|Reviews for When Dawn Comes|
| KnightThunderis chapter 27 . 7/30
This is the better ending idea and the story was what I would call an edge of your seat, nail-biting wonderful suspense and romance
| Redmonkey3 chapter 28 . 5/12
This was such a great story and I hope you are still getting these comments even years later. Thank you!
| Guest chapter 27 . 11/30/2019
What about the baby
| LilLinkGirl chapter 28 . 10/27/2019
Not bad. I liked it. I think my only problem would be I wish the endings were a bit more fleshed out. I had to re-read to understand what I was looking at since they need a transaction. The jump was a bit odd the way it was done and the endings could use a few more details to really flow well. But over all not bad :)
| scifiromance chapter 1 . 2/22/2019
| SaturnnFoxx chapter 27 . 9/8/2018
I’ve reread this story several times now and it always just as engrossing as that first time I read it. You did a masterful job weaving all of it together.
I do like all three endings of it: the original and the two epilogues. It’s not everyday you come across a story with a not so rosy ending that leaves you feeling satisfied as a reader. In each version there was a definitive conclusion. Although, I think I like the ending of the second epilogue the best.
| Pia Bartolini chapter 28 . 7/31/2018
Gosh, I read this years ago when it first came out, and have read it again now that I’ve dived back into the SM fandom with the creation of Crystal.
You’re right - the grammar and spelling errors ARE atrocious. I wish you’d had a beta to help you. But Kimra, you fell one hell of a story! It was a great canon departure, and very detailed. Somewhat frustrating at times (because I was so involved in the characters that they were wringing emotions from me), and captivating to read. I could barely put it down. Someday, I wish you’d edit this one and give it the shine it deserves, because I think the typos and errors really make it look like less of a gem than it actually is. This is a fantastic work of fiction and it would greatly benefit from some polish, if you ever get the urge.
Thank you for sharing this story with us, it was really excellently done. And for the record I like that second epilogue way better, but I’m no great fan of angst and death ;)
| LookingAnswers chapter 28 . 7/24/2018
This was a great story, I really liked
| karinori chapter 28 . 3/23/2018
I am not sure if you are still active to read this, still I want to say thank you for this piece of awesomeness. I just regret that I found this decades after. This is such a wonderful story! I love this to the bits.
Serena reactions to everything has been so real with all her imperfections. I also loves Darien character here, but a questionWhen did Darien start lovimg Serena? Or, when did he realize that he loves Serena? Did he only loves Serena because he realized she is Sailor Moon? So much of hopeless romantic I am, I would be a little sad if he only have lust and attraction to Serena and only loves Sailor Moon, thus loving Serena upon the realization..
The scouts and Lune has been so wondefull here. So supportive and loving.
I really loves both endings! But I get to choose, 25a have my cookies. I just wished it would explain a bit more on others perpective about Serenity's death. Can't help but I love that kind of thing. But definitely thanking you for writing 2 optional ending for us! I was itching to write one myself, but I know my might alone is not enough. Hahaha
Thank you again for the wonderful story. I wished I read this earlier when you just wrote this so you will know my love and appreciations to your writing! Looking forward for more!
| TropicalRemix chapter 28 . 2/2/2017
you should write a equal to this story.
| Guest chapter 19 . 8/31/2016
I don't really like your Serena... she's kind of bitchy.
| Kasienda chapter 28 . 7/29/2016
I know it's been like over a decade, but just wanted you to know that I think this holds up well! Your Usagi acts and behaves (pulling away from everyone - becoming distant and secretive, etc.) a lot like a victim of drugged rape would. And that is just so human and beautiful. I loved it!
Your Mamoru is a beautiful interpretation of his character.
I did find myself wishing there had been a little more closure once the memories were recovered! A little processing now that she knows what actually happened. Or maybe just a heart to hear confession and make-up with the other senshi as that never got to happen (stupid youma interrupting important moments!).
Though I do love how you capped the forgotten evening at the beginning and end of the story. Very artistically done!
Both of your endings were powerful in their bittersweetness. Nice work. I'm delighted you didn't shy away from the death completely. There can be a lot of power in that loss.
Anyway, hope you're still around to get this as I wanted you to know your work is appreciated even years after the fact!
| pricklingsensation chapter 27 . 5/15/2016
You did such a good job with maintaning the storyline, i could not tear my eyes away! Thank you for such a good read!
| Serenity312 chapter 26 . 10/3/2015
Very interesting story! Unique plot. I like the last epilogue the best :) Thanks for sharing
| JustThatKindOfSpecial chapter 27 . 3/21/2015
This was good but could have been better. Like don't get me wrong everything about it was great, in fact, it could have possibly been incredibly but then what really let you down was your grammar.
First, "where" and "were". Completely different things. "his" and "he's". Also completely different things.
And I know it is common to make a couple of errors when it comes to "there" "their" and "they're" but really? Almost constantly? "Your" and "you're"? REALLY?
This was just a laziness that should have been checked over and edited because it was just so very poor. But I hope you continue to write as it would be a shame to waste such potential.