|Reviews for Don't tell mum|
| DragonLover9865 chapter 7 . 4/8/2013
I know this review is obviously very late XD. But i absolutely loved this story, and i have read pretty much all of your stories so i don't think u wrote a sequel too it. But i really think there should be one. I know u have other things on your plate now with your other stories that you are writing and that this story maybe a little to old for you to write one now , but i really think you need to write a story where Arthur introducing Merlin to his mother and Hunith meets Arthur's parents,and they all fuss over the wedding. Things could go wrong and Arthur and Merlin almost break up, but make up and fall in love all over again. i know this review is probably just full of rambles and nothing will probably come of it but you never know right, and nothing will ever happen unless people make an effort. i really loved this story and hope u make a sequel, however short it may be, And on a side note. I love how possessive you made Arthur in this story. :)
| Sherlockedholmes chapter 6 . 9/12/2012
OMG I can't stop laughing!
It's all too much! "Merlin Emrys, a wanton sex god with a very bad man between his thigh." LOL Oh the shame he must have felt!
That's from Bridget Jones, I think. I hope I'm not mistaken.
And you are right, I would have done something like that to Gwaine. I love him, he adds so much to this story! I love is relationship with Percy, he really does his best to put Gwaine on a short leash.
I adored the romantic scenes between Merthur, they are just so adorable and heart warming, I love their relationship, it's based on friendship and love. That's what makes them so great.
Gwaine is such a pervert, spying on them while they're having sex in the shower! And actually staying for the show. I pity Percival.
When Uther made his first appearance I loved the way Merlin talked back to him! "Why ask then?" He does have a point.
I looooved Uther! Not the reaction I was expecting. He even made a bet!
And I like how Arthur thinks...making things up to Merlin by giving him a blowjob, not a bad deal.
And Gwaine was so evil leading Hunith so she could catch them on the act. I hated her in this, it's usually the contrary, Hunith as the loving, all accepting mother and Uther as the bad guy. I just don't understand why someone would hate their kids just because of whom they fall in love with, it's pathetic.
However I can't deny that Arthur trying to act like a girl wasn't absolutely hilarious! You are a genius, that was the best way that Merlin could get back at Arthur.
And they almost got caught by Hunith, how embarrassing!
Gwaine deserved what he got! It was so funny. He's so completely shameless.
I felt so bad for Merlin about his mother's reaction :'(
He should've known that Gwaine would try something to get back at him.
And the bitch wonders why Merlin didn't tell her he was gay! Well duh maybe bc she would make a big fuss out of it!
There's such a double standard for gay people. Straight people don't have to come out and say that they are, why should gay or bi do it, right?
And Merlin didn't lie per se, he just didn't tell her sooner.
And no sex before marriage? Is she still stuck in medieval times? Try to date someone as sexy as those two and not have sex before marriage!
Loved this story as usual! Loved how Arthur got a bit possessive and jealous towards the end! Great job! xx
| Meyli Vaisyl chapter 7 . 6/28/2012
This story is so hilarious! I love the "Mine". The last chapter is a little sad but awesome too :)
| frede-is-lonely chapter 6 . 10/9/2011
you took that from briget Jones...and i love you for doing it :)
| Inn0centsmile chapter 7 . 9/27/2011
'Mine!' sorry... cannot stop laughing at that... hahahahahaha great story by the way..
| FlyingFyreFlye chapter 7 . 9/12/2011
Wow, this story was really good. I liked that you made Uther the accepting parent and Hunith the one who took a while to come around because it’s almost always written the other way around and reading the same thing over and over again gets really boring, so thanks for being original _
I think that you wrote everyone’s personalities really well, the way Percival walks around being threatening all the time (especially to Gawain at the end) was brilliant, it made me laugh so hard (is that inappropriate? That I laughed while it was supposed to be angsty?)
The prank war was absolutely epic although it would have been really good if there were other people at the football field to see Gawain naked in the sprinklers glaring at the commentary box. I actually wish I could see it myself :D
Overall I think that you have done a wonderful job with this fic and I really want to read some more of your stuff now :)
| Grizzo chapter 7 . 9/9/2011
| Guest chapter 7 . 9/9/2011
I hope you will write another Merlin and Arthur Story very very Soon with Me in it as Merlin's Sister Helen. I also hope Cenred will be in it as my partner. Love .
| Merthur Dreamer chapter 7 . 9/8/2011
That was the perfect ending, it was just wonderful!
