|Reviews for The Crowley Chronicles|
| KinglyShadows chapter 2 . 1/19/2012
Oho! This interests me. If I can come up with a rival for you, will you accept another OC of mine? I'd feel bad if I just came up with an ass for ya!
So...what do ya say?
| blackshadow94 chapter 1 . 8/19/2011
aww man all this happend in one day? i hope i can still get in
name:jorge daniel morales (black)
relationship with juliuan:he thinks he okay but thinks he needs to get more serious about battling
personality:THE BIGGEST MARY SUE EVERRRR! no im just kidding
he's dark not gothic or emo but just somewhere in between he's pretty laid back but he gets serious when i comes down to whenever he's with a bunch of people he turns into the most random funny guy ever but still likes to be by himself
background info:he hates his life in the real world because his parents never seem to approve of his love of pokemon so he runs away
appeareance:black hair that comes down to his ears,gold eyes(people freak about that),he wears a black hoodie with a black t-shirt underneath he has black jeans and black skater shoes
possition:a rival/musician/pokemaniac he has the tendency to squel out the name of every pokemon he sees some times he just stars at his pokemon and just begin to freak out because he has plays the violing he starts playing theme music for anything
goals:he doesnt have a goal he just enjoying himself later he prove that to his parents that pokemon are good
he's a prankster and loves to take his tuna sandwiches and black best freind
he evolves into a umbreon
he the more laid back of the group and just sits under a tree and relax
he the smart one and is never wrong...ever no matter how insane it is
romance:sure why not
| sailor phoenix black chapter 2 . 8/19/2011
I don't know if you got my PM, so I'll tell you that I made a mistake, I'll fix it here, please replace Cyndaquil with this.
Torchic, Torchic, boy, Can be a hothead at times but is a good friend, loves battling, Not as close but still close with his trainer. Moves, Scratch and Ember, level 10
there we go, this will still be a good story please continue
| hannyfish chapter 2 . 8/18/2011
F-jeez, the rival isn't mine, is it? I'd be surprised if it was. Sorry I pressed the submission button before I finished, I'm assuming you got my PM? You didn't reply!
| ASDFG96 chapter 2 . 8/18/2011
Name- Abraxis Landreath, Gender- Male, Age 17, Appearence- 5'4", black hair, brown eyes, pale skin. During summer/spring, wears a white wife beater(a tank top), black shorts, and sandals. During fall, winter, wears a large orange parka, black pants, and winter boots., World- regular, Relationship with Julian- bully, Personality- Arrogant, snobbish, and stuck up. Insults others who he considers inferior. Abuses Pokemon to the point of exhaustion and on occasion, death. Has a large Napoleonic complex., Personality Flaws- his hole personality is flawed., Background- Born to an upper class WASP( White Anglo-Saxon Protestant) family. Was raised to believe that the lower classes were not worthy of him. Bullies Julian because he believes his parents self-made worth is inferior to his inherited wealth. Follows Julian for no other reason then to mock Julian's success., Position(s)- Bully, Rival, According to Julian "Town Douche-bag", Goals- To become a powerful trainer Pokemon- 1. Male Mudkip, Lv. 5, acts as douche bag-y to Julian and his traveling companions' Pokemon. Moves- Tackle, Tail Whip, Water gun. 2. Female Tallow, Lv. 3, despises Julian. Moves are Quick Attack, peck, and tackle.
| The Derpy Bulbasaur chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
Heard you wanted guy rivals, so here!
Name: Aaron Glider (Aero)
Personality : He' s easily the most
laid-back one of all the characters.
He hates stress and doesn't deal
with stressful things. He' s always
calm when others are freaking out,
and that annoys the person. He's
mellow and passive. He' d rather lay
back and stare at the sky than go off
on adventures. He loves to take naps;
it' s the first thing he does after a
battle. You can mostly see him
leaning on a tree, fast asleep or
looking around and making up
Despite this, he' s a passionate
battler , and completely different
when he 's that way. Some people
wonder if that' s even him when he 's
battling . He' s actually a very smart
guy despite the average grades he
gets. He (again) doesn't bother to
work on his academics because
they' re not very high on his
extremely short list of important
things. Most of his teachers take
notice of this and try to get him to
work more, or at least try. He has
little attention span, and it never
really looks like he' s paying attention
to people. When training, he tries his
hardest to stay on task and his
Pokemon usually end up being the
ones keeping him focused.
He' s usually separated from others
and pretty quiet most of the time,
but it' s really not because he' s shy,
he 'd just rather talk to people he
likes. He'd rather be the one
listening to jokes than telling them.
