|Reviews for Chronicles Of Camelot|
| becuzitswrong chapter 2 . 2/28/2013
I am still enjoying the story, but again, it feels like Harry's reaction to Ron is way over the top. Also, how does he not get detention for cursing Ron? Even if Ron said something 3 times as bad, according to the school rules, it's no excuse for violence aka attacking someone else with magic. While I don't like the character of Ron Weasley, I don't feel he is mean or particularly bigoted (other than against Slytherin). The character almost feels like a Mary Sue designed to remove any possible sympathy for the character. Anyway, I'll read on.
| becuzitswrong chapter 1 . 2/27/2013
Good chapter. I have read a couple of stories using that challenge. Good stuff here. I did have one observation. Harry's reaction to Ron's comment was a bit ooc. Ron always says stupid things. Always. And Harry puts up with them. Or at the worst, takes Ron to task over them. It doesn't make sense that he would immediately escalate to a physical attack on the first friend he has ever had, no matter what the provocation. I could see this ending their friendship, but again, Harry opening a can of whoop ass on Ron doesn't make sense. Hell, he never attacked Malfoy, who basically called her a mudblood, the wizarding world's version of the racial epithet "Nigger". Nasty. Still enjoying your story.
| The Sorting Cat chapter 1 . 2/23/2013
People don't talk like this, especially not kids... :-/
| Angeline G. McFellou chapter 38 . 2/10/2013
*.* People who fanfiction perfect, even very well written.
It took me a few days to read it all but I loved the story and I intend to read the sequel.
Congratulations seen, loved the fic and I'm curious for continuation.
PS: I'm Brazilian, so please disregard the bad grammar / spelling, because I'm reading / commenting on your fic by Google Translate.
| tied chapter 25 . 2/8/2013
Im really enjoying story... But following your intro to the plan to have an ss & lp (le) relationship just does not sit well with me
No (reasonable) parent would ever condon there child bring mistreated
| Anime Princess chapter 24 . 1/13/2013
NO LILY AND SEVERUS! NO! Why is it that SHE is ALWAYS matched with HIM?! FInd someone ELSE! PLEASE!1
| Anime Princess chapter 11 . 1/12/2013
Well, seems like harry is going to have to push his magical and bloodline powers around to get things going the way he wants. I know it isn't what he wants to do, but sometimes its needed to giv people the boot in th rear end that they need ot turn into productive and realatively good hardworking loyal people; instead of just greedily doing things for their own good.
| tidekeeper chapter 37 . 12/30/2012
great story hope there is a sequel
| Nanchih chapter 38 . 12/12/2012
Actually, I'm surprised that Harry allowed Lily to die at all. He had the choice of who died - why not Dumbledore?
Malfoy with three eyes makes no sense. Change both of his eyes if you like, but a Cyclops he isn't.
| Scotland's lass chapter 14 . 12/9/2012
Too right on the only in Scotland bit comin fae one we are honestly eejits sometimes
| morcheller chapter 38 . 12/3/2012
DZ, I have read and enjoyed several of your stories and because of not only that but because this story seems to have a good plot line I read every word of C of C and must say that I am sorry I wasted my time.
There were so many myths, legends, gods, powers, etc. used that there would be no continuity. There were times that it was obvious from reading that even you could not keep it all straight. Then, to top it off, you add this second ending that makes absolutely no sense. Please, keep writing but, try to map out your story and keep to the map. When they get this confused, it is time to trash them and try something else or at least go back to the original plan and do a major rewrite. This could be made into an excellent story and only be about half as long with plenty of room to: develop the characters better, define their powers, exhibit their understanding and use of these powers, and wrap the story up without bad cliche.
One other thing that bothers me about this story. After the original visit to Camelot, and the training received there, there is absolutely no reason to return to Hogwarts and revisit the TWT. Dumbles, Riddle, and the Weasel could be dealt with another way.
| morcheller chapter 31 . 12/2/2012
Harry was starting to feel cold. He wished they'd hurry up...Maybe the foreign students were preparing a dramatic entrance...He remembered what Mr. Weasley had said back at the campsite before the Quidditch World Cup: "always the same - we can't resist showing off when we get together..."
Harry didn't go to the World Cup in your story line!
| Har-El chapter 38 . 11/9/2012
Great story and especially awesome references to The Avengers in the Extended Ending. Keep up the good work.
| Gracealma chapter 37 . 11/7/2012
I was not expecting the ending. Fantastic story.
| Gracealma chapter 36 . 11/7/2012
Ooh, is Dumblejerk in trouble! He doesn't even know it.