It was so sweet, the fact that Arthur suggested Merlin get some fresh air after the morning's drama, seeing Merlin so distraught. The way Merlin watched Arthur train, watching his muscles... the way he smiled so contently... thinking Arthur was right, that he did feel a little better... it was such a heart-warming moment. But when he saw his mother approaching... the way fear suddenly stung his veins, the way Arthur spotted this and went to support Merlin, there for comfort... The way Hunith seemed so cold, so much ice in her voice, it was frightening. The way she asked if Merlin knew why she was there, then Merlin replied yes so innocently. The way Huntih guessed it was Merlin's boyfriend under the covers, although I laughed at remembering the situation *giggles*, the way she made it seem... sort of wrong, froze my heart. Then when she asked which of them was his boyfriend... the way she said 'it' instead of his boyfriend... guess proves how much she hated the idea. But it made me smile, when Arthur stepped forward, put his arm around Merlin in a gesture of love and comfort, then said it was him... her shock was unspeakable. Then when she took Merlin aside, thats when she let out her anger... I've never seen her like this, seeing this side to her, the contrat between the hurt of not being told, that her own son couldn't confide in her, to the anger of having to find out over the phone. Then when he said so sadly and sincerly that he was sorry, the way she just jabbed him again, saying she was disappointed, then when she asked in everyone knew except her... the way Merlin said was quietly that he was scared of telling her, instead of taking this on board, the way she said with a stinging concern, asking what Merlin thought she'd do to him... the way Merlin sighed, caught between the complex story and the bewilderment of the moment, when he send he broke up for two weeks, that he would explain everything there... hiding how with every question she laid, Merlin died a little more inside, that he would explain things then... the way she paused, then said... that she thought it best he didn't come home... what forced her to such an extent? The pain on Merlin's face broke my heart, the fear in his voice when he asked if she didn't want him home... the way she replied with such unyield... not right now, the way she patted his shoulder than walked away... Merlin's hurt of losing his mother cut so deep.
When Merlin walked back to Arthur in his despair and haze, the way Arthur asked with such concern and worry, what did she say... the way Arthur lifted his head so gently, so tenderly... then Merlin looked into his distressed, waiting eyes... the way he let the moment take him, the way he just shook his head and let the tears fall, the way Arthur whisphered 'Baby' so softly, then held him tight in an embrace of comfort and reassurance. It was so touching, the way Arthur was there for Merlin, the way he held him, never letting go. It broke my heart though, how Arthur felt so useless, seeing Merlin like this, the way it pained him to his core. Then from the loving and tender moment... the way Percival grabbed Gwaine and said with such force that he'd break Gwaine if he didn't fix this, the way Gwaine realised what he did, the way his guilt flooded him. It was nice to see Gwaine trying to put things right... when Gwaine ran to her and called her name. When she asked in he was alright, slightly confused, the way he said not really, then asked her to walk with him...
Once Gwaine explained the situation, saying that it was his fault that he switched the numbers... Hunith's shock was priceless. But even so, the fact that Merlin lied to her still hurt. Then when Gwaine put her mind to rest, saying Merlin and Arthur didn't know they were gay, they just fell in love... kind of scaring both of them at first since they hated each other to begin with. I thought it was so heartfelt, how Gwaine said it must be scary for them, not thinking they'd fall in love, and fall so deeply. Then when they reached the field, it was so touching, how they found Arthur comforting Merlin, pushing his hair back and kissing his forehead so sweetly. The way Hunith suddenly said... that they really love each other, don't they... then when Gwaine said yes... I just thought the moment was so sweet.
