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From what I understand, Harry's not trying to recreate his problem, but rather have Hermione make a soul with half of the good and half of the bad, rather then all of one. This crazed Harry is definitely not something I expected from Chapter 1.

Jesus christ

Omg, you caught me off guard there with the autobiography and stuff there, it was thought out in a genius way, I didn't expect it at all XD

you keep using the word 'craven' which means cowardly or fearful, but I am sure you don't mean that where you have written it. I am trying to figure out what typo has happened or what 'correction' the program has done and I can't think what it is.

This was a really nice fic up until the point it dived headfirst into some sort of attempt at philosophy-as-seen-through-the-eyes-of-a-retard.

Practically everything contradicts everything else, but we're supposed to take it as the way the world works? Harry recognises the problem but wants Hermione to replicate it instead of resolving it after he just gets through explaining how it's a terrible thing that he hates?

No thanks.

What a ride. Such a psychological thriller you've created. Much appreciated.

Alright, I really loved it, you are playing with some powerful themes and did a fairly good job. I don't really want to be just another review that is "good story but the ending sux!1!", however it was a bit disappointing and discorded to me. I'll try to put into propped words why I feel like that, so hopefully it is a bit more constructive criticism rather then just more hating.

You are using some powerful themes. Internal chaos, and redemption, both through the reconstruction of Harry's soul and through his suicide. and I feel like that is part of the main problem. The redemption through suicide angle generally works when a character who was before in a 'evil' state of mind returns to a right state of mind, and realises that the horrors he has committed have no way of redemption other then to end their existence. However, this return to a proper state of mind is usually through external forces. Combining it with the internal redemption of piecing together their own soul is where this type of ending goes wrong in my opinion.

Take Harry's soul and thought process in chaos. Why would that state of mind want piece together his soul? you've described it as recognising something is wrong on an intellectual level, that he shouldn't do this, and needs to stop it. However, having this internal drive towards redemption would put you essentially in the state of mind where "redemption through suicide" would be the solution. Instead however, Harry takes the repairing the soul route. Why would he do that? You've mentioned that a core personality trait is that "Harry is a survivor", so maybe some self preservation instinct prevents him from doing this? However, at then same time Chaos Harry is described as very intelligent and insightful. He clearly knows the old Harry, and has essentially laid out his thought process in runes. Chaos Harry should have realised that old Harry's course of action after restoration would be suicide, and those same self preservation instincts would kick in. however, this reasoning for not directly going for the suicide route is already a step worse, since Chaos Harry was the one to inscribe the suicide mechanism in the first place.

The only viable explanation for why Chaos Harry chose this route of redemption is then that he needed something that this course of action achieved. maybe to lure Dumbledore so he could be ended/redeemed as well. However, if that was the point all along, then this was the most convoluted way it could have happened introducing many inconsistencies. Explicitly trying to keep Hermione away from the aftermath, even though her intervention was necessary to survive the ritual long enough to activate the self destruction being the fist of them.

In the end, you end up with an ending to the story that at first glance ties everything up with a neat bow, but either is internally conflicted or overly convoluted, and unsatisfactory as a result.

A downer ending, it should be in the tragedy category, unless there will be some kind of epilogue, showing that Harry faked it and is gaining happiness in obscurity.
Perhaps as a teacher in the muggle world somewhere.

Grindenwald - Grindelwald

gave a testament to trueness - gave as a testament to the trueness

typo
Leglimency - Legilimency

its funny that your whole story falls apart with just one word, veritaserum

So, the story was excellent, and the idea was original, but the ending feels like an exercise in futility. He fights Dumbledore to preserve his life, but a second later takes his own. He forces Hermione to sacrifice her soul to make his whole, but in the end just offs himself anyways. Don’t worry about this review though, it was a good fic regardless.

Really really cool and awesome story. I loved it when I read it, and again when I am rereading it.

dam, what a story. shows how much war changes us, forging us in to something we could have never thought we could become. overwelming us in its post-emotions, threatening to diminish every single bit of sanity we hold in ourselves.

and I think, that you have described that all with extreme beauty.

8.5 chapters were fantastic but your end was very disappointing