Reviews for The Voyage of the Byzantium
alaine.105 chapter 7 . 12/10/2011
Wow! Sooo good. Really, really yummy to read. What a great idea. I love your sense of emotion and suspense. In the midst of all reveling, though, I must say one thing that prevented the complete adoration you deserve: River avoids killing when she can; you could still make this scene dramatic by having River shoot Kitty's gun hand (instead of her stomach) and make her left-handed, so that she can never wear a wedding ring. She would die anyway... And Marina's uncle is the head of security; not Marina herself... That's all, apart from how amazing your writing is to read. :)
alaine.105 chapter 6 . 10/24/2011
Awesome! Amazing cool twist at the end of the chapter; I was truly taken by surprise. It was soo good. My choir teachers always tell me that they offer advise for mistakes because I'm good and they want me to be unbeatable. I'm gonna do the same for you: Mistake No. 1 - As soon as the guard saw River's gun, he would have shot her; he wouldn't have wasted time in a stand-off. Mistake No. 2 - River would have tied the guard up rather than set him free to roam the halls; she knew the guard would have attracted attention and drawn the security right to her. And one more (No. 3) - At first sight of River, the guard would have called in the disturbance on a communication device. That's all; you're amazing and so is your writing. :) Can't wait for more!
CaptainRaydorxxx chapter 5 . 10/15/2011
I love this story and this chapter ... the writing style is soo catchy and the story line is soooo coooool :) ... when are you going to write up the next chapter hope its soon !
alaine.105 chapter 5 . 10/1/2011
Pretty good; exciting and interesting as usual... But I personally was a little disappointed that you used the lines from the last episode of season five. And Kitty's reaction seemed a little bit 'textbook blonde.' I suggest going over what you have again and finding descriptions that make the characters come alive; to their own life, the one you make for them. Using what the professional writers on the Doctor Who team wrote for completely different characters does not make your characters more convincing. It just makes me want to watch the Pandorica episodes again. Shoot high, and shoot for individuality. You've got the basics, but I expect more from you. I know you can be amazing.
alaine.105 chapter 4 . 9/18/2011
Nice! Excellently done. Even better than your last chapter. I enjoyed it a lot. Keep it up as well as you can; I know it gets tough to write during the schoolyear. You do a great job anyway. :)
alaine.105 chapter 3 . 9/7/2011
Nice! River's relationship with Marina was a bit predictable, but it was exciting the way Marina had excluded the other hiding place from her mind just long enough to be caught unawares. It was also happy and surprising to realize that Bob wants to marry Kitty! Yay! :D That made me smile. One tip: Try concentrating on synonyms during your next chapter; it will make your writing even more of a joy to read.
alaine.105 chapter 2 . 8/29/2011
Hm-m-m! Suspenseful! Love this chapter. Exciting. Dazzling, really. I can hardly wait to see how far this will intertwine. I can tell it's going to be fabulous. Keep writing; it's fantastic!
Princess1895 chapter 1 . 8/20/2011
I would love to see how this story turns out and to see your back story to the whole "crash of the Byzantium". Can't wait for the next chapter!
alaine.105 chapter 1 . 8/20/2011
Good idea; really like the idea of a backstory for the Byzantium. The whole thing really glows with the excitement of a well-written beginning. Great writing style and you have done a really great job! And I also have to say, because I do every time, poor Bob! (BTW, the Weeping Angels are my favorite monsters, so a lot of appeal for me here.) And I know it's everyone's own council to himself, but I would be able to appreciate your story even better without the sex element. Bob and Kitty's relationship would also more believable without it. But, like I said, good job; I'll keep reading! :D