When Huntih came back, the way Arthur tightened at her voice, rage filling him at being Merlin's mother or not, thinking how dare she hurt him this way. When he said that he thought it a bad idea... the way Hunith looked so sorry... and Merlin turned to face her... the way Arthur called everyone off... the atmosphere was thick with emotion. Then when Hunith said that she didn't hate Merlin, or felt disappointed by the fact he was gay... the sincerity in her voice was so heart-warming. When she asked Arthur if he loved Merlin, the way he smiled and said with such affection, yes, then she asked Merlin the same and he said the same... in that moment, Huntih realised that they were eternally devoted to each other. And it was so heart-warming, when she gave them her blessing... then I laughed so hard when she asked if they had sex... having done it twice the previous night! The way Merlin knew where this was going was hilarious, how he said it was different. Then when Arthur got confused, then Merlin said that his Mother was a believer of sex after marriage, her reaction was priceless. But when Merlin said that the times were different, secretly telling her that, yes, they have had sex... the way he commented that those couples saw a future together, then asked if Merlin saw himself spending the rest of his life with Arthur... the way his heart suddenly burst at the question, the way the words flowed so easily... it was so heart-warmingly moving, how Merlin said that he didn't know what he'd do without Arthur, the way that he was everything to him... and Arthur's bashful, touched expression was adorable. Then when Merlin said that, yes, they were two men, so they can only marry... but that Merlin would be content with Arthur, forever happy as long as he had him... my heart melted at this heartfelt display of loving emotion. Then when Arthur said they could adopt... the fact that Arthur would do that... proving their future... my heart sang. Even more so when Arthur said so tenderly, with a forming smile, only eyes for Merlin, that he was reason he existed, that he was the reason he woke up, that he loved that smile of his, that he loved sleeping, since he had Merlin in his arms... the moment was just... tear-worthy. Then when Hunith asked about meeting Arthur's parents... to talk about the wedding! *Sequel!* My heart filled with such joyous bliss. And she shall meet them... because Arthur and Merlin are of course, spending the break in each other's pants.
When they got back to the dorm, the fact everyone was there made me smile... then when Merlin said she approves, the happiness that erupted was so nice to see. Then... when Gwaine apologised, that was sweet, Merlin forgiving him in a hug... but when Arthur saw this, the way his possessiveness overwhelmed all sense, when he shouted hey and wrapped his arms around Merlin and whispered 'Mine' with such love and seduction... Merlin's goofy grin at this filled me with such a glee. Then when Merlin gently kissed Arthur, and replied 'Yours' in a tender whispher, so happy that he could finally be and express his love for Arthur everywhere and anywhere. The way Arthur looked into his eyes so affectionately, losing himself in his Merlin, and whisphered back 'Always' then kissed him once more... it was such a magical moment... the perfect ending.
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| Merthur Dreamer chapter 6 . 9/7/2011
I think I'm in love with this story, its amazing. This chapter may have been small, but it was one of the most romantic and funny chapters you have ever written (thought the prank almost killed me).
When Arthur stepped out of the shower then walked into the room... the way Merlin was waiting... naked for Arthur... the moment was amazing, the sexual tension blazing. When Merlin told Arthur to 'Come on' not only did I find the seductive tone he used, so sexy, but I laughed so hard at the pun and innuendo in those two words. The way Arthur asked if Merlin was sure though, the way he didn't want to force Merlin into doing it, only does that show how much he cares for Merlin, but the look of affection in his eyes melted my heart. Then when Merlin corrected him, saying he did like it, that made me grin. But when Merlin said that he gets embarrassed by it... the way Arthur said that there was no need to be with such tenderness, such love... it was such a beautiful moment. Then when he kissed him... every time they kiss... it is so magical. The way Merlin reached for Arthur's head and deepened the kiss, the passionate consuming them quickly. The way they sighed when they were perfectly aligned and together... what sighs of fire. When Arthur took Merlin wrists and put them above his head, the way he told him to keep them there with such lust glazed, then started to kiss his way down... it was amazing. The heat that every kiss gave Merlin was extraordinary, the want and love expressed in the pressure. When he sucked on Merlin's nipples, his moans of thunder were extreme to say the least, the way he arched his back in the