Reviews for Harry Potter and the Forests of Valbonë |
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![]() ![]() ![]() ...I can not put into words how disappointed I am that you got the sword to BREAK to some fucking fire spell. Really? a sword from a creature at least a 1000 years old, forged when he was born and probably enchanted? destroy with some random ass fire sword spell? I questioned when the sword of grifinfor was broken, at least I could believe the reason why. But he gives him a sword that gonna break like that to kill the dark lord? I'm just so fucking disappointed that that's how you've played this out. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked this story up to chapter 24 or 25. It had a direction, a purpose. But after Harry got a voice in his head, a forced "war", and it stopped being a "Harry learns magic in order to get home" and turned into "Harry's wacky adventures with a hat" without any goal, rhyme, or reason, it stopped being fun. I keep waiting for there to be an actual goal, but instead Harry just goes after whatever shiny object is in front of him. He's massively OOC even for this story. Somewhere around chapter 24/25 he stopped caring about getting home because the story wanted him to stop caring. And thus I stopped caring about the story, because it has yet to give me anything else TO care about. Where's the arc? What's the story even about any more? It's become an utterly random walk from place to place, fighting whatever happens to be there. All I'm doing now is skimming chapters to see if there ever emerges a purpose to the story. It should've ended 10 chapters ago, after the climactic fight with the wolves, as Harry just WENT HOME. Or at least continued in that direction, instead of whatever drivel this is. |
![]() ![]() ![]() "Vocerr" was never introduced, yet suddenly Harry knows his name. The first occurrence of that name is when Harry thinks of him by it... and he introduces himself only a bit later. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Huh. Well... I was hoping that the Trek in the Unknown would end at some point, but it doesn't look like that's going to happen. A Harry who's learned all of this new magic going back to Hogwarts would be fun. The same Harry wandering in the boonies for another 25 chapters, a lot less so. This doesn't seem to be heading anywhere any more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well... that... uhh... happened? All I have to say about this is "dafuq?!" |
![]() ![]() ![]() I enjoyed this a lot, congratulations on writing an HP adventure story that feels magical. Going to look at your works now. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting ending. Set-up for sequel. |
![]() ![]() ![]() a little way in and I am really enjoying the fic. It is an original premise unlike the many repetitive bashing ones. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So this was just fucking bizarre. I kept going through the whole story to see what would happen, if it would improve or develop - and it just didn't. Congratulations on writing a story of over a hundred thousand words that somehow has no discernable plot. It didn't move or flow in any real way; there was no true character development. The little nuggets of storytelling throughout didn't connect and were just odd. I'm sorry if this seems overly critical, but I'd seriously suggest getting some psychiatric help because this read like the ramblings of an inmate at psychiatric hospital for the criminally insane (one who shockingly throughout the entirety of their incoherent and frightening diary-esque writings managed to avoid most typos - so kudos on that). |
![]() ![]() ![]() My goodness. It has been a while and i do not remember finishing this story, but man is this amazing. To be a jerk, this story has weird elements from the God of War (2018 and Ragnarok) in it that it. Like the Hat being like Mimir; a very wise and smart individual who has a story to tell, or a lesson to impart, but is only there to do THAT, and can not help besides calling out when someone will attack their rear. The War that is begun by the Hero by accident. This came first, but gosh is it great to re read this story. Thanks for all your hard work |
![]() ![]() ![]() Overall I really enjoyed the story. However, I was greatly disappointed and disliked the last chapter. In the chapter right before it you said you were done with Harry's part of the story and that the final chapter would hopefully fill in some gaps. It didn't. What happened with the war, and why did Harry leave before it was completed? I realize he's 12 but he was kind of in the middle of all of it. So none of that whole war in battle stuff was cleared up. Next, in the final final chapter Harry is apparently missing now. You said in the chapter right before this that you would be working on a sequel, but considering that it's been three and a half years just about I don't think that's ever going to happen. Which is really disappointing because I would definitely read the sequel if you put one up. |
![]() ![]() This is the epilogue? Really? |
![]() ![]() rofl the very idea that they could track it like that is just nonsense |
![]() ![]() ![]() It was exceptional. Thank you so much for your writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Incredible story. Thank you for the time and effort you put into it! Hope to see more! |