|Reviews for Connections|
| Death in a Pink Boa chapter 19 . 3/13
I'm uncomfortable with the way you're writing women. You seem exclusively reduce them to whores and incompetent.
Fluer realizes she loves Harry when she realizes she is not a "knight" and can't rescue people.
The basis for Draco's relationship with Daphne is him saving her from a rape by a twelve-year-old.
Bellatrix and Narcissa are sold off into marriages that require them not only to arrive virgins but provide proof positive of this to the extended family of their husbands.
Do you understand this is difficult for me to stomach? If would be one thing if you adopted the George R.R. Martin strategy of places women in wretched situations, but writing about their reactions as is if they're real people, but you don't.
JK Rowling in no way presents magical society as aggressively misogynist. Woman serve as Auroras, Death Eaters, and Hogwarts Professors. The quidditch locker-rooms are co-ed. Hermione wanders around the boys' dorm at will.
Beyond that, wizards do not have the advantage over witches the muggle men have over muggle women. For a muggle, physical prowess increases they're capacity for violence and coercion. This is not so for the magical, for whom wanded skill determines this abilities. There is not reason for witches to put up with such bullshit.
Anyways, I just really get vex and thrown out of you're story when you go down that route.
It's quite diverting otherwise.
Also, I'm a boy, not some angry lesbian with a chip on her shoulder.
| Mighty pen 20 chapter 19 . 3/8
This is quite an impressive story. Despite its short size, it packs quite a punch. A punch, that is actually bigger than that of many 200k stories. And that is, because you get straight to the point, and there is no random bs or needless, boring descriptions.
One could argue that you get to the point a bit too fast, with no surrounding details, but this is your style of narrative, and it is enjoyable. It can only be employed in fanfiction though, because the reader already knows the general plot points, and is able to fill the gaps.
The multi-perspective route you follow to tell the story and present the side of each person, is something i had not really seen to such a degree before, but it seems to work out nicely.
The plot is not linear, but rather ressembles a staircase, wherein we start from the beginning in each chapter, and we get one step further each time. I thought it would be annoying, but oddly, it seems to fit. The only complaint you' d have from me is that you mentioned the exact same chess speech with Ron twice, once in Hermione' s chapter, and then once again in Ron' s.
Anyway, i really like the fic. Good job!
| Mighty pen 20 chapter 1 . 3/7
Very intriguing beginning. I like it.
Even though it is still a very short story, and it seems like you do not update it regularly, i feel compelled to read it , since this small first chapter makes things look very promising.
| Taure chapter 2 . 1/26
For someone who wants to be alone, Harry sure likes to involve himself in other peoples' business.
| Thorndsword chapter 1 . 1/14
"Don't worry, he's no Riddle"
Why would that bother me? If anything, him not being like Riddle is bothersome.
| VoldLunaMione chapter 9 . 12/29/2013
Sounds like Harry is an INFJ as well as a sociopath. In fact, he sounds rather like me. But more magical.
| Man of Kent - Railwayman chapter 19 . 12/22/2013
| Preier chapter 19 . 12/21/2013
very very impressive and enjoyable story
the chapters with the POVs of the outsiders are splendid, in particular the way they build, touch by touch, your take on the potterverse
thank you for sharing your tales
| XPGamer chapter 19 . 12/16/2013
I'm wondering which "dark lord" is the one who is angry with the Malfoy family
| Algor Nox chapter 18 . 12/16/2013
A hell of a lot less cruel than what was done to Umbridge in the books (gang rape by centaurs).
| Algor Nox chapter 10 . 12/16/2013
Fuuuuck, Fluer being a badass makes her soooo hot. I honestly don't care what a womyn looks like, but if she can save me, or kill a man, I will swoon like I've been drugged.
| Iryelb chapter 19 . 12/9/2013
Great story I like how you keep jumping back to the beginning of the story every chapter to tell it again from another persons perspective, so you can give just that little bit more information and take us just a little closer to the end of the tale. Also, Voldemort is a really nice guy. He always waits until near the end of Harry's school year before enacting his dastardly plot, showing that at the end of the day, he really does care about Harry's education.
| karthik9 chapter 19 . 11/12/2013
It is excellent chapter.I look forward to future updates.
| Perfect Carnage chapter 19 . 11/6/2013
A leopard should never show its true spots, and Mr Potter has the naivety of the wizarding community to thank for the fact that he was not spotted.
Enjoyed this, but too tired to properly convey.
| Wizco chapter 19 . 10/28/2013
By far the best chapter.