overpowering pleasure. When Arthur reached Merlin's cock, the way it was already indescribablly hard was incredible, the painful need in Merlin's voice. Then when Arthur took him in his mouth... the fireworks were like no other. The way Arthur sucked so hard, the way Merlin just melted into the feelings, letting the pleasure wash over him as Arthur made him see stars. The passion in Arthur's tongue, how he made Merlin buck in the moment. And when he moaned around Merlin... the way it sent such tingles throughout his body and he came in a heart beat... even I was panting. It made me smile, how Arthur asked if he was ready for more and Merlin said 'Stupid question'. He'll always be ready for Arthur. Then when Merlin was in place... the way Arthur again, asked if he was sure was so romantic, such concern and loce in his eyes. But when Merlin sealed the deal... there was no going back. The effect Arthur has on Merlin, how Arthur looked at his arse and caressed it with such longing, such intimacy... it was so touching... how in that moment... not only was this a lustful experience... but it was a statement of their love and undying devotion... it was so heart-warming. Then as soon as Arthur put his tongue in Merlin... the way ripples of goosebumps coursed through Merlin was overwhelming. As soon as Arthur put his finger in Merlin and started the dual treatment... I think Merlin's want was through the roof. The way Merlin almost exploded, begged for Arthur's cock... the sheer need for Arthur to fill him was bloody marvellous. Then when Arthur finally fully sheathered himself inside Merlin... the chemicals, the feelings that rushed through Merlin's veins at that moment were... beyond compare. As Arthur thrusted into Merlin... the groans that would bring down mountains, the way with every thrust brough new sensations of unspeakable pleasure, the way they needed more, more of the moment, the way their desire bursted through them, trying to get the most from this astonishing and completely overwhelming experience of passionate love. Then when they came... the world saw stars... the mist of lust in love was just... wow.
Then when Arthur moved them to the other bed... I thought it was so heart-warmingly touching, how they fell asleep in each other's arms.
When Merlin woke up to find his phone ringing, the way he moved and moaned so loud when Arhtur slipped out of him was bloody fluffy hilarious. But I thought it was so tender, so loving, how Arthur stopped him, not wanting him to answer the phone, so annoyed that it spoiled the moment. Then when Merlin said his phone was ringing, and it stopped just at that moment... Arthur's smirk of suggestion tugged at my heart strings. Then when Arthur brought him back down... the way Merlin slowly started to thrust forward... resuming last night's heat. When he took them in hand and started pumping, the electricity that ruptured through their very souls was beyond this world. Then when Merlin quickened and Arthur started fingering him... the emotion was so heavy, the passionate was so intense. The way every thrust brough a new spark of promise... their cries of joy silencing all... After the panting of a lifetime, it was so sweet how Arthur groaned when the phone rang again, spoiling the moment... again! Then when Merlin saw it was Gwaine calling, the way he smiled and replied whislt looking at Arthur with such satisfation, that it was Merlin Emrys, sex god with a bad man between his thighs... Arthur's laughter was perfect... the moment was so touching... until the sudden shock and horror shot through Merlin... as he questioned... Mum? My heart stopped.
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| Merthur Dreamer chapter 5 . 9/7/2011
*giggles* This made me laugh so much, I mean so much!
I loved this! It was perfect! I liked how it was all coming together, the text from Jamie and the party starting. It was so sweet how they stayed together at the party, only to part ways as Merlin got a drink. When Merlin saw it was Percival who was talking to him, it was nice how he congratulated him, of course, Percival bragging a bit about how no-one would tackle him. Then when Merlin laughed and said no-one in their right mind would tackle Percival... then Percival put his arm on Merlin's shoulder... the way Merlin just knew that Percival would die if Arthur saw, the way he warned him was priceless. But when Percival said that Arthur wouldn't do anything, the way Merlin wasn't so sure, the way he knew that Arthur was so possessive over him... my heart sang at that moment. Then Percival's little plan to see who was right was quite amusing, how he told Merlin to laugh and get Arthur's attention, then when Merlin said he'd tell him about the Gwaine prank... then when they put it into action... when Arthur turned round and saw Merlin laughing with another guy, the fireworks were amazing. I have never seen such raw hate and sudden need to see Merlin in him. It was so fluffy funny, but so touching, how he thinks Merlin as only his when he walked towards them.
