|Reviews for Eternal love|
| MaliceArchangela chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
I like how you started off in a kind of "in media res". It works better most times than a "Hi, my name is Sally, I am blankity-blank and blank..."
Okay, first things first. You've got a few run-on sentences in the beginning when you're describing the characters. It makes it kind of hard to keep up. Maybe you could blend the details into the story more, instead of just giving all the information up front?
Duck butt hair! Awesome!
The first sentence of Chapter 1.2 is a little off. It needs some punctuation and altering so it flows easier.
You do have some misspelled words such as "Manga" in the first part and "Idiot" in the second. Though that would be the downside of using a manga for fanfic, I suppose. You get used to ignoring the claims of misspelling with the characters' names, and so are less likely to notice when other words got mistyped.
But other than that, it's a nice start.
| Dragonfire2lm chapter 1 . 8/27/2011
to anyone that reads reviews.. NO FLAMING!...and yes I do own the ridculously large amount of Doctor Who stuff...