Reviews for Wizard Behind the Wheel |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I know this is years old but damn, I want more! This is excellently written and really compelling and I just want more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() On the one hand, this is well-written, and I like how this depicts Harry as an adult and his work as an auror. On the other hand, it does kinda feel like Ron-bashing (which there's a ton of on this site), and I think it's a kinda cheap tactic when fanfiction writers take one throwaway line and create huge plot-holes around it. Consequences for Ron are one thing, but I don't know that this really needed to build up to Westley losing his job, Ron being placed on leave, the possible end of his and Hermione's marriage, Dumbledore's speech at Cedric's funeral, etc. - the stakes feel higher than they did during the actual war. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Maybe I'm a glutton for punishment, but I'd love to see more of the fallout. I guess that's a sign of a well-written story, that when it's over I don't want it to end. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Enjoyable. |
![]() ![]() This is be realistic. I can see this happening in canon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() A followup would be nice, however I like what you did there. I also agree on your thoughts regarding the epilogue. Frankly Hermione should have ended up with someone who respected her instead of someone who thinks she's an in suffer able know it all at worst and a buddy at best. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ron's little remark is meant to be funny. A punch-line, an aside. Ron, you scamp! Honestly, in this version, there's a possibility both Weasleys would be on the outs with Harry and Hermione. I could see it snowballing to them divorcing and getting together with each other. Ginny and Ron, I mean. Caribous, you scamp! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love this! Hope you write another chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really like this story. It is truly profound. In some ways I think it parallels “Daphne’s letter from the Future” by TomHRichardson, except this is obviously far more dystopia. Your concerns about the EWE of course are echoed by many of us. Ron’s character isn’t any surprise. I think you make him true to his character in canon (only the novels for me). Harry’s epiphany coming so isn’t anything anything we can blame him about. Harry was so socially stunted it well could take that much time for him to realize it. Re Ron’s character, for me Hermione has no excuse. She is/was far better socialized. Furthermore, I can’t imagine that Ron’s desertions in GoF and DH could ever make her disposed to be with him romantically. That is my huge criticism of JKR — the canon pairings are too forced and contrived, totally counter to the characters she’s drawn. I would dearly love to see this continued. As it is ten rears since you published, I won’t count on it. However, I would be delighted were you to give us more. TGM |
![]() ![]() ![]() Love this. And I would love to see how more consequences play out. Harry would get burned for initially hiding the instigator... Hermione would hit the roof. Fantastic little character study. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ooh, I really enjoyed this. It answers some questions that should really be answered - you can't just change things with no consequences. It's unfortunate that it had to go so far in this fic, but it's all very plausible. I do think it's unfortunate that it wasn't wrapped up a bit more - even something like, "three days later, the Obliviators were finally finished, having modified the memories of 87 Muggles" would have been nice. And honestly, had Ron instead modified the employee's and manager's memories so he was fired mistakenly rather than not fired at all, this probably would have been a lot simpler to clean up while retaining the same moral issue, but it might not have illustrated the overarching problem and consequences so well. Anyway! Great gapfiller, I really like how this fits in and includes the Obliviators that we never got to see much of. |
![]() ![]() ![]() It’s amazing how you made an entire fic from what most people probably just took as a throwaway line! It was really interesting to see how they dealt with the breach. Thanks for writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The flashbacks feel kinda pointless when they aren't leading up to anything except showing that the victim told plenty of people. And that one of them might be Dennis Creevey. As it stands the story doesn't work all that well, it's just a fragment. There's a build-up, but no narrative climax and no catharsis/completion. |
![]() ![]() I like Ron...but Harry really should have nailed him with something lethal (preferably not an unforgivable...maybe Sectesumpra?). That to me is the best way to cover up a statute of secrecy breach, in addition to obliviating the muggles involved, is killing the offender, so they can't breach the statute again. |
![]() ![]() This is very well done. Ron’s actions in the epilogue are deplorable and this story explores that very well. |