I liked how Percival loves the idea, his laughter at what was going to happen was infectious, I couldn't stop laughing myself. How he was going to leave the party early... not now, not so likely, the way he'll stay to see Gwaine made me giggles though *hints at Percival's crush on Gwaine*. Then when Merlin felt Arthur tug his arm and pull him into a tight embrace... Arthur wanting to keep Merlin close, the way he clung onto him for dear life, not wanting to let go... it melted my heart. Even more so when Arthur threaten Percival so furiously, saying that if he touched Merlin ever again, he would outright destory him... it was truly heart-warming, how possessive Arthur was, his affections for Merlin shining through, his love running so deep. When Percival backed off, and said that he meant no harm, the way he was quite surprised how Merlin was right was perfect. Then when Merlin gave Arthur a kiss... it was so tender, even more so when he looked into Arthur's eyes so lovingly and said that no, no he wasn't... the moment was so beautiful. Arthur's sudden innocence and pouty lips were adorable, when he asked if they set this up... but the way Merlin so seductively said that he loved how possessive Arthur was of him... the heat suddenly went so high. When Merlin started kissing his neck, the way Arthur grinned and said Merlin couldn't get round him that easily... the way Merlin said with such lust glazed eyes that what if he changed his mind about tonight... the way Arthur suddenly said he was forgiven was priceless... not wanting to miss out on the pleasure promised. It was such a fluffy hot moment. Then when Merlin said he thought he'd forgive him, the way he hugged him was so sweet... but the time as come... the prank must be done!
When they caught sight of Gwaine... my heart skipped a beat, then when Merlin rushed to get his clothes... I was already in fits. The way they knew Gwaine would have to go to the party to get to his dorm was GENIUS!... And when Arthur put the lights on, and then put the sprinklers on... then said in the mic, that it was his football captain speaking, that he must go back to his dorm to get changed... my grin was so wide and I think I took the house down with my laughter and giggles. When Merlin said that he had his clothes, then finally gave him reason for the prank... that sent me over the edge... I think I was crying a bit. It was brilliant! Gwaine's cursing when he saw the two was just great, when he knew he would have to go to the party... naked. His bow was most amusing... but he had revenge in mind? Oh No... When Percival told them all to get their cameras ready... the moment Gwaine walked through those doors, thinking he'd run and try not feel uncomfortable about it... the moment he saw the flashes... my sides were splitting, even more so when Gwaine shouted in his embrassement that they all wanted it... But I did feel kind of sorry for him, when he knew Jamie would never go out with him, that he knew Arthur and Merlin asked her for help. But her comment was funny, when she told him not to catch a cold *giggles*
Even I would have tipped my hat to them, the prank WAS brilliant. But the way Arthur knew Gwaine might want payback, the way Merlin thought they were even now... but when Gwaine went to their dorm... I think I actually shouted 'NO!' at my laptop... What did he change on Merlin's phone, he is such a smug little...
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| Merthur Dreamer chapter 4 . 9/6/2011
Awww this chapter was so adorable! It was just so cute.
I absolutly loved the beginning, the way Merlin and Arthur were putting their plan into action, I just loved the whole idea. The way Merlin and Arthur had to put on a front as to not give the game away. When they got Jamie, knowing Gwaine always flirted with her and tried to ask her out, and how she always turned her down, she was perfect for their plan. When they got her when Gwaine was in class and told her of the plan, the fact that she would only agree if they took pictures and put them around the campus... was brilliant. I loved how Merlin and Arthur agreed to her genius idea. I liked how they told her she had to act jealous and make sure Gwaine noticed, how she agreed and gave their moblie numbers. This plan is going to be legendary.
