|Reviews for If I Die By Sunrise (formally entitled If I Die Young)|
| Lara F chapter 20 . 2/17
Full on action in this chapter. I always like how you add the little touches to your story showing us Jerry and Charley's bond.
Really well-done on the flow of this chapter, the tension that built up simultaneously between them and the tension that built up with the new foes.
I really liked the change of pace in this chapter, from Charley's perspective.
I can see Jerry making an "executive decision" on how things will be from now on.
The chapter flowed fast and hard. I love the balance of internal and external emotions here.
I'm looking forward to seeing where you go next.
| Lara F chapter 19 . 2/17
You really got Peter's character spot on, he's not too weak or annoying, he's just Peter.
This is a very interesting turn of events and I'm really curious to see where you'll take it in the next chapters.
The conversations in particular are very enjoyable, with the characters being developed slowly but clearly and the relationships between them all gaining depth and warmth.
That put a stamp of reality on the whole thing very well.
The leap of trust was lovely and I was glad to see everyone reciprocating, their feelings shown through actions very cleverly.
I can really see your scenes (and sometimes smell them too) as you keep progressing with this story.
| Lara F chapter 18 . 2/17
My new favorite chapter so far, all of them were amazing but every time you write a new one it becomes my new favorite, lol.
In tons of other fics they rush into it one sentence in, but here you are pacing it perfectly, and you've timed it so nothing at all seems forced. And I just think that's really wonderful.
| Lara F chapter 17 . 2/17
9000 views? It's good, but I want you to know that at least 4579 views have come from me.
You and your story are worth more. While most authors have fallen out of the game, you kept on writing and always trying to surprise us with each new chapter.
It is truly one of the greatest joys to read your work!
You have such a clever way of tying all your different story threads together, that is such a pleasure to read.
As to Keith, I always wanted him to die a very painful death! If there is something that Charley has already mastered is to get in trouble. lol
| angelallie15 chapter 19 . 12/31/2013
I hope he'll be okay :)
| orionastro chapter 19 . 12/26/2013
very good new Chapter, i suspect that Ed now will start to investigate all about the supernatural , and becoming the greatest expert, and beware Jerry , he will discover many ways to kill, hurt any supernatural creatures . Cant hardly wait for the next chapter
| angelallie15 chapter 18 . 11/27/2013
I love it :)
| orionastro chapter 18 . 11/19/2013
very good new chapter , but when will Ed come to the rescue with his amazing magical powers , to save Charley from Jerry , Can't hardly wait for the next chapter .
| angelallie15 chapter 17 . 10/23/2013
Can't wait 4 the next one :)
| orionastro chapter 17 . 10/19/2013
very good new chapter, but i think its time that Ed come to the rescue of Charley with amazing magical powers , and Save Charley , and keep away any other Treats to Charley . Cant hardly wait for the next chapter .
| thebellimelli chapter 16 . 9/28/2013
Sooooo cool. I love your Story :D
| MCAnitta chapter 16 . 9/3/2013
Can't wait for more.
While watching Fright Night I had the feeling that there was something else behind all that hatred.
The way Charley glanced at Jerry in the first time they had met is highly revealing.
I hope Jerry and Charley can get together for good.
They are like chalk and cheese, but they are meaningless when set apart.
| Lara F chapter 16 . 8/21/2013
So the runaway birdie came back to his gilded cage...
I'm looking forward to find out how it was the outcome of the grapple at nightclub. I have a hunch that Jerry has given Keith a licking. I dare-say Keith is not going to let it die. He's too much overbearing to do so.
| Lara F chapter 15 . 8/15/2013
In my view, it has been one of the finest chapters you've written so far. Everything is truly suspenseful. I enjoyed seeing Charley brooding over his cruel fate and people around. Charley cheating on Jerry? LOL. Charley had no choice at all. The lovebirds were caught red-handed by Jerry. It's priceless.
Jerry's a f... territorial vampire. I kinda knew the hell was about to break loose. You know what this scene reminded me of? All those western movies where two tipsy thugs come to blows due to a lovely damsel. lol. Keith deserves to get a thrashing. Running away it can worsen Charley's plight.
| angelallie15 chapter 16 . 8/8/2013
I hope it will get easier for charley soon