|Reviews for Vis Insita|
| freshwater chapter 19 . 7/8/2014
Sorry...I couldn't resist. :-)
I particularly liked the character interactions in this chapter. Kylie's sudden contribution was a great idea, as was the group conversation about horcruxes. It's believable that a group of creative minds together could have pulled out these conclusions.
I'm also happy to see that you seem to be gearing up for more activity and adventure, with the break-in/out of Gringotts pending. As always: eagerly awaiting more!
| Passionismywriting chapter 16 . 7/8/2014
Hmm noticed the site I mentioned didn't show up in my review. It's called sink into your eyes. It's web address is .uk. I'm sure if the address will show up, but if you google the full name the site should be the first one that pops up.
| Passionismywriting chapter 19 . 7/8/2014
Hey because I'm a huge fan of this story, that doesn't always review, even though I've written some things on here so I know how it feels to get no response to your work. I'm going to let you in on why I think you aren't getting that many reviews. It's not because you don't have an awesome, well written story. In my opinion, it's because you've come to the party late. All the chips, soda and dip are gone & only the hungover have stayed.( forgive me for the Journey down memory lane) I remember when I first got on this site. In 2006, the height of HP mania and fandom, everyone everywhere was up on HP fanfiction and other types. That was was 8 years ago. Since then the best writers of HP lore have wandered away, gotten bored & basically stopped writing. When was the last time S'Tarken updated? Years I believe. When the best writers stopped writing, the people stopped coming. I'm a huge HP fan myself, & I hadn't been on this site in almost a year. I wouldn't even be on the site now, if it wasn't for you. Most of the people writing stories now, have neither the writing chops, nor the ability to weave a story the way some of the great ones did back in the heydays. It used to be, you would find 3 great/good stories for every 7 bad ones, now it's basically the reverse. With that said, I think if you had written this story in 2006, or even 2010, you would be getting a very different response from the viewers. I know people love your story, it's just the audience has gotten soo much smaller then it used to be. Anyway, have you thought about adding this story to .uk? It's a fanfiction site the mainly ships Harry & Ginny, I think you would get a much larger response & accolade then on here. I check that site way more then I check this one, just because the writing quality is much better ( & I'm a hard core Harry & Ginny shipper). Anyway, I'm glad you updated, I love your work, even if I don't leave a review every time. I can't wait to see what happens next. I'm glad there was a break through, it was getting frustrating reading how they weren't getting anywhere, the character development was important, but the overall plot lagged because of it. It was cool to see how you incorporated a character who you didn't think at one point would live. It hadn't even occurred to me that Kylie might be the catalyst. ( final note: I don't think you should stop posting here, I think you might find it beneficial to post on both sites).
| IHateSnakes chapter 19 . 7/8/2014
Once again, excellent work, Caleb. I was starting to feel like the story was bogged down but this chapter dispelled that notion. I look forward to the next chapter in the story. A
| fmcmahon4 chapter 19 . 7/8/2014
Interesting way to bring Kylie into the Horcrux hunt. I also love how it solves the issue of how the gang finds out about the Horcrux in Bellatrix since they weren't caught by snatchers and brought to the Malfoy Mansion (or at least that hasn't happened yet, if you still intend for that to happen). I'm glad to see Harry and Scott working well together again without any major blowups. I know you can turn this into a 100 chapter story if you tried, but I'm interested to see if Scott gets a proper wand and if that helps him understand the magic of this universe a little more. As always I enjoyed the humor in the story (I always felt there should have been pranks on Madam Prince in the actual series). Good luck with the next chapter alsdkjfalskdfjalskdfj lal ajsdflkajsdlfkjasdlf;k jadlf;
| Nifty Niffler chapter 19 . 7/8/2014
Nice chapter. It's good to see them with a definite direction to move. Okay, I'm just as confused as Ron was when Scott and Harry were talking about "chavs". I can see that it's an insult and assume that it's a slang term. I also have an idea as to what it's slang for. Kind of different that you didn't bother explaining that term for Ron. Not bad, just different.
| Grown Up Ron chapter 19 . 7/8/2014
I like the story though it sometimes get a little to "Teenage boy fantasy" when it gets Spec Opish and some of the "powers" stuff. I also have a really hard time with Scott's near constant sexual harrassment of Hermione. I know its supposed to be played off as joking and teasing but when it makes someone as uncomfortable as it does her and when her repeatedly asking him to stop gets ignored then its absolutely harassment and is completely unacceptable.
