|Reviews for The Phantom's Phoenix|
| nikki chapter 35 . 4/9
That was an amazing story. I was gripped from the first page. The writing and wording were really good. Its not often you find a story of such a high calliber as this one.
| dgentle100 chapter 19 . 2/12
The Phantom of the Opera is here, inside your mind.
| CatarinaK chapter 2 . 8/16/2015
woah... Actually this character of yours is more realistic than I expected! I'll read more.
| Wynni chapter 19 . 10/18/2014
| Wynni chapter 18 . 10/18/2014
i think you're splendid. Howzat?
| Wynni chapter 17 . 10/18/2014
more love, did you say?
and btw, love her 'splainins to Erik bout the mask
| Wynni chapter 12 . 10/18/2014
Leave you some love?
*3 3 3*
also, this is indeedy a treat to read ;)
| AlteraPars87 chapter 2 . 9/1/2014
Rewriting. I know that little worm that keeps digging on and on... ;)
I like it so far, it feels as if you've given us a bit more of *her* as a person, a bit more depth to it. And there is something more to Erik's musings if my exhausted mind remembers it correctly. I'll be lurking about when I catch some spare time.
| RainyDayPerception chapter 34 . 8/4/2014
I stumbled upon your story by a fluke, but I do not regret reading it. Your summary intrigued me, and I absolutely fell in love with your story the further I progressed in its chapters. What you have written is a very emotionally-driven story with a short but sweet plot, interesting characters that are joy to see go through trials because they respond in such unique ways, and actually come out stronger. For all the limits that are set with your setting and cast, you make me believe in Vivienne, with your descriptive writing and emotional character development, and I was rooting for her and Erik to get together. Your writing style afforded me a vivid visualization of each scene you described, and the small shifts you had in Erik's dialogue truly showed the journey of his emotions for Vivienne. And the symbolism with her hair and Erik's "phoenix" nickname is quite clever. The only problem I can see with your story is its limited variety of plot devices, characters, and settings. It was a breather for me, as a reader, to read Erik go out into the Opera, as it's sometimes nice to see a change in scenery. Regulating Vivienne and Erik to the house on the lake made for a somewhat boring setting, but it did make it quite interesting to have their own doubts be the villain of the story.
Undeniably, I love your story. Very few faults in any section of your writing, and I believe you have a solid story here. Just spice up the setting a little next time. ;) But thank you for posting this story; it's truly fantastic.
| Music24601 chapter 35 . 6/5/2014
I read the original story a long time ago, and when I found this I was excited. But I'm confused as to where the new chapters are And the old ones pick up again.
| Sweetly Intoxicated chapter 7 . 5/19/2014
I'm exhausted from the emotion in the chapter! Well done! Vivienne has much to be angry about with Erik. That's right, she's his captive and she really doesn't have anywhere to go. In a way, I would like more mystery about Erik but I also like that you get into their heads. One little jarring quote: "So I take it you like it." The two "it"s might be reworked. Thank you for the excitement! Di
| Sweetly Intoxicated chapter 6 . 5/19/2014
I like the use of your experience with the viola verses the violin. I didn't check online, but were women allowed in the orchestra in the later 19thC? The phrase, "I could start keeping score," was somewhat jarring; perhaps out of period. I like how Vivienne is slowly getting through to Erik but with the element of potential angry backlash. Moving on to see if Erik pursues the "inner fire." Di
| Guest chapter 35 . 4/13/2014
Gah I love this! Its so passionate and heartfelt. And a really good representation of the Phantom. Well done deary!
| Sweetly Intoxicated chapter 5 . 3/15/2014
Oh! I love the growing attraction Erik has for Vivienne! The last sentence sealed the chapter nicely.
When Erik leaves the second time I would omit "as an honest-to-goodness phantom." Leaving the sentence with "vanished," make him more mysterious and lets the reader make that 'phantom' conclusion...IMO : ) Di
| Sweetly Intoxicated chapter 4 . 3/14/2014
I loved your (Erik's) using the seasons, to describe Christine and Vivienne! The high summer fire would make him intrigued. Regarding the hidden door, it quickly lost its mystery, when Erik came in and surprised Vivienne. I think I'd have her run into the other room so Erik doesn't know that she has discovered it; just my suggestion. Of course, her reaction to the Erik's music always melts my heart. This was a nice chapter. Forward to five I go! Di