough talk. I gotta go read!
| Debbie in S. Florida chapter 6 . 9/25/2011
Huh, another night together and they still haven't gone all the way yet! It's surprising, but I think it's a good thing. It's obvious they're completely attracted to one another, but it's good they're taking it sort of slow. They're both so messed up, and while being together seems to be good for both of them, I think they need some more time. And now she's really freaking out! Poor Tyler. I'm hoping he understands why she' upset. He has to know she's never done this with any of her customers before. I'm sure he's the first guy she's allowed that close for a long time, if ever. He's already given her many "firsts", and hopefully he'll get it. I hope he doesn't get mad, and hopefully they work it out. Hate to think of him leaving like this.
I'm doing my best to stay awake for the rest of this, but I have a feeling I'm gonna be finishing this tomorrow! I'd stay up all night reading if I didn't have to be up at 6 a.m. The kids gotta get up for school, though, whether I like it or not...
| Debbie in S. Florida chapter 5 . 9/25/2011
Whew, girl, that was hot! I get the feeling that it meant more than just a regular fuck, too, for both of them, though I'm not sure how they'll be able to have a normal relationship. He's fucked up and she's a hooker! But then, if they both want it badly enough, it'll work. It seems like she's able to help him deal with whatever it is that's freaking him out, and who knows, maybe he'll be good for her, too. I can't wait to see how this goes. I'm especially curious to know when they'll have sex without her being paid for it! All in good time, I'm sure.
I want to read all of this tonight, so I'm gonna shut up and go read more!
| Debbie in S. Florida chapter 4 . 9/25/2011
Well, I was right again! He did meet her at the club. Sort of. I was kind of wondering, actually, as he doesn't seem the sort of guy to hang out at strip clubs, but then again, I don't know him well enough yet, so maybe he does! I'm so curious to see what happens next. I'm glad, actually, that they didn't have sex right off the bat, and I'm kind of hoping that they don't now, either. Maybe he really does just want to talk to her! Will he tell her his story? I hope so, since I'm dying to know what's going on with him and why he's so messed up. And will she spill some of her secrets, too? Why is she where she is, working as a prositute and, I assume, stripper? Is this Mallory's story similar to the movie Mallory's?
By the way, I'd love longer chapters, so I'm hoping they get longer as we go!
| Debbie in S. Florida chapter 3 . 9/25/2011
So I guessed right. She was feeling something for him, though she wasn't very happy about it. I'm glad that she felt more for him than just another john. She doesn't know he was in the dark about her being a prostitute, though, right? I wonder what she would've thought if she'd known. He wasn't just flirting with her, knowing he was going to have sex with her no matter what. He really liked her. I hope she finds that out eventually, that he was being sincere.
I'm guessing he meets her in the club? Or, since they live in the same neighborhood, maybe they run into each other locally? Either way, I'm looking forward to their nexct meeting. Can't wait to see how it goes.
| Debbie in S. Florida chapter 2 . 9/25/2011
Oh, no! Okay, so I know I read the summary and knew the situation, but damn, how sad was this? The poor guy! I want to hug him even more now. I think I remember you said you're going to do both pov's, so I'm really curious to read Mallory's. I know she was there for the money, or assume so, but I'm curious to see if she felt anything more. He was so sweet, and nervous, and was really liking her, so I'm hoping she was feeling the same. Was she just upset that he rejected her and that's why she was so crude and ran out of there? Now I'm wondering how they meet up again. Hmmm... Okay, so I'm off to read more. I knew I was gonna wanna read the whole thing once I started!
| Debbie in S. Florida chapter 1 . 9/25/2011
Hey, girl, I'm finally getting a chance to read this! It's still the weekend, though, so it counts! I can tell already I'm gonna wanna stay up all night reading this. Guess it's good there aren't a lot of chapters! So far, I'm loving it. Tyler is adorable and sad and I can't wait to see where this goes. I just wanna hug him! And Mallory's got a story, too, and I can't wait till we start learning more about them. I'm curious how much of Tyler's story will be the same as the movie, though, of course, I'm hoping this isn't the year 2001. I assume the incident he's thinking about is his brother's suicide? Or are you changing things up a lot from the movie? Either way, I'm looking forward to more. Great job so far.
| marce leighton chapter 13 . 9/24/2011
i love this chapter too, please tell me when the next chapter is out..
| bellastew chapter 13 . 9/24/2011
"I need you too." *swoon* OMG that's was awesome!
| bellastew chapter 12 . 9/24/2011
Wow, great chapter! It was nice seeing how her head works when she's at work. I knew Tyler would go there after she texted him... But I was afraid that once he got there he would see her in action and miht ger hurt, i mean, he did, but physically.
| LittlemissTwilight chapter 13 . 9/24/2011
Hey amazing chapter as always. Love the Story. Please upload the next soon. I'm curious how things will go on.
| inlovewithmyqueens chapter 11 . 9/23/2011
Love these song btw!
| Alexandra chapter 13 . 9/23/2011
OMG! This is just GREEEAT! I mean, all ur fanfic.. so much action! So much sex, its just... Amazing, I never read something like this...
Its like, theres no words to express how much I actually love ur writing... I love the way u detail everything and how u are just, amazing...
I love the way Mallory and Tyler are so attracted to each other, and its awesome how they have such a good relationship although its eerything basically SEX...
Anyways, It would be great they say to each other what they actually feel for each other, it would be soo cool and awesome fantastic! To have Tyler saying Mallory I love you while introducing himself into Mallory...
I love ur fanfic!
Thank You for writing it, because u are so awesome!
When the next chapter? I want to read more, no I mean, I need to read more...
| R4ch3 chapter 13 . 9/23/2011
Uhm, yeah, HEY! How are you?
Well, I just wanted to say, that I have read many many fanfics before... But, I definitely love urs! It's just amazing... I love the way u detail evrything, you are such a good writer, congratulations! Keep writing, and I can't wait for the next chapter :3..
| MyPerfectEdward chapter 13 . 9/23/2011
really really good! love it xD