In fact I sort of wince whenever I see the two of them start to interact and hope its only for a sentence or two. I do like the OC's, well other than Scott who I can take or leave, which is unusual for me. I am interested to see exactly how the rest of the Horcrux issue is played out given certain differences with canon. I also really like the few Harry and Ron buddy scenes we get, those are very well done.
| Sash'Rahaal chapter 19 . 7/8/2014
Excellent chapter as always, but one thing really struck me in this chapter, and it might not be what you think.
It's been years and years since I've read Harry Potter, or seen any of the films, but when Hermione said "According to Hogwarts: A History," it was a jab right in the memory bone. "Of course she still remembers that damned book from front to back," I thought. Not to say you should make such references all the time, as the way this story has played out has obviously changed Hermione quite a bit, but I can appreciate a good ol' fashioned Hermionism like this once in a while.
Keep up the fantastic work, good sir!
| InfiniteDragon chapter 19 . 7/8/2014
Here's a comment:
Your chapter (as usual) was great. I just wish I didn't have to wait so long between them, but quality trumps quantity.
That all being said... I enjoyed the AN at the end more, especially the last line. lol
| Jelliott chapter 18 . 6/20/2014
Well where to start?
First off, I have read most stories over 100k words on the main fanfiction sites, and if memory serves me correctly this is the FIRST review I have ever felt compelled to write!
I have always had a naturally hostility towards created new characters and often find them tidious to read. I generally think going off Canon is difficult and the personality just isn't there. On that note I want to congratulate you! I would read a hundred stories with Scott as the main POV and equally love his sister and sohpie. The entire multiverse idea is excellant and well established in the story.
I think comedy is extremely difficult to get right and this is the first time a fan fiction has actually made me laugh out loud! Scotts off cuff comments really work and I love the subtle maturity he gains in adult form, a small chance but a noticeable one.
Your writing style is excellent, sometimes the switch in pov makes the storey a little confusing chronologically but it soons makes sense and the storey would lose alot of appeal by changing that aspect. You do well keeping the sexual elements interesting without going full smut on us, a long storey with 70k worth of porn gets a bit much!
That said when is Harry going to stop being a total pussy and ram Ginny so hard his cock comes out her mouth like in the alien movies? ( kinda lost of articulate nature for a second )
Please don't be put off by a lack of reviews, as I said I doubt there are many stories with more I haven't already finished and your the first author, I felt I had to congratulate on a brilliant piece of work.
I would love to see a orginial story following Scotts world one day! When you finish this one! For the love of God finish it , or I will go all Liam neeson, find you and kill you!
One more thing I'm much too lazy to go back and read both stories again and can't truely remember if this actually happened or its just the dillusional ramblings of a mad man but at some point in the first story I believe you refered to Scotts phone as a cell phone! Its a mobile to us tea drinkers and there is nothing worse then americanisms in a English based story! Forgive me if this never happened , it could well have been a different story all together!
Again well done and please continue!
I will be putting you and this story in my favourites!
| Passionismywriting chapter 18 . 6/20/2014
It'll be interesting to see why Harry isn't getting visions from riddle. I'm also excited to who was coordinating the fight at the hollow. I'm wondering will we get a pov from riddle at some point? It would be interesting to know what he thinks of Scott or if he even understands. It seems as if the story is at a standstill. In ttm, Scott seemed more able to change things, in this story he seems to more in a reaction mode, which doesn't really advance the story. I know you have to the moving to a climactic point, something has to break, & it's a credit to you because I have no idea where it'll come from. Also, levity through romance wouldn't go amiss!
| Passionismywriting chapter 17 . 6/20/2014
Enjoyed the girl talk! I'm excited to see where this interaction with Scott goes.
| Passionismywriting chapter 12 . 6/19/2014
Ginny is my favorite character. She brings change to Harry. She's the best way for Harry to understand love. Plus, she's awesome!
| Passionismywriting chapter 11 . 6/19/2014
You have a point, but only if a discussion can come about effortlessly. Don't have two women talk for the sake of being able to say two women talked..
| Passionismywriting chapter 9 . 6/19/2014
Question of my own, do Ron, hermoine & Ginny know about the prophecy?