Most people he 'd rather stay away
from, especially loud people. Really,
he 'd rather be away from people
It seems like he has no temper
whatsoever. He treats everyone the
same way, but that' s probably
because he doesn't care what they' re
like. Girls tend to love him, because
of how cool he acts. Of course, he
ignores most of them, because he
claims relationships are "too much
work" . If and when he does develop
a crush on a girl, he acts differently,
and ignores them in hopes that he' ll
get over it soon. He makes so many
rivals it' s crazy, but he doesn't even
notice or care about the rivalry. If he
were to get into a physical fight, he
wouldn' t lose his cool. He wouldn' t
even bother to fight back. Whoever
argues with him is in for some pain,
he doesn't even look at you if you
shout at him, he just casually
watches the clouds. .. That drives
people insane, of course. In the
event he does reply to someone
arguing it' d be something along the
lines of, "Are you done yet? I want
my quiet now."
A secret of his is that he loves to
write things, especially poems. He
has this weird thing for nature and
he respects it like it' s a person. He
writes about it, and the sky and how
it feels to fly. That is so corny and
dumb to him that he never shows off
his work, even if it is very beautiful.
To him, it' s just another thing in his
life that he doesn't put effort into,
and he denies the talent he has.
Background info: Growing up, Aron was
always calm kid. He was an only
child to his parents so it wasn't like
he had many people to play with,
and his town was mostly made up of
old people and little girls. Instead of
running around playing he spent his
time helping his mom in the flower
shop. Being around so many flowers
must have really mellowed him
down , because he never acted
excited and peppy like most kids. His
parents were always pretty normal
around him, but they were always on
edge and fighting. His dad hated the
calmness and tranquility of Floroma
Town and one day he just gave up.
When he was around the age of
eleven, his mother and father got a
divorce and he was sent to live in the
Hoenn region with his dad, much to
his dismay. It wasn' t because he
disliked his father, he really didn't. He
just wasn't used to anything outside
of Floroma. He was always either
around old people or his parents so
he never made friends or really knew
what it was like to be around boys
his age. The only friend he ever
made in Hoenn was an older man
called Deslin, who was a pilot and
inspired him to become one, too. He
would teach Aero many things about
flying Pokemon and piloting that
Aero just fell in love with it, and
strived to make his goal of becoming
a pilot and a flying type master.
(Maybe even a gym leader or an Elite
Appearance: He' s a very tall, skinny
boy. He' s 5' 11" and weighs around
135 pounds. He doesn't look too
skinny, just very slender and light. He
has a slightly olive skin tone that
doesn' t get sunburned and doesn't
tan easily. He has twig-arms (xD)
since he doesn't bother to work out
of build muscle. He has, in his
opinion, really ugly, bony hands and
feet. He has a "pretty ", heart-shaped
face, you could say. He has blue-ish
violet- ish eyes that always have a
dullness to them, but are pretty
anyways. He gets some freckles, but
there aren' t many and you can only
see them up close. He has chocolate-
brown hair that' s not too long,
parted through the center and is
kept straight, curving towards his
face when it reaches his jaw- line.
Clothes: He wears brown shorts and a
matching brown aviator vest and a
white T-Shirt underneath. He also
wears his aviator' s cap at all times.
During the winter it's the same, except his pants are long.
Position /occupation: Rival
Goals : Hopes to become a Flying-type master and a pilot.
Pokémon: I'll send it seperately, I'm out of room.
| shut up guys chapter 2 . 8/18/2011
I could submit a rival, if you want...
| shut up guys chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
Gosh, it's so rare for me to comment these days. I'm so horrible. xD Anyways, I'm reviewing! (Yes, be proud! :P)
I read this last night, so sorry for my lateness, '
I like it so far, or at least the style of your writing. I'm a little disappointed that you chose to start with Eevee, though. They're way too overused. But other than that, I thought it was great.
Also, I'd like to submit an OC. I see that you have a lot of submitions for a travelling companion, but I'd like to take a shot and one. And if you let me, I'll submit a rival too. :D If it's okay with you, of course.
Looking forward to more!
| sailor phoenix black chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
This seems interesting so I'll submit an Oc
Name: Tsuki Kotone
World: Pokémon world
Personality: Shy at first but once you get to know her she is a kind person who loves all Pokemon but has a fear of humans.
Background info: When she turned 3 her parents abused her non stop, when she turned 5 they just dumped her in the Petalburg forest to fend for herself. They thought that in a few hours she would be dead, but she found a herd of wild Torchic and Ralts and lived with them ever since.
