Reviews for Against the Moon |
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![]() ![]() ![]() A nice chapter that sets up the question of what exactly Sirius will do next time around. I wonder if they'll figure out that the cloak will conceal them even if there are magical devices around? If anything, it will be interesting to see how they find their way to Hogsmeade next time. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay please ignore all the mistakes in that review! I was writing on a mobile device without a proper keyboard (spellcheck killed me). |
![]() ![]() ![]() Okay. I first read this before I had an account, so I didn't review until I had one. My review when I finally got the account just want good enough for such a story, so I've decided to review again. I love EVERYTHING about this story. You have literally made no mistake with the plot or the characters (I haven't read this for ages, so I can't remember your SPaG), and I just wasn't you to know that this is quite possibly the best fanfic I have ever read. EVER. Not just Marauders fics, not just Harry Potter, EVER. Remus is realistically wary at the start, eventually warming up to his fellow Gryffindors, his homesickness and financial problems; Sirius' problems at home are hinted at every now and again, then finally revealed (ch. 109) and his relationship with his family members (ch117 with Regulus was perfect); James is brilliantly spiteful and arrogant at the start (LOVED how Sirius and James were such bitter enemies in that train scene) and how he's completely unaware of Sirius' difficult situation; Peter slowly pulling away, feeling left out. All of the above was perfectly portrayed, brilliantly timed and controlled. I also love more minor characters: Professor Meyrigg, Professor Van Dorn, the rivalry with the Andrews twins and Dorcas Meadowes, Betta MacFausty, Mrs Lupin... All interesting, lovable characters who really add to the story. The pranks are also realistic in the scale of them - there's nothing stupidly big that they'd be incapable if dying at their age, and Remus feels suitably guilty at the beginning of his trouble making career. If I had just read this, I'm sure this review would be longer, commenting on individual scenes, but I haven't, so this is all I have to say: if you're reading this now, I (and many others) would REALLY appreciate it if you update - we're all looking forwards to seeing more of your masterpiece. |
![]() ![]() Amazing story! This is very much what I imagine a canon Marauders story would be like. The Meyrigg storyline was more complex and long lasting than expected. Remus getting a taste for teaching is also good foreshadowing. The wolfsbane heist plot is quite clever and I'm looking forward to seeing where that goes. I like that this story is basically canon other than the new information on Pottermore about Remus' father being named Lyall Lupin and an expert on Boggarts and offending Greyback as part of the Regulation of Magical Creatures department. All of those are minor differences to Remus's story though, and wouldn't change this story much if you made those changes. I really like the realistic depiction of Peter, I'm glad you didn't just leave it as him pretending to be friends with Remus for a decade which other fanfics might have done. James' speech about brothers to Sirius' about Regulus was spot on. The Black family dynamic is much better done than most otherr stories. Not having all of the future Order of the Phoenix members as the same age is also realistic, as is the number of students in each year. Harry's year was probably the smallest in decades or centuries due to the war. Most fanfic authors have a terrible cliché of making everyone ever mentioned from that time be the same age as the Marauders like the Prewetts, Longbottoms, and Dorcas Meadowes. I also thought the inclusion of Fleamont Potter without mention of his Potions brilliance and fortune being largely derived therefrom the invention/sale of Sleekeazy Potion was an odd choice. Slughorn would surely have mentioned it at some point, and probably try to recruit James and Sirius to the Slug Club. Slughorn constantly diving under tables is getting a bit ludicrous at this point too. He tried to hide from Dumbledore and Death Eaters to avoid the war, but he's not a total coward. He's a very talented wizard who rounds up reinforcements to return to the final battle and engages Voldemort directly as part of a 3 on 1 duel with Kingsley and McGonagal in the final Battle of Hogwarts. All that being said, I love the story and can't wait to read more. As a Star Trek fan, I may need to check out your other story. |
![]() ![]() Please write more! I'm enjoying the story so much! I know that you might be busy but if you could just post a new chapter every so often... |
![]() ![]() ![]() absolutely in love with this story, i would buy it as a hardcover if that was possible. i’ve never left a review before but this was so good i had to, i read the entire thing start to finish in like 4 days. any chance you’re continuing it? cause good god i hope so. i really love the characters you’ve created, like Meyrigg and Culpepper and how you blend them in with the existing ones so seamlessly, it all just fits together so well. now excuse me while i go start it from the beginning again |
![]() ![]() ![]() 'Children are already growing up too quickly. That is why we do what we do, Remus. So that you will not need to grow old before your time.' And yet the Remus we meet in PoA shows her efforts are in vain. Stoplight, you break my heart with devastating regularity. |
![]() ![]() "Sirius is always right... Remember that, James, and you'll live longer." ahhh that line just killed me. It's so tragic but SO GOOD |
![]() ![]() I loved it! |
![]() ![]() “'You offered to let me sleep in your bed once before,' he said softly. 'Do you remember?'” Friend, this chapter is so beautiful. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just had to stop my reread to say how much I love the line “If anyone's a match for a Black it's a Potter” :) |
![]() ![]() This is the best fic I have ever read. It is so good. Have you considered starting a patreon or something? To allow consumers to support your creative work? Is that even allowed in fanfiction? I hope it is because I would pay to continue reading this story. It is so flipping good! |
![]() ![]() ![]() 'It seems to me that Mr Black rarely thinks about anything before taking action,' said McGonagall pensively. I really enjoy how you refer back to everything we know about Sirius and Remus in canon, and tuck these little asides in here and there for us to find. Again, it feels like reading a prequel by JKR. The characters feel alive and you've distilled their core traits and behaviours from the original text and used them to make their child-selves 3-dimensional and consistent with who they grew into. ((This particular line made me flash-forward to OotP and the Department of Mysteries, so it wasn't necessarily a *happy* association, but very well done nonetheless)) |
![]() ![]() i never leave reviews but ive read this fic so many times by this point... but really! this is one of my favourite fanworks and i hope you decide to pick it up again, thank you for the work youve done with this, even if you never finish it! |
![]() ![]() this was an excellent read goddamn! and 134 chapters, i admire your dedication |