I love how they watched from afar as Gwaine kept falling for their plan. When Arthur came in and kissed Merlin in greeting, I thought that moment was just so romantic and heartfelt, its the little things that make me smile too. And it was hilarious, when Merlin was so shocked and suddenly slightly paniced that Gwaine had been snogging her, how she wasn't meant to do that. Then after Arthur reassured him... the way Merlin finally noticed Arthur's sweaty state... drawing attention to certain levels of his anatomy... the way he looked at Arthur was such want in his eyes. When he asked him if he had been training, then Arthur said yes... Merlin's mini plan was genius. When he told Arthur to sit down and have five minutes, Arthur's slight confusion was so fluffy funny, then when he asked, five minutes of what, the way Merlin just jumped onto him and straddled him and said five minutes of me... both only did I think the moment was so hot and quite tender... but wouldn't that just make Arthur sweat even more? XD The heat was so intense, these boys just can't keep their hands off each other, the way Merlin wrapped his arms around Arthur and ground his erection into him with such force, such passion... I noticed steam on my windows. Then when Arthur kissed him like there was no tomorrow and squeezed his arse... their lust and love was just radiating by then. Then when Jamie came in... it made me smile, the way she said did they ever stop. But what Arthur said next... it thought was so heartfelt, the way he said no, they didn't stop... his love for Merlin shining through his eyes, expressing how much he wants and needs Merlin in three words. It was very very heart-warming. But then Merlin made it all professional, saying why was she kissing him, that wasn't the plan, but of course, Jamie has her own ideas on how to make Gwaine beg for more... Arthur's evil smirk and approval was most humourous. Then when Merlin asked if she was falling fo him... Jamie instant disgust at the very idea, how she has to imagine her girlfriend when she's kissing Gwaine... Merlin and Arthur's shock was perfect. Genius. Annd it was nice to know that they'll keep her secret. Her exit was brilliant to say the least.
Then as soon as she left... Merlin's eagerness was overwhelming, the way he said he'd lock the door and zoomed over there. Then when he turned round... to reveal a now naked Arthur... it made me smile, the way they are just so in love... and the way their lust and want for the other overpowers everything else. Merlin's pun made me laugh, when he asked if Arthur was hot. And what Arthur said next made my heart sing, when he held Merlin's hands so gently and said with so much affection... that he was only hot for Merlin, his love bursting through, and his emotions pouring out. It was such a tender moment, I think my heart melted. The way he just said with the biggest grin that he needed Merlin in the shower, the way Merlin bantered and said to shout him when that part came, then went to sit back down, I did laugh. The way Arthur said so seductively 'I don't think so Merlin' then grabbed his hand and said he was coming with him... the way Merlin sighed and said if he must made me smile, their banter is just so cute. I loved the medieval reference, where Merlin might as well be a servant and Arthur a big-headed prince.
When the big game against Mercia came... the atmosphere was brilliant. When Merlin saw Cenred's gestures, the way he got worried about Arthur, that he might get hurt, was so heart-warming. Then when Merlin called him over, the way Arthur gave him a kiss in greeting was both so touching... and it just shows how much he loves Merlin and is not afraid to show it, the way he kissed him in public without a second thought. The way Merlin told Arthur to be careful, because Cenred was going to play rough... the way Arthur just got a massive grin at Merlin's concern was so adorable. It was truly touching, when Merlin wrapped his arms around Arthur and warned him to be careful for another time. The moment was just so perfect, the world seemed to stop for them, the way Arthur wrapped his arms around Merlin and breathed in his scent, how he said he didn't know what Merlin did to him, the way he said he wanted him with such affection... it was so romantic. The next bit made me smile something silly, how Merlin would let Arthur do that thing to him, how he gets embrassed by it a bit. The way Arthur perked right up, want glazing his eyes, how he knew he'd win the game now, then gave Merlin a most passionate kiss, warming my heart.
I loved their plan, it was amazing. Using Percival like that was genius. And they WON! *victory dance* Cenred really needs to man up about these things. What makes me so happy when I read this fic, is that Merlin and Arthur only have eyes for each other, they seriously can't be without contact for too long, its so touching how much they love each other. The way Merlin said Cenred was hoping th goal post was Arthur right now, while in Arthur's arms. But when Arthur pointed out Gwaine... how Jamie whispered something in his ear... the plan is certainly coming together. I loved it when Arthur said it was on to Merlin, and how he can't contain his laughter.
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| Team1DUnionJcat chapter 7 . 9/4/2011
Amazing! I love it! :D
| x.keepingthemoon.x chapter 7 . 9/3/2011
that was so lovely and sweet it think i might cry!
thanks heaps for a great story :)
(wipes away tears)
| Canadian-23 chapter 7 . 9/3/2011
Great ending! Love the way Gwaine fix everything and that Hunith finally approves! Great story again and I love your work! I truly can't wait to see more of your Merlin and Arthur stories and you are amazing :) :)