Appearance:: Hair: Wavy almost curly shoulder length sky blue hair with thin pure white streaks. Eyes: Sapphire blue. Clothes: Plain white T-shirt and Jeans. Height: 4'5.
Hope, Ralts, Girl, Very shy at first but is a good friend, hates battling. Very close with her trainer. Moves, Confusion, Teleport, and Double Team. Level 12.
Cyndaquil, Cyndaquil, boy, Can be a hothead at times but is a good friend, loves battling, Not as close but still close with his trainer. Moves, Tackle, Ember, and Quick Attack. Level 13
Romance?: No thanks
Here is My Oc, hope you like her, this is an interesting story please continue
| Penny From Heaven14 chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
Hi, this OC story look really unique, so I'll submit an OC.
Name: Hailey Morgan
Relationship with Julian: Neighbor. She's quite taken to annoying him, due to the fact that he doesn't have a pesky and wicked younger sister. Hailey's quite happy to take that role.
Personality: Around strangers and adults, she's the perfect angel. But around people her age or her friends, she's pretty much the most annoying brat ever. Hailey enjoys being sarcastic, shooting rude remarks, and picking fights. But underneath her rowdiness, there's a heart in there; Hailey just rarely uses it. She can be kind . . .if she wanted to. She may be bold, but she is always afraid to be alone. If she is ever alone, she can't freezes in fear.
Background info: Hailey isn't an orphan, but she wishes she was. At least then, she would have known where her parents were. All she knows about them is that they didn't expect or want her. She was forced to live with her aunt, uncle, and cousin for the first twelve years of her life. Let's just say they didn't like her, either. Hailey learned to be the perfect niece, but she didn't take the advice to heart. Around adults, she would put on her sweetheart facade. But around her cousin and neighbors, she would be the worst. At age twelve, she was shipped to her grandfather's. Her attempted to be kind to her, but he couldn't change what she had become, a hardened soul. His fading health didn't improve Hailey's attitude either. She escapes the house to pester her neighbors whatever chance she gets.
Appearance: Hailey basically has the stature of a twelve year old (if anyone ever dares to ask if she's that age, she'll make sure to add them to her despise list). She has midnight blue eyes and ebony hair that (in the summer) she wears in a high ponytail with two strands of hair hanging to the tops of her shoulders. Her bangs are usually ruffled. In the winter, her ponytail is tied lower and a white and pink beanie (like Dawn's). Her summer clothing consists of a black and white striped tank top and bright pink mini skirt. She always wears dark brown combat boots with dark pink laces. Her winter clothing consists of a dark pink coat with black cuffs and black denim jeans. She also wears black and pink gloves and a black scarf.
Goals: While playing through her Pokemon games, Hailey discovers coordinators. She wishes to be a coordinator, but a different kind. A coordinator with an attitude.
Pichu (Jeanie) (Female) (Around Level 8)- A stubborn, fiesty Pichu who gets along well with Hailey because of their similiar attitudes.
Romance?: I wouldn't mind if you gave her a love interest
| GunnerPow7 chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
Hi! I'll join!
Name: Chris Leaf
World: Pokemon world... (I mean, who has a surname as Leaf? Meh... No offense to anyone out there... _)
Personality :Chris is somewhat the best friend you could ever have because he listens, gives advice and comforts you always. He is always dense in love but though wants to have a relationship...
Background info: Chris lived with his family in Pallet Town with Ash. By the time he was 10, they moved to Sinnoh. There, he started his journey... While there, Chris met Shay, a coordinator, when he was lost in a forest. There, they traveled together. Into their journey, they met a scientist who created a Multi Dimensional Transporter and they were teleported to the place where you'll meet em..
Appearance: (Look at my profile for the pics... Also the clothes )
Position/occupation: Companion please!
Goals: Trainer and Coordinator
Oddish/Female/Absorb, Sunny Day, Tackle, Stun Spore
Feebas/Female/Surf, Dive, Waterfall, Tackle
Growlithe/Male/Ember, Flamethrower, Sunny Day, Tackle
Romance?: Shay Rivers (my OC!)
Name: Shay Rivers
World: Pokemon world... (Chris has gotta have a friend to go with...)
Personality :Shay is a bubbly and a loving character. When you have a problem, Shay will always resolve it... Though helping others out, she longs for a relationship.
Background info: Shay lived the simple life, That all changed when her father won the lottery and became the mayor of the city. She decided to leave the luxury life and go into a journey. While in the forest, she saw Chris. There, they travelled together. Into their journey, they met a scientist who created a Multi Dimensional Transporter and they were teleported to the place where you'll meet em..
