|Reviews for Consequences|
| Phosphorescent chapter 1 . 8/20/2011
You're a good writer. It's hard to read your story, however, due to its blocky formatting; consider breaking some of your larger paragraphs into smaller ones. Also, you have multiple grammatical errors littered througout the fic. You might want to get a beta reader to help you with this.
With all of that said, you've done a wonderful job capturing Lisbon's emotions in this fic. Your descriptions are vivid and your characterizations are believable. Keep writing!