|Reviews for come back to me|
| noah chapter 1 . 5/17/2013
ahhhhhhhhhhhh what ?
| dfdfdfdfdf chapter 1 . 6/19/2012
love it gddddf
| Xtsubasa-chanX chapter 1 . 1/31/2012
I love the IDEA.
Okay...would you be insulted if I give you a few advice on how to make your story better? I'm not actually a good author myself, but I guess having joined fanfiction since 2008, I had been reading stories ever since then, and you could say I learned a lot.
First, whenever a new speaker...speaks, you must put whatever he/she said in a new paragraph. Also, use quotation marks, comma, or any other necessary punctuation marks in your sentences and character dialogues.
Second, ummm...your story is kind of...rushed. So, try to give more details about what's happening in a specific scene for better understanding in the reader's part.
Thrid, grammatical errors and typographical errors (but don't worry, it's a common mistake :D)
So I guess that's it. Please don't take this as an insult or anything...I'm just trying to help you out (bacause like I said before, I'm not a good authot myself T.T)
Anyway, I hope you find this useful, and I hope you'll be able to write better stories in the future! :))))
| pandagirl98 chapter 1 . 12/26/2011
-_- you a bad author