Appearance: (Look at my profile for the pics... Also the clothes )
Position/occupation: Companion please!
Totodile/Female/Bite, Water Gun, Surf, Whirlpool
Totodile/Male/Bite, Water Gun, Surf, Whirlpool
Clamperl/Female/Water Pulse, Water Gun, Harden, Whirlpool
Romance?: Chris Leaf (my OC!)
| Lieutenant Pisces chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
Name: Jose M. Carmacon, nickname is Joe
World: Regular world
Relationship with Julian: The town’s self proclaimed Pokemon expert, and good friend of Julian
Personality : Well put simply, he is a complete Pokemon nerd. He constantly studies about Pokemon and knows almost every single thing about Pokemon. This comes with a price because he doesn’t really have much of a personal life. However if anyone asks him about Pokemon he will give them every single fact that he knows about them. A bit of a snob when it comes to his knowledge, but hidden deep, deep, deep, really, REALLY, deep inside he will be brave and selfless. He has a few friends and most of them are young Pokemon lovers like him. His secret guilty pleasure is bowling.
Background info: His father was a rich business tycoon that owns several businesses and his mother was a rich heiress. He had two “perfect” older brothers and Joe was considered to be the black sheep of the family. He has gone through several phases in his life and when he first played a Pokemon, he quickly became addicted. He often stayed in his room or in the basement of his parent’s house playing these games. His parents would constantly try and mold him so they can have the “perfect” family, but once he turned 17, he moved out of his parents house and with some money that he had saved up and bought a small two story house. He converted the bottom of the house into a small video game/card game shop that is slowly growing in business. He often gives advice as kind of the “Wise Nerd That Gives Advice” that you see in a few movies. Game Freak took interest in him for his immense knowledge on Pokemon and sent him a Pokemon. He keeps it roaming in his upstairs loft free and he treats it as an equal.
Appearance: Has short black hair, dark brown eyes, tan skin, 5ft 11in. His normal clothes are a black t-shirt that has a symbol of a Poke Ball on the front of it, a dark red vest that has the label of the store “Kaiju Game Shop” on the back and a small peace sign on the left side of the vest that is unbuttoned, dark blue jeans, and black New Balance shoes. He summer clothes are the same but he has tan cargo shorts that goes to his knees instead of pants. And his winter clothes include a black hoodie jacket that has the label of the store on the back, and a dark blue beanie that has the peace sign on the front of it.
Position/occupation: A traveling companion that provides helpful knowledge on Pokemon, but will mostly watch and he is a half-decent cook.
Goals: His goal is to learn everything about Pokemon so I guess a researcher
Pokémon: An Aron that he nicknamed Kaiju, male, very feisty and hyper and curious Pokemon that will get into anything he can and start ransacking things to see what is inside, he has a dark green scarf that has a peace sign around his neck, he likes Joe and sees him like an father figure but doesn’t listen to him much and is always willing to make new friends, level 8, moves-Tackle, Harden, Mud-Slap, and Stomp (inherited).
Romance?: Well if you can find someone his age then yes. Somehow I see him like the Brock of the group if he was chose, you know smart and older, but still a likeable character. The only difference is that he constantly hits on every pretty girl that he sees. But now I am just rambling. In answer to this question is yes if possible.
| ASDFG96 chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
Name- Adrian "Ghost" Thomas, Gender- Male, Age- 18, World- Pokemon world, Relationship with Julian- traveling companion/ friend, Personality- Serious in nature. Enjoys zombies, ice cream, teaching others, and loves traveling. Highly perceptive to the point where he can differentiate between others by their heartbeats. When he views an abusive trainer, he loses respect for them. When he loses respect for someone, they never get it back. Vegetarian, and meditates twice daily. When angered sufficiently, transformes into (Poke Form)., Personality flaw(s)- Paranoid with strangers, Background info- Father is a Pokemon breeder, mother is Giratina. Born by way of an egg. Is an only child. Grew up in Littleroot town. Has special connections with dragon and ghost types due to parentage. Appearance- (Human Form)6'2", has Red eyes, and gray hair. In summer/ spring, wears a pair of blue jeans, a gray shirt, mirrored sunglasses and black sneakers. In Fall/ Winter, wears a black and white trench coat, black jeans, black combat boots, and a red skull patterned balaclava. (Poke Form)- resembles mother in Origin Form, however, colours of spikes and wings are reversed., Goal(s)- to see and/or capture Rayquaza., Pokemon- 1. Male Gible, Lv. 15, often acts clueless. Moves are Dragon Rush, Bite, Draco Meteor via breeding, Cut. Lives to please Ghost.; 2. Female Bagon, Lv. 1, is a newborn and acts like it. Moves are Tackle, Headbutt, and Tail whip.; 3. Spiritomb, Lv. 50, acts serious. Moves are Ominous Wind, Pursuit, Lick, Hypnosis, and Dream Eater. Given to Ghost for his 15th birthday, serves as his main battler., Romance?- None for now
| Flareon1579 chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
Name: Mackenzie Montgomery (Nickname Kenzie)
Age: 15 A companion is preferred, but whatever works for the story.
Relationship: Close friend
Personality: Mackenzie will usually be nice to everyone unless they give her a reason not to be. She is fiercely loyal to anyone that she sees as a friend and that she trusts. She is usually very open-minded and will hear different opinions before coming to a decision. Some have told her that she can be too trusting. She had a poor upbringing, but still has a naïve/innocent nature that will sometimes get her into trouble. A little bit of a flirt
Back Story: Mackenzie grew up in a small town where everybody knew eachother. Mackenzie’s mother died when she was just a child, so she and her father were really close. Her father didn’t have a job at the time, so they had a hard time keeping up with the rent, which eventually made them move in with Mackenzie’s aunt. She liked it so much there that she stayed even after her dad had gotten back on track. Mackenzie went to school, but got harassed because she had never been in such a big school. She eventually learned how to act to not get picked on, which made her grow up and see what the world is really like.
Appearance: Brown, shoulder length hair. Piercing gray eyes. 5’3”.
-Winter clothes: Dark skinny jeans with a black t-shirt under a white hoodie. She wears royal blue boots that come up to the middle of her shins with the same colored scarf and hat.
-Summer clothes: white knee-length shorts with a teal tank top under a black suit-like vest (im not sure how to describe it, but something along those lines) with a black bracelet on her right wrist and black tennis shoes. She will wear pokeballs on her belt.
Position/occupation: I would like to be a recurring companion, but you can use my character for whatever works.
Stella-Vulpix-Female-Light blue instead of red-Stella doesn’t like being in the pokeball and she doesn’t like losing. Especially to jerks and cheats.-She doesn’t listen to Mackenzie very much at first, but after Mackenzie shows how much she cares for Stella, Stella decides to bond with Mackenzie. It takes a while, but they have a very strong bond later on.-Moves: Flamethrower, Quick Attack, Confuse Ray, Safeguard. Starts at lvl 5, where all the starters lvls start.
Abby-Chikorita-Female-Normal coloring-Unlike Stella, Abby wants to be Mackenzie’s pokemon more than anything, they bond almost instantly-Moves: Razor leaf, Body Slam, Solarbeam, Synthesis, Vine Whip. Lvl 5
Mason-Umbreon-Male-Normal coloring-Mason has a dark past, which makes it hard for him to trust Mackenzie, making their bond a little rocky. It takes a while, but Mason comes out of his dark shell and sees that everyone on Mackenzie’s team is happy, and he wants to be happy too, so he cooperates.-Moves: Faint Attack, Shadow Ball, Dig, Protect. Lvl 5
Romance: I would really like my character to be paired up with someone in the story. I don’t care who.
| hannyfish chapter 1 . 8/18/2011
Heya! I like the sound of this, it's original, unlike most OC stories nowadays -_- So, I'd like to submit, if you don't mind! I can help beta too if you want one!
Name: Sapphire Iridescent Nova Nickname: Saph
World: Pokemon world
Relationship with Julian (If he takes them with him from the regular world): N/A
Personality : She's rather lonely, but she pushes people away, so it's her own fault really. Think of her as a female Paul. She's not as arrogant as him and like 'I'm the best' but she trains hard and won't let anyone in the way of her goals, even if it comes to hurting them. She has a bit of a temper which is easily lost but would help anyone in need if she could. She absolutely hates idiots and arrogance and has a sweet tooth, especially for cakes. She likes Pokemon, and wants hers to be strong so they can protect themselves in case she can't. She has a weakness for drawing, and is good at it, but no one has ever seen her sketchbook.
Background info: She was adopted by-well, how would you react if I told you she has two dads? She was brought up by the both of them well, and she loves them for that. However, she was bullied at school because her 'parents' are gay and that she's adopted as well, and she became distant to them and the rest of the world because of it.
Goals: She's a Trainer now, but she wants to become a Ranger.
Aquarius-Treecko-her starter Pokemon, and he wears a blue scarf around his neck. His moves are basic: Pound, Leer, Protect (taught)
Romance?: Sure, I don't mind.