|Reviews for undisclosed desires|
| Moreplease chapter 1 . 9/12/2011
This is really hot... The ending is sweet.
| LuLuSims chapter 1 . 9/12/2011
Holy hell... this story is just above and beyond disgustingly hot. I mean... where do I begin? First off, the foreplay was delicious and then when it actually got down to business, Logan's gusto was seriously erotic. Yummmmm! Please write more Jogan/Light!
| TheRedHatter chapter 1 . 9/6/2011
it was good story, the smut was great, love the part when Julian say please dont hit me, the end was great, please do more youre good at this
| foreverwasmadeforus chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
I NEED MORE
THAT WAS JUST FANTASTIC.
| ooo a jellybean chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
i thought you did a wonderful job with the smut :)
i liked the ending as well
| hallowedhalls chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
GUESS WHAT TIME IT IS.
IT'S TIME FOR MY SUPERLEGNTHY PLAY-BY-PLAY REVIEW. /shot.
The first lines. Oh, my god, the first lines. Like I swear to you, that's when I knew I would never stop until I read all of this. And then we launched right into the foreplay-right-before-sex and I was all HNNG MORE PLEASE. IT WAS STREAM-OF-CONCIOUSNESS-ISH TOO WHICH WAS LOVELY because you always get more sensation and stuff when it's like that. And the Logan being drunk and Julian's realization was perfectly written because it was this little haze and thought-sliver and then realization and ANGS - WAIT NO SMUT. Which was awesome. :P
"He's getting laid. Fuck morals."
THE MOST BEAUTIFUL QUOTE EVER AND EVER AND EVER. It's just. PERFECT. And then Logan - even though he's drunk - is still taking control, because he's just that kind of guy, and it makes it less of a oh-god-i'm-possibly-taking-way-too-much-advantage-of-a-drunk-person because it wasn't like Julian was the one manhandling him into the sex, most of the manhandling came from Logan. AND THEN GUH MY BRAIN SHORT-CIRCUITED but came back to life because I needed a brain to read this. And then it kind of shifted from Julian to Logan, which was a really nice touch, and it showed that he wasn't completely gone because aside from body response you had some - lots - of mental response from him and parts and am I making sense?
AND THEN. LOGAN STARTED TALKING. AND MY BRAIN JUST ROLLED RIGHT INTO THE GUTTER AND MELTED BECAUSE HOLY FUCK THE WAY HE /TALKS/ AND JUST IT'S UNF. (this would be the part where I start blushing madly because it's one thing to read it in their thoughts and it's quite another thing to read the things he's saying being said outloud and /oh/.)
I really liked the way the actual sex itself rolled, too, because I know Logan's all like top and stuff but Julian isn't the kind of guy to roll over and let himself get fucked (I think) and he's kind of toppish-from-bottomish and it was just less power plays because both of them kind of knew exactly where they stood and just. Oh my god. Plus, how they were both kind of rough and despite that, Logan sweet-talking Julian and it was like he's a lover and a fighter and he's both and they're all mixed together and it SHOWS because the sex is rough but they're still kind of soft and sweet both during and after and just awwwww. CUDDLES. 8D /has a weak spot for light cuddling.
And then the morning after - it was just adorable. I mean you had angsty Julian being all like 'oh I'm going to have to leave and hopes he never remembers this or he'll be really mad at me and even though it was the best night of my life I'll probably never be able to actually be in it again' and stuff, and then they had their little revelation and stuff and it was like neither of them are totally blameless or have spotless reasons for sleeping with each other but it's still intentional and them and just a little twisted and guh. And then Logan's like 'come back to bed,' and I just melted and I'm like LOGAN YOU NEED TO DO THIS IN CANON NAO PLZ. AND FLUFF AND SUGAR AND ALL THE ADORABLE THINGS IN THE WORLD.
AND THEN THE LAST FOUR LINES I WAS LIKE O_O PERFECTION. And I love how Julian gives this vague approximation of 'I'm not that kind of girl' and I'm like JULES LET ME LOVE YOU YOU'RE SO ADORABLE. And then they just made this casual plan and it wasn't awkward and EXCUSE ME WHILE I GO FLAIL IN HAPPINESS.
(AND IF THIS REALLY IS YOUR LAST TIME WRITING SMUT AND NOTHING WE DO CAN CONVINCE YOU TO DO IT AGAIN I WILL TREASURE IT FOREVER AND EVER BECAUSE IT'S JOGAN SMUT AND IT ENCOMPASSES GENRES AND I'M GOING TO MELT AGAIN SOON SO LET ME TELL YOU PLEASE NO IT CAN'T BE THE LAST TIME YOU WRITE SMUT OR I WILL /DIE/.)
lol sorry for the review!spam I just have so many . -_-' If you made it all the way to the bottom of this you're a brave, brave woman.
| MakeMeCrazier chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
Oh wow. This story ranges from angst, to fucking UNF, to slight angst at the 'no touching', to more fucking UNF, and to 'AWWW!' and 'YES!'.
Basically, in summary, I absolutely loved it. It was dynamic, hot, and so in character. And really. REALLY HOT.
| nothinglefthere chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
"Also this right here? Last time I'm writing smut."
THIS WAS THE ONLY PART I DIDN'T LIKE.
| RavenRay too lazy to log in chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
I loved this. I think it's so like...idk, perfect, how Julian thought it was only a fuck, and how he actually KNEW that, and because of that, he refused to have any type of intimate slight moments while they had sex. Because he just wanted the sex to be sex, and he was afraid that if he let it be anything more, with you know, feelings and whatnot, he would get too attached and upset.
I just..loved how you portrayed that, and I thought it was absolutely perfect. And I think you're perfect. And...